Monster Hunter in the Land of Steam

Well, looking at it so far, I won't judge the writing. I'll just talk about the sense of déjà vu in the article (I don't think it can even be called a sense of déjà vu). It can be seen that the author was greatly influenced by Jiangnan's "Heaven's Blaze" and wanted to pay tribute to this work in many places. However, from a reader's point of view, I feel that it is not necessary to completely copy the settings in Tian's Blaze, and even the words and sentences are consistent with each other (such as the can opener and the pain caused to the user when dismantling armor). First of all, I think the fundamental setting of this work should not lie in steam armor, but in the aspects of Taoism, magic dyeing and steampunk; then, I don't think it is necessary for steam armor to deviate from the above three basic settings (for example, steam armor causes great pain to the user when dismantling), and the words and sentences you use to describe the disassembly of armor are basically the same as "The Blazing of the Sky". This will create a strong sense of fragmentation at the setting level, making it impossible for readers to grasp your core settings. Second, it will easily lead to suspicions of plagiarism. Secondly, I think you should try to avoid being suspicious when it comes to steam armor. There are some things that you can totally come up with your own name for, such as the fuel red mercury you mentioned. The name red mercury should have originally come from those sensational pseudo-scientific stories. It is a fictional high-energy-density explosive. In my impression, the only book that uses it as mecha fuel is "The Blazing of the Sky" (of course there may be other books but I haven't read it). As for your work, the name red mercury is not an irreplaceable noun as a key setting. It also does not conform to the naming habits of the Eastern world in the background. In my humble opinion, you might as well call this fuel Shiqi (the name of petroleum in the Song Dynasty). When it comes to steam armor, there are many examples like red mercury. If such terms are used too often, it will be difficult to escape the suspicion of plagiarism. Finally, I think if you want to design a steampunk mecha, it is best to get rid of the influence of Tianzhichi and combine this setting with your previous Taoism and magic dye, rather than separate it as another basic setting. It can be seen that the author still wants to write a good story, so I suggest that you should at least avoid suspicion in this regard, or get rid of the suspicion of plagiarism. If this work one day becomes popular, descriptions that are completely similar to "The Blazing of the Sky" will be fatal.

Except for the various Riddlers, the protagonist behaves like an Erha who has lost most of his memory. He runs to a neighbor's house to hide for fear of being discovered by his owner, and at the same time causes unscrupulous trouble in the neighbor's house. Like a wild beast that has lost its reason? You can never know why the protagonist does what he does. Isn't the original motive for his behavior not to defect from the cult, hide his identity, and then launder his identity? The result is that he fights when things happen, and his brain seems to be of no use to the protagonist. In addition, the complicated settings are not exciting or sophisticated, and the various Riddler operations just feel redundant, a bit like eating Lanzhou Ramen with a glass of red wine. In addition, the protagonist's image is a typical Jiangnan-style bad boy, that is, bad. A killer who inexplicably traveled to a different world and was trained by a secret organization suddenly awakened. The whole world was sorry for me, and I felt like I was in the middle. What followed was a lonely struggle? She is cheerful on the outside but depressed on the inside, a bit too hard. Of course, this does not mean that the writing is not good, there are many merits, and the setting of the Dragon Girl is interesting and exciting, but overall it is difficult to read. After all, there are almost 300 chapters in the series, but there are only more than 70 book reviews, which is evident.

I personally strongly recommend a niche board game, "Dark World" by White Wolf Game Company (there is an excerpt of the setting in the post, you can click to take a look). The setting of this game is extremely exciting. It has a great influence on the basic setting of werewolves, vampires and other fantasy creatures in modern popular culture. It is basically inseparable from the shadow of this setting collection. But there is very little relevant information online. I wonder if you know the Chinese forum "the ring of wonder"? There are many translations, discussions, and settings of science fiction and fantasy games and works. The wod (world of darkness) section of the Chunmei Apple Orchard Forum also has related Chinese translations. I highly recommend everyone to check it out.

