The Invincible Heroic Prisoner of Underworld

I have been writing this book review for a long time and hope the author will read it

It's the same disease as the feathered people. I'm not good at writing.

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It is recommended that authors write less about jealousy. Most authors are not good at handling emotional lines. At present, jealousy affects the perception quite a lot.

Seriously, this has something to do with Invincible Heroes, but not much. Mainly just Warhammer, with some random content added. The biggest problem is that there are too many elements. You want everything, but you can't keep it. Wouldn't it be better if it could be streamlined and the characters' stories could be portrayed in depth?

There is one Yumin and you. Your imagination is weaker than that of Yumin. Your writing style is better than that of Yumin, but the good is very limited. Can you spend some time to polish the writing? Your previous books also had a problem, which made my head hurt when I read it.

The biggest problem with this book right now is that there is a precious person who keeps posting paragraphs and comments, and he gets caught up in this kind of thing. Half of the book has been sent. Haven't you noticed that other readers are so annoyed that they don't want to post paragraph comments or even click on them?

My initial worries have come true. The handling of female characters is really not good, and there are more and more female characters.

The author's character creation is too monotonous, and he doesn't even have any

It has almost the same routine as the previous book, and almost the same problems, but the result is that the plot falls apart and the ending ends.

I thought of some heroes that would be suitable to serve as the protagonist's subordinates. Since the top and most famous heroes have not emerged yet, there are still some heroes who are not as famous as Yue Fei, Xiang Yu and Guan Yu, but are still very powerful. We also consider that the main character is called the Prison Master of Underworld, and we can also consider celebrities related to ghosts. For example, Bai Wuchang - Xie Bian, Hei Wuchang - Fan Wujiu, Ji Kang (Ji Kang is famous for killing ghosts, and everyone knows about the Seven Sages of the Bamboo Forest, but they may not necessarily know that he is the Central Ghost Emperor, which means he has high potential), Zhong Kui. For example, in The Romance of the Three Kingdoms, the southern barbarians were tall and strong, with superior strength; Liu Laozhi, the famous general of Beifu, was a vanguard fighting for the crossing during the Battle of Feishui, and defeated the famous former Qin general Liang Cheng, and defeated Fu Jian's grass and trees. They are all soldiers, and the wind is roaring; Qibi Heli of the Sui and Tang Dynasties, a naturalized Hu tribe, a famous founding general, guarding Li Shimin's grave for generations; Zhou Dewei of the Five Dynasties, the first gun of the Five Dynasties; Ge Congzhou of the Five Dynasties, a Ge of Shandong, nothing Don't tease; Wang Yanzhang of the Five Dynasties was second in the world in the novel, probably similar to the status of Yuwen Chengdu in the Sui and Tang Dynasties; Li Dingguo in the late Ming Dynasty was a famous king of the Second Poutine and a famous general in the fight against the Qing Dynasty; Shi Dakai of the Taiping Heavenly Kingdom was a famous general in the fight against the Qing Dynasty. , Was born in poverty and forced Zeng Guofan to dive into the water to escape. He had the most charming personality in the Taiping Heavenly Kingdom and was highly praised by his own people and enemies. He dared to fight and fought in more than a dozen provinces, and was known as "Shi Gandang". In the middle and later stages, you can also include: Huang Feihu (Emperor Dongyue, in charge of the eighteenth level of the underworld), Overlord Xiang Yu (unique throughout the ages, ghost hero), Bai Qi (the God of Killing is absolutely in harmony with Huangquan Netherworld), Guan Yu (Guan Sheng Emperor, the great emperor of the Three Realms of Martial Saints who subjugates demons), Chi You (God of Demons, God of War), Xingtian (who will not die even if his head is cut off) , God of War), Yue Wumu (Martial Saint), the deaths of these people all have very interesting stories, and they are definitely suitable for the Huangquan series (in fact, it does not have to be in the later stage. Some characters can also be upgraded early. The early characters have feelings. It is best not to come out too late in SSR. Liu Bei's Guan Zhang Zhaoyun came out at the beginning)

You can really create a portable space, just like Yumin did. His protagonist's portable space is basically standard. When they build things in the space, it doesn't make the protagonist wander around outside at all.

