The Heroine's Journey Begins with Dragon Raja

It's really strange to readers today that so many people who are obsessed with beauty have no one to criticize them, and then they get a lot of scoldings like becoming a literary artist or getting married? I think it's a two-way choice whether you want to read it or not. There's no need to be so violent. Is this uncomfortable in reality?

This book has been ordered since its release. As a cloud player, I didn't expect the author to actually write about Yu-Gi-Oh! But as I chewed and chewed, I realized that the food tasted wrong, and finally I stopped spitting it out, so I would like to give some suggestions to the author from my perspective. Of course - it's just my opinion. If you support it, please give it a thumbs up. If you don't agree, please leave your opinion. Let's get down to the topic: First of all, the book is well written and to my liking, otherwise I wouldn't have followed it up to this point. But looking at the current 5Ds article, I don't know whether it's because of the decline in performance or because the dual game has distracted the author's energy. I clearly feel that the author is getting more and more biased as he writes. I wonder if the author has ever thought about what factors make readers keep reading the author's books? Perhaps 'be more cool and look forward to it' will be the standard answer for many people. In fact, my answer is pretty much the same - I think it is dramatic. What is drama? Unexpected developments and interesting plots are generally like this. It would be more intuitive to explain it using the author's works. I remember reading "Personal Heroine" n years ago, so I recently read through the beginning of the author's works. The opening plot of "Asura Field Players" is very well written. The original protagonist, a scumbag who dated more than a dozen girlfriends in the eyes of ordinary people, was transported by the protagonist and accidentally helped the heroine exorcise the spirit, so he was tricked into becoming a boss by the heroine. Then the heroine, ghosts, and relevant departments all started to pull around the protagonist's waistcoat. This kind of development made me look forward to the follow-up. This is a drama that is well created by using information gaps. The opening chapter of the spiritual sequel "Doomsday Players" is all about the settings. What is the end of the world, what are the people of the doomsday, skills, paths, and unique professions? The game is full of gameplay, and there is no sense of doomsday crisis. Big head... This kind of development is written as an explanatory text, and there is no dramatic development. Sorry... I really can't chew this kind of thing. Back to this book, which is the true sequel to the unique heroine: I have never read the original versions of Dragon Clan and Shana. But the Dragon Clan Chapter is undoubtedly the best written. It is long and many characters have separate plots. Except for a certain passerby Zero... All have character arcs of supporting characters. You can clearly feel what kind of impact the protagonist has on them, what kind of changes they have made, and what different actions they have because of the protagonist. This is very dramatic. After the main goal of the pure white heart was clarified, this direction changed. Entering the Shana chapter, it gradually turned into Mu Qingzhi's personal show. Although there are many interesting things in this world, the only character that can really be remembered is Shana, who plays opposite her. (Because Shana is called the Shakugan in this world...) Similar to the personality problem of the heroine, after going to Noragami, her personality inexplicably changed from a young Karami to a Kannakata... Or a god? (It's been so long that I can't remember) This book is almost written like this. I don't know which chapter after which the protagonist's status suddenly became high, high, high. I started to distance myself from the characters in the new chapter. The identity I used was fake and the purpose was fake. It was difficult to have in-depth interaction. In a world crisis or something, the characters in the new chapter just need to lie down. The protagonist is always busy doing things, and in the end it is the protagonist who escapes to death and is moved. You must know that sincerity can be exchanged for sincerity... This is also the reason why readers will come out and say they still want to see dragon characters as the new chapter is being written. It does not integrate into the atmosphere of the protagonist team of the new chapter. There is another point that I find more uncomfortable, that is, this book does not have a real climax, but it should have. In the Shana chapter, Mu Qingzhi was fully prepared to become the evil in this world, and the foreshadowing was sufficient. I originally thought that we could see the two sides working together to fight against the Lich King Zhi from the inside out, but it turned out that everything was over as soon as Shana woke up. The Black King who can destroy the world when he wakes up, the final boss is suddenly replaced by the abyss, invincible! Stronger than the Black King! Mu Qingzhi was fully prepared, but she blew herself up as soon as they met face to face. Wow, author, why do you always lay the groundwork so well before the climax, but then