[Group friends' paintings] Impressions of the Royal Sky Rider The group friends helped Mu Jiuge's second transformation using AI to run, which is the magic-modified Cronus of EA The children liked it very much and thought it was very good, cool... Share it with everyone! Thank you again for Yutou's hard work and creation

Is there anyone from Saiying like me?

There are too many flaws. If you encounter an enemy magician, you will easily give up without directly killing him. Even if you want to ask for information, you can just cut off the limbs, wring out the tongue, and then search for information from the soul. And isn't there also divination? Just divine the enemy's lair and kill it. There is also the so-called woman of royal blood, who only makes people think that she is an incompetent but messy woman. Others are fighting, and the scattered gravel can kill you. If you don't obey the order and run away, she will come back to cause trouble and become a burden. What you wrote now gives me the impression that even if the protagonist talks about how cold-blooded and ruthless he is, he will not make a move when he encounters a beautiful woman and deliberately lets her go. It is foreseeable that there will be many more such plots. Early rubbing and pretentiousness

In the latest chapter, someone from the Theocratic State presented evidence that conflicted with Mu Jiuge's memory and accused him of being a demon. Then Mu Jiuge fell into doubt and wavering. When he sealed the Martial God before, Mu Jiuge still prevented the immortals from coming to the world and hunting demons "out of his own will", but now he is shaken by whether he is a demon hunter or not. We need to use the "gift from heaven" to confirm that all this is not an illusion. Obviously when fighting against the Martial God, the Martial God also recognized Mu Jiuge as a "mortal" and a "monster hunter". For immortals, history and the past are as fragile as sand castles on the beach. If the past and origin have been changed, it will shake the determination of sealing immortals. It is better to give the "Shenxiao Heavenly Seal" to the Celestial Master to teach it. Judging from the words of Dragon Girl, Mu Jiuge may be the embodiment of the seal on Dragon Girl. The more Mu Jiuge wavers and doubts himself, the weaker the seal on Dragon Girl becomes (and vice versa). Now Mu Jiuge is increasingly infected by the dragon girl's power and begins to waver, which is a manifestation of the seal being infected.

Yuan Baihua (resurrection match) (Thank you so much for the robe being functional) (AI generation + hand repair)

Yes, author, no wonder there is no contact with the religious order, so it's no wonder that the protagonist has to find money by himself. Got in touch

Came from Saiying. The author writes very well, keep up the good work

Chi (Dragon Girl) (AI generated picture)

This rhetoric is not like a newbie, tell me honestly whose vest you are

The last time I saw this setting was in Ember Gun a few years ago.

The author is very diligent and thinks a lot. I just thought too much and set too many settings. You must know that you are writing a novel, not a paper or a manual. The settings cannot be hidden too deep, nor can you put too much into it. You see, in just the first few chapters, we have already written part of the world background, the identity of the protagonist, the appearance of the monster, the characteristics of the power, a female character/plug-in, the system setting and a battle, etc. There are so many things, some novels may take 30 chapters to finish. If I want to use a metaphor, I can only say: setting is the foundation, which supports scene description, characters and other content. Of course, this does not mean that your writing is not good. Your descriptions and settings are undoubtedly excellent enough. It just needs to be appropriately inserted into some simple daily life, decryption or more characters, and some foreshadowing to dilute and expand the intensive settings. But this is just my own opinion. My hobby is quite strange. I have only read novels for a few years, so it is definitely not as useful as the advice given by the real author. Also, the pictures at the beginning of Chapter 5 are pretty good. How can I boast about the starting point? Platinum look?

Like an ember gun🔨

Support the author, don't be a eunuch

For a novel to be popular, you need your article to be understood by most people. The problem is that your novel feels like it imitates Jiangnan's writing style, but you don't have the ability to write the story clearly. Most people will only find it difficult to read your novel, and it is destined to be impossible to become popular.

You are not the trumpet account played by the Bird of Hermes, are you?

Your update is too unstable. I really can't support it. I'm afraid you might cut it that day.

Su Bai, can we order more?

I enjoyed watching it, I hope there will be more updates