Tianlong: How Did I Become a Rhythm Master?

The first 50 chapters of the protagonist are well written, and the plot of plotting against others is very good. It's a pity that things start to go wrong at the beginning of chapter 51. It doesn't feel like it was written by the same person. The plot in the middle is very incoherent and inconsistent. The plot characters are treated as idiots. If the protagonist and his mother look exactly the same, how blind must Duan Zhengchun be so that he can't see it? Since that Mingjiao Dharma King is his father's subordinate, do you think he has never met his wife? The protagonist obviously relies on resourcefulness to win, but by chapter 70, he feels like a stupid young man who just went out to explore the world. The control of the characters is not good, and the protagonist's personality changes too much. He is shrewd and looks like a fool at other times.

The protagonist flaunts himself as a villain

It looked fine at the beginning, but the sudden change in style after chapter 50 caught people off guard, and the further you go, the harder it is to justify it.

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Author, why do most people love Qiao Feng or other positive characters? Because the recognition of morality is engraved in the genes of most human beings, this is the buf that humans get after transcending animals and understanding "self-interest through altruism". With this buf, humans can use "common interests" as the goal, set morals, laws, and organize production to make civilization progress. The side effect is that most people will feel uncomfortable when they see immoral behaviors and characters, and in severe cases, it will turn into aggressive behavior. The character and actions of your protagonist will make most people feel unhappy from the bottom of their hearts, and will directly screen out such readers. A person can be selfish and at the same time recognize simple morality and justice, realize himself by obtaining rights and pursue serving the country and the people at the same time. What you have cut down is selfishness and self-realization, and you are not on the same page as Qiao Feng. Spread my hands, I can't imagine how niche your audience is.

Peak Qiao Feng can't catch Tianshan Tonglao's 10 moves? This is a deep misunderstanding of Qiao Fengde! What kind of understanding does it take for a master to take the enemy's head in the midst of thousands of troops?

The author had a quarrel with others, but I think the author didn't understand. The focus of the story is not on wonder, or even on the story, but on the people, turning the fake people into real people. Our virtual works pay attention to seeking truth from the false, that is, using virtual worlds and virtual characters to tell stories that readers can believe. Let readers believe, not just by relying on the letter, nor by insisting that the settings are very realistic. Who doesn't know that they are all fake? You must be able to lie and use fictional plots and characters to arouse real readers' emotions. It's useless to tell the truth ten thousand times. The person you wrote is fake, that is, no one believes it The author has not spent any time on the point. The Eight Parts of Demi-Gods and Dragons is beautiful and the characters are moving. Whether it is Duan Yu Xuzhu or Qiao Feng, they both have charming personalities. The plot and the world are just their stage. The readers come to see them sing this drama. The result is a good fan work, but the original characters are not interesting, and the protagonist is also a confused protagonist. Except for the part about Su Che where his personality charm can make readers believe that falsehood is true, the other characters are too vague. Personal charm lies in a letter. Those with skill can portray ordinary people, and even writers with poor skill can write about idiots with deep obsessions. Heroes are the most difficult to write, so most martial arts fan novels are eccentric, and it is difficult to find the right path.

After reading the free chapter, the author has a good idea; the beginning is also well written, and the initial character has been established: a villain, smart, resourceful, and ambitious; the protagonist has a poisonous point before meeting his mother. The author has a good attitude and recognizes it with a pinch of nose. It is understandable that when he met Su Che, his subordinates made mistakes and created conflicts. After all, the subordinates have limited abilities and need to be slowly trained. It is impossible to show up and have all the talented subordinates, or the education level of the Beggars Gang. There is a limited number of illiterate people per capita; the combination of history and martial arts also simultaneously solves the relevant knowledge required for the subsequent practice of Beiming Shengong and Lingbo Weibu. This paragraph is worthy of recognition. Writing a fanfic must expand the plot. If it is maintained at this level, it will not collapse at all, but: 1. When Yu Su's subordinates made such a big mistake, they almost got everyone involved, and the rewards and punishments are not clear, so you still want to get the upper hand? 2. I didn't practice Tai Chi when I was on the road to recuperate. I practiced Bei Ming without any preparation and jumped out of Tai Chi, which was too abrupt 3. If I was overly concerned about Zhong Ling, it would be okay if it had some use value, but there is no 4. Mu Wanqing's here can be understood as a plot connection. There is almost no time to think about what should be suspected later, but there is no 5. The protagonist's life experience is revealed: the protagonist's background is an orphan. There should be other things left to prove why an orphan's surname is the same as his biological father, but there is no 6. The biggest bug is that the protagonist and The biological mother is exactly the same, and there are too many poisonous spots here: Da Zhen didn't react when he saw it, his head beat, two shocks, and three shocks, but he responded. The Dharma King recognized the protagonist through his tattoo, and then jumped out and told the protagonist that he was exactly the same as his mother. Kakuzu heard that there was a woman who looked exactly like him, and he was given so many clues before that he could not figure it out. This protagonist is the brain of Schrödinger, who is sometimes smart and sometimes stupid That's it for the time being. The sixth point came out and it was completely confusing. Okay, there are some poisonous points that I am too lazy to mention. . . .