you just throw away the outline when it comes to the main scene, and it's a disaster? How about the author read the first volume of "Who Hide My Body" on the list and learn from others' explosive points... I originally wanted to persuade the author to arrange a better ending for the 5ds ending, but now it seems that this article is already a dead end. Let's finally come to the main point, the 5ds chapter with the worst data loss and the one I want to complain about the most: The characterization in this chapter is a disaster, many plots jump like an outline. The reason why the protagonist seeks Brother Crab (Fudo Yusei) is because the duel elves are looking for a savior. The main plot should be Brother Crab's appearance, and Mu Qingzhi becomes the grandfather who opens the seal card for him, but playing cards is still firmly locked to Mu Qingzhi - using the identity of the Duel Elf. Basically all the card games that are not the protagonist are passed, and not playing cards in King of Cards is about 0 shaping, so you get the passerby Brother Crab and the rest of the pure passers-by. Of course I understand why the author didn't write it, because there is still some data when writing about daily life, but all is lost when writing about playing cards. Why? Now we have to talk about the audience of Yu-Gi-Oh! The audience of Yu-Gi-Oh must have been exposed to the derivative works of Yu-Gi-Oh, whether they are animation parties, game parties, or real card parties, but in the final analysis, these people are all ignorant of how to play Yu-Gi-Oh. Therefore, fan authors who directly write about Yu-Gi-Oh don't need to, and won't go out of their way to write down the underlying rules. Yu-Gi-Oh players are like this. The author only needs to write down the card game fiercely, but the players have to type the three words Yu-Gi-Oh in the search box. So inspiring! Of course, the above situation has basically nothing to do with the author of this book... Your book cannot be found in Yu-Gi-Oh! The direct audience of your 5ds article is not Yu-Gi-Oh players, but dragon readers based on the title of the book. He is a Yu-Gi-Oh player sifted from the Dragon Clan fans. Even Yu-Gi-Oh players who are sifted out from the Dragon Clan fans and are Shana fans! ! ! So it is very important that other readers who are exposed to Yu-Gi-Oh for the first time can also understand Yu-Gi-Oh! The focus of the first duel should be to explain the underlying rules concisely, at least to make it clear what can and should be done at which stage in a round. But the author focuses on various complex card effects, or original cards... I feel so brain-stricken just reading it, or do you think you will carefully read the skill instructions of each character in each game? Dragon readers can't even understand the first scene, so there's no need to read the rest because everyone has finished. The focus of Yu-Gi-Oh is dueling. How to write a duel that most people can understand? For example: You, the author of "Game of Life", have definitely seen it. The chess played by the protagonist [Blank] in the King Selection Battle has nothing to do with chess, but does it not prevent people who do not understand the rules from watching it happily and full of drama? Language confrontation, delaying time, winning by surprise... It was a textbook game. Not to mention playing cards and spinning tops can also destroy the world. The protagonist cannot appear in the play. The story is far greater than the logic. The same applies to Yu-Gi-Oh! The key point is to arouse the audience's emotions. If you don't understand the purpose of both parties, add a psychological description. If you don't understand the situation, add an off-site commentary. The passer-by and the old man watching the game of cards are actually not watching the game of cards, but the game between the two parties. The structure written by the author is too dry. It is purely about playing cards. Once the game starts, both parties only see playing cards. All operations are playing cards. The dialogue only explains the effect, and there are no unnecessary operations. It is simply beyond the top Mingjing Shisui's heart! Playing cards is written too harshly, and the key point is not grasped. What we are looking at is not what you call out and then play. Storytellers are the most boring people. What real players see is the reverse chain, while passers-by see the dramatic effect. Just like the B-station Yu-Gi-Oh! Ups, they will consciously speed up or skip the storytelling stage, and finally tell you how awesome the last few big brothers are. Then with a "pop", several of your elder brothers were eaten by the opponent and turned into eggs with 0 attack and 0 defense. Isn't this very dramatic? In a wonderful game, both parties need to hide the card effects from each other. The effects only say the ones used. Rare cards are always explained when the opponent steps on them. This creates an information gap. It is very important to only tell the effect when using it, or only show the effect from your own God's perspective! It is a great pleasure to rely on the information gap to break the opponent's defense. On the other hand, Mu Qingzhi always activates a card and explains all the effects once, which seriously reduces points. The bloated text of one page and one paragraph also loses the information