Advice from an old bookworm~

If you don't want to steal from the author, all the protagonist's people in the God Simulator are flesh and blood. This is your biggest shortcoming. Of course, he writes a piece of shit about war and fighting. Don't learn from it As for the old books of the same genre, you can learn from them: Lords of the World and Online Games. You can also copy the setting of the best lord. To be honest, the author of your protagonist has written several books. It is not like a territorial person who develops his own army. Like a guerrilla, he can move to another place after fighting. After the soldiers are defeated, he can fill it up with money at once 🤔

I have a question. Since the setting has an upper limit, strengths and weaknesses, and the ability to transform, is there anyone who can play other characters? You can learn to play part-time and pay for it, otherwise wouldn't those who choose other characters be idiots? ? ?

After reading 4 and a half chapters, I also read the outline of the previous book Escape. . . Author, your outline is fine and the setting is attractive, but the writing style really needs to be polished. I wonder if you will immerse yourself in reading a chapter after writing it. There are too many subconscious conjunctions. Just after reading two paragraphs to get a sense of story and immersion, the immersion is interrupted by words with the flavor of explanation such as "because", "so", "however" and "just like this". The paragraphs that were originally used to advance the plot have suddenly turned into narration-style explanations. In fact, if you delete 80% of the conjunctions directly, your thinking will follow the plot very smoothly.

I don't understand. Among the several specialties given at the beginning, the first adds 5 points of defense, the second adds 3 points of attack and 2 points of defense, both of which can give 5 points of campaign attributes, which is equivalent to the protagonist rising to 5 battle levels at once. The fifth summoned book ghost only obtains a random temporary unit of levels 1-3 that can last for up to 5 days. Even if the character breaks out and summons level 3 units, how can it be compared with the 5 points of battle attributes?

Good guy, you secretly opened the book and shocked the book lovers, right?

When reading other books, you only need to read two or three lines at a glance. When reading this book, you only need to scan three or five words per page. More than half of each chapter is setting and narration. The plot progresses slowly and is not exciting.

Is this a purely online game, or is it a game that revives reality?

I hope the heroine is not a dragon god, even a super-powerful dragon descendant, otherwise it will be very uncomfortable in the later stages. A strong woman and a weak man will be very awkward, especially in this world view, because it is impossible to rebel. In addition, the heroine is a person with three souls and seven souls, which is not pleasing. Do you want to say that they will be one in the future? In addition, it is best if the dragon god does not only give birth to a dragon descendant, such as giving dragon blood, etc., And other dragon descendants will naturally awaken. The attributes are better. For example, Cathay will have 🐉 bloodline after being radiated by the Dragon God. {"NickName":"Western Pole Supervisor","UserId":151540648}{"Nic kName":"West Pole Supervisor","UserId":151540648}{"NickName":"West Pole Supervisor","UserId":151540648}

The Warhammer Game Lord article seems to be written by an author named Three-Tailed Comet. Which platform is the book on now?

For now, I can write it. Come on.

Come on, the one who summons Long Live, come on...

Lingtaolou (with a chance to advance to a supporting role) Name Race Profession Category Soldier Hero Lord Class Background

It's not enough to read at all. I saved a few chapters and finished it in a short time.

After reading more than ten chapters, I thought the word count was very small, but I quit and read 180W, killing and killing.

Have you cut it? I haven't spoken to you for two days.

What's going on? There's been no movement for 3 days.

The evil green moon is in the sky, and the evil blue stars are rampant. The chaotic power of subspace penetrates, wanting to tear apart the space and come again. The survivors of the medieval Warhammer Endgame and the Blue Star humans jointly deployed a new line of defense to resist the invasion. Yin Qingsong stood on the land of his hometown and looked around. "What are you doing?" Nurgle asked curiously. "I'm making soup." Yin Qingsong pointed at a big pot in front of him and smiled. "Can I have a try? I am very confident in making soup and I am a well-known gourmet." "No, wait a little longer, we still need some heat." "What are you waiting for?" "Waiting for you to get into the pot!" Poof, with a hammer, the brown-green rotten meat fell into the pot, and Nurgle reunited with the brothers Khorne, Tzeentch, and Slaanesh. "You will regret it!" The four demons cursed in unison. "No, I am the master of my home!" Yin Qingsong pounded the pot a few times with the golden hammer of the drum and urn, and used the broad blade of the Wuhu broken door knife to act as a lid to cover the mouth of the pot, and said with a satisfied smile.