Sure enough, the daily detoxification remained unchanged.

In Fengji played by this guy, Quan Guanqing, Chen Youliang, and Lauderno are all rhythm masters, commonly known as rhythm masters.

Basically, Wuliang Jade Cave is extremely poisonous after coming out. It was supposed to take martial arts and go back to practice slowly, cooperate with the Duan family on Duan Yu's line, integrate the Dali branch for development, and then gradually expand some other branches. The result is that the plot after coming out of the cave gives people an inexplicable sense of fragmentation. I have also read the author's explanation. If you write well, everyone will enjoy reading it, so there is no need to explain it. If what you write is not refreshing but a lot of poison, then your explanation is of no use.

The writing style is okay, but there are too many poisonous points. You can feel that the author often writes in a good way, which is full of mistakes and omissions, which directly leads to dense poisonous points one after another. Most people should be fascinated by the parts where the protagonist looks the same as his mother, but is unrecognizable to old friends. Yes, the relevant plot does not appear once or twice. The author knows that many people say that this situation is poisonous, but he does not change it and continues to write it later. If the thread is deliberately buried, there will be no reasonable explanation in hundreds of chapters in the article. This is a problem. Readers will not wait for you so long to explain. Similarly, it is obvious that I have not read it myself after writing it. The author describes the Shen Zhao Jing as being able to resurrect people from the dead. As long as it is not decapitated or heart-plucked, it can be resurrected within forty-nine days. It is no problem for martial arts to have magic transformation. The setting says that three days and seven days are enough. In 49 days, the flesh is rotten. This is a resurrection of skeletons, and they all become necromancers. This kind of little poisonous points that cannot withstand the readers' imagination are very dense. You can see them every few chapters. The author's writing style is good. If this happens too often, readers will be persuaded to give up.

The protagonist only has powerful martial arts, but no warrior heart or strong heart. He thinks about everything, but is not as shrewd as the original work. Quan Guanqing's only weakness in the original work is martial arts. Otherwise, the Beggar Clan would not have You TanZhi as its leader. The protagonist has traveled through the world for 10 years without a single thing falling out. He robbed Duan Yu in the early stage and Xu Zhu in the later stage. There is no other fan who writes like this.

It's okay for you to make up all kinds of nonsense, but do you want to make it more reasonable? It was said earlier that the pig's feet were stripped naked, so why did King Cheng find the scars of the same holy fire on the pig's feet and confirm the identity of the pig's feet. You can create a mother with hind legs that looks exactly like a pig's feet. Then the question is, is this Dharma King who is like an old servant the mother of a pig's foot who has never seen it? He turned a blind eye to the pig's foot pressing against this face, almost killing the pig's foot, but was shocked when he saw the scar?

After getting the two magical skills of Beiming and Lingbo, you found that you have to rely on modern health-preserving Tai Chi to develop your internal strength? And that Tai Chi absorbs the spiritual energy of heaven and earth? Is modern Tai Chi so awesome? I bit the bullet and read a few more chapters, and found out that Quan Guanqing was the son of the leader of the Ming Cult 😄😄😄. After you get the two magical skills, you immediately return to Dali. While improving the economy and strengthening your power, you also practice hard on the two magical skills. Slowly transition to the beginning of the plot 10 years later. You are rich, powerful and successful. Then you will have the confidence to do whatever you want to do.