gap. With the lack of dramatic conflicts, the plot becomes dry. Even if the author's original card effect should be hidden, it must be hidden, because there is no difference. In addition to the commonly used original cards, we are also blind. There are more than 20,000 cards in Yu-Gi-Oh! There is no need to talk too much about the development of the game, but it should be concise. The mobs that have appeared many times are omitted except for their names (such as offensive and defensive card effects, appearances, etc.). The mobs used as springboards are less inscribed, and the trump cards are detailed. Just talk about the effects of the scene after the two sides unfolded. The focus should still be on the combat stage and writing down the tactical purposes of both sides. Psychological reactions, complaints, explanations, and the effects that some small combos can achieve. You can also write down the audience's reaction, your partners' shock, etc. Appropriately. How to write a dramatic duel? The underworld deck is definitely the most representative. The so-called duel in the underworld that the author begins in Chapter 24 is really sunshine. The Maybach Viaduct can at best make the dragon readers smile, but it is not the real underworld. The underworld is not about having 5 blocks in the backcourt. It is not about the opponent inflicting damage on you and rebounding, the opponent summoning you to be ineffective, the opponent attacking you and destroying it, and then adding a "..." To the opponent when you are done. It is the underworld. The core is to break the opponent's mentality and destroy the opponent's game experience. Not allowing the opponent to play Yu-Gi-Oh, allowing the opponent to break defense and twist is the right way to the underworld. You have to write about your opponent's mentality from being proud to struggling to collapse... On this basis, the simpler the card effect, the better. What is the effect of writing it out? Ahem... I am the King of Strong Mouth. I have never written an article, but I will try my best to simulate it: "Duel!!! " [Mu Qingzhi's hand is 5 → 1] Four covers in the backcourt, please give me more advice! Zayu a: "Tsk... Are you stuck because you didn't get the monster? A true master's duel must grasp the balance of the deck, let the seniors teach you! My turn draws cards! " "Wait..." Mu Qingzhi poked the palm of her right hand with her left index finger: "The moment you draw the card, I activate the trap card to knock it down. You must send the drawn card directly to the graveyard. " [Zayu a's hand is 6 → 5] Zayu a frowned slightly: "This kind of trap is harmless. I activate the magic card fusion and discard the two monsters in my hand to fuse and summon the Flame Winged Man. " Mu Qingzhi raised her hand: "The trap card forced escape device is activated, and the Flame Winged Man on the field will be bounced back to your hand according to the effect. " [Normal Trap Forced Escape Device: Select a monster on the field and return it to the owner's hand] Mu Qingzhi: "The fusion monster cannot be added to the hand, so it returns to your extra deck. " Zayu a: "This... But I haven't done a normal summoning this round. I usually summon the demon blood stone. " [Enchanted Blood Stone: 4 stars, attack power 1950] "Wait! "Mu Qingzhi waved his hand again: " Activate the trap card to force the device out of the device and bounce the magic blood stone back to your hand card. " Zayu a: "..." What a familiar scene, Are they actually two identical trap cards? Zayu a: "Tsk... I can still operate it, even though it has been normally summoned, and monsters with 4 stars or above require sacrifices in the duel before they can be summoned. But the 5-star Trickster can be specially summoned by discarding a card in your hand. I discarded the magic blood stone to specially summon the Trickster. " Mu Qingzhi raised her hand gently... Zayu a: "? ! " He stared at Mu Qingzhi at this moment, feeling uneasy in his heart. This red-haired kid can't force himself out of the device with three cards in a row, right? ... I saw the red figure opposite yawning sleepily, with no extra movement in his hands, Ha... That's good! Zayu A: "In the combat stage, the Trickster attacks directly! " "Wait! "Mu Qingzhi's eyes suddenly became sharp: "At this moment, I activate the Gaika force escape device on the field again, and bounce your Trickster back to the hand card! " [Zayu a's hand is 5→2→1] Zayu a: "..." Looking at the only trickster left in his hand and the empty field, Zayu a only felt a little ridiculous. A red-haired kid who is riding a horse and is born evil. , Are your cards stuck together with glue? Who is a good person fighting like this? Is this still a duel? Now the red figure reflected in Zayu A's eyes has turned into full of resentment... I don't know. How is the writing of the duel? It's not rigorous, but it seems to be easy to understand, right? A bit dramatic, right? In fact, I also wrote a short story about Mu Qingzhi's introductory battle with Yu-Gi-Oh, but I suddenly found that it's almost 4,000 words long and it's too bloated to fit in. I won't release it anymore. The author has already written the final duel, and the 5ds chapter seems to be coming to an end... I really don't know what to say in the end, I wish the author better writing and a prosperous literary career.