Did the author make a mistake? It takes 1,400 years to reach the 70th percentile of mastery in swordsmanship. It started in the Northern Song Dynasty. It will not be mastery in 2024, and it will have to be pushed back hundreds of years. This is the swordsmanship of the Mahayana period, not the mastery of swordsmanship. I am convinced.

Coming out of the Wuliang Jade Cave is extremely poisonous. . .

The author is actually an arrogant maniac, only immersed in his own thinking. He has his own way of dealing with any fallacy. He is actually quite arrogant. It seems that the reasons are the same, but in fact he is just like an old-fashioned and will not be changed by others. Everything we say is wrong. The author is the smartest in the world.

It's not a good start... It should be like this. The protagonist wakes up and finds that he has become Quan Guanqing. His whole body is naked. He is about to practice the concave and convex magic skill with Kang Min. He has already arrived at the door. So..., Should he practice this concave and convex magic skill?

Isn't it tiring to write about historical conspiracies and conspiracies in the martial arts category?

We all know that the Northern Song Dynasty valued literature over martial arts. When encountering a small soldier, he would bow his head and pretend to be a grandson. Come on, pig's feet are capable of martial arts after all, and they are not ordinary people. They are really humble.

Quan Guanqing looks exactly like her mother. Can't Prince Duan tell? His old slave couldn't tell, so he caught him and recognized it only after seeing the mark on his chest? The author insists on making the whole plot look the same as him, which makes all the plot unreasonable and his IQ is worrying.

Not to mention the previous small bugs, there are too many bugs in the protagonist's mother recognition process to make up for it: 1. The mother and son look so similar that the separated slaves at home actually need to strip the protagonist naked and see the scars to confirm the hero's identity. Didn't they have any doubts when they met the hero before? 2. Since the mother had a bad relationship with Duan Zhengchun before, and the protagonist is similar to the mother, Duan Zhengchun still can't tell? 3. The protagonist is a time traveler and a veteran in the workplace, but when he sees a woman who looks very similar to himself, he fails to realize that she is his mother? ! You can write time-travel novels however you like, but there are also basic rules, okay? Regardless of facts and logic, just do whatever you want? The author has no brains, so don't the readers have any brains either?

It is recommended that the author read the Chronicles of the Eight Dragons and use Qiao Feng as the historical line to figure out the order of events. It was written in it that on Qiao Feng's 25th birthday, Wang Jiantong also gave Qiao Feng a folding fan, and Xu Chongxiao, the elder of the Beggar Clan, also gave him a painting. This happened in the third year after Qiao Feng became the leader of the gang. The author has written Wang Jiantong to death so early. Is it consistent with the original work? Also, the Luoyang Hundred Flowers Festival happened when Qiao Feng was 28 years old, which was the sixth year after Qiao Feng became the gang leader. Kang Min discovered that the Beggar Gang's decree was made when Qiao Feng was 29 years old. There was a gap of one year. The author made it happen so quickly. Doesn't it match the original work?

The most taboo thing about martial arts fans is not understanding the level of skills. The author wrote that Qiao Feng could be defeated by Tong Lao with more than a dozen moves and didn't want to read it. The combat power system collapsed.

The writing style is also there, the plot is there, and the perseverance is not lacking, but it is a bit inappropriate in the scope of Tianlong. It is so comfortable to create an empty space by yourself, fill in the blanks at will, and write in an unconstrained style. This fan just happened to cover all the expectations in the future. After all, the original work is too powerful, and all aspects of the character and plot settings are solidified. If you don't break through, it will be difficult to shine.

I was deceived by the pinned book review and wasted two hours of my life. A few dozen chapters are too toxic.

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The author's inner voice has really been read several times before. The variety show is so well written.

I've read dozens of chapters of this novel, and to be honest, it's really not that good. I even made a few comments in the comments, but I should say that the author of this book actually has nothing wrong with him. First, he doesn't set a fan value. Second, he doesn't delete comments, and he can occasionally choke on others. Anyway, I feel a bit cute like a northerner. And I admire that I can keep writing despite so many negative comments. So brothers who are not short of money or have free tickets can vote a little. Brothers, don't ask me whether I voted or not. I am a free prostitute, haha.