Being liked by girls and being liked by boys are the things that most affect the tendency of female protagonists. Although many male videos seem gay, there is no male character possessiveness or romantic tendency towards the protagonist or other male characters. For example, Naruto. Naruto and the two pillars interacted with so many people, and their inner activities ran through the whole Naruto, but in fact, from our perspective, it is actually friendship and bonding. Because the two parties are not in love or possessing each other. Although they regard each other as a very important person, it is just trust in the other person and wanting the other party to recognize their own ideas. The same goes for the Dragon Clan. If Chu Zihang was a woman, nothing would happen to Nono. This argument is just a joke. Chu Zihang and Lu Mingfei felt more like they saw their cowardly self and wanted to give him a hand. However, if Lu Mingfei's attitude toward Chu Zihang wasn't very critical and his eldest brother, who had always been trying to support him, unexpectedly wanted him to get closer to him, then it would have been a success. Similarly, for male-female stories, the male character can trust the protagonist, be a bond, or be an enemy, but it must not be possessive or romantic. Because it's published on a male channel, you have to take care of boys' feelings. No normal boy would hate a man's possessiveness over him, and when reading novels, the reader becomes the protagonist.

Recently I read a few books that were labeled as being single and then had an affair with a male character, which left me in a bad mood. I hope this book is not the same.

The writing is quite smooth, changing from single to married. Old bookworms never care about this. As long as there is no sexual intercourse and the logic of the writing does not conflict, you can read it.

Lu Mingfei: I met a good friend on the Internet. 😡Why did he turn into a girl? 😭I apologize to my brother. A female netizen came to China. She said she would pretend to be my girlfriend to vent my anger. It is said that she is the eldest daughter of the underworld and has practiced swordsmanship since she was a child. I asked her her age and she refused to tell me. He seems to be younger than me. When I thought she was illiterate, she gave me a hard look and even recited the list of apprenticeships and the preface to Prince Teng's pavilion for me on the spot. I don't dare to underestimate her anymore. She speaks Chinese so well that I can't even tell that she is a foreigner by her voice. She gave me a lot of comics and Shana figures. It's great to have such female netizens! You didn't even let me tell them that you were Japanese. You pretended that you were a girl who dropped out of school from a poor family and was already working. You even said that you were now a female network administrator in an Internet cafe and that you were in love with me online. When they laughed at my "girlfriend" for being illiterate. But you took out the admission notice from the prestigious Cassel College and slapped me hard in the face. Young girl, you have played too much pretending to be a pig and eating a tiger. You didn't know how to solve quadratic equations, derivatives, and solid geometry before. You were just pretending. You always had the admission notice from the famous Kassel school in your pocket just to wait for them to laugh at you and then slap you in the face. Your previous sentence of "thirty years to the west of the river, thirty years to the east of the river, don't bully young people who are poor" was also deliberately said for this moment. Then you clapped your hands and asked the female translator outside the window (from Lu Mingfei's perspective) and a large number of subordinates to come in. They all bowed and still spoke in Japanese, but you began to speak Japanese and asked your subordinates to report the numbers one by one. I understand, this is to prove that you are indeed a foreigner and that your men are not temporary actors. You actually brought your passport and showed it to them. It's really yours. 🤓 Today, I, Lu Mingfei, am really the winner in life. I asked the translator lady to translate it into Chinese, 6, and she leaned into my ear and said, "Don't be afraid Mingfei, A Zhi, I am the Dragon King and God of War." Girl, you know how to act cool and show off, and you have a very good command of your temperament and momentum. Now my classmates don't believe that you have been practicing swordsmanship since you were a child and have never gone to school, because you recited the Preface to Prince Teng's Pavilion again. Hey, hey, you're overacting. You even deliberately held my hand with both hands, staring at me with big eyes. This is my first time holding hands. You even pretended to whisper, I admire your acting skills. Why do you want to act like a Japanese mafia lady who is obedient and loyal to me at first sight? Hey, you are not like this at all on the Internet. Hey, I almost laughed out loud now. It was difficult to hold back my laughter, which made me almost laugh out loud. Is it charged? Ah? $10,000 Appearance fee? The landlord doesn't have any food left? The charge is actually just to tease me? ... Sister, I'm really scared by you. I was already thinking about the scene where I was scolded by my aunt, a woman's mouth, a liar 😳 Humph, I don't believe in girls anymore. If there was a good friend like you in Kassel College, I would be willing to go. PS: If the author sees this post, please reply to me~

Either you delete my comment directly, or you act more grandly. What's the point of doing these little tricks? The three replies below my comment are gone. This book is originally written in Chinese for teasing, which is somewhat different from the singles book I think. Is there anything you can't say, or is it that you want to trick other readers into coming in.

Is there anyone (づ ●─● )づ

The handwriting is very good, we like it very much, and hope the author will continue to work hard.

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