Qin Shi: I Control the Eight Wonders

There is a tendency to write self-interested articles, so let me take stock of them: 1. The protagonist is injured and does not use both hands. I was just about to comment on why the protagonist does not use both hands. I found that in the comments of the article, the author replied that except for Fenghou Qimen, other stunts are incomplete. You should write it down! ! 2. Also, the protagonist in the article admits that he is not a Taoist, saying that he has poor qualifications and is just a handyman. Taoists look down on him. At first he calls himself a casual cultivator, and later he calls himself a doctor. Did you learn the Taoist mental method of air? You don't know that in ancient China, if you join a certain sect and learn their mentality, apart from being a spy, you are already considered a Taoist. The protagonist did not come by his own ideas. The Taoists have every reason to kill the protagonist and recycle the skills! Besides, in the Warring States period, when a bamboo scroll with classics could be used as a family heirloom, and when knowledge was monopolized by the upper class, it was impossible for the protagonist not to read it! So you dare to say that you are not a Taoist? ? 3. The author said that the Eight Magic Skills can easily cause people to have inner demons. I can understand it. After all, the Second Creation and Fenghou Qimen can make people fall into inner madness and become possessed. It's no problem, but you made the inner demon appear as a woman and be able to communicate with the protagonist like a normal person. I am speechless. Not to mention that the seven emotions later need to be integrated with the sword spirit to become a human. Xu Qingxian, right? ! You are only proficient in Fenghou Qimen, how can you transform into a human with your ultimate emotional fusion sword spirit? ? I'm too lazy to talk about the other bad points. I couldn't stand it until about chapter 30. You write about people from the Qin Dynasty, and at least you respect some traditional Chinese culture. The article is mixed with a lot of the author's personal interpretation of the Qin Dynasty, which makes it hard to read! Flashed!

In the Qin Dynasty, there was corn in the world, and it seems that because of the existence of mechanism technology, the steel production was very high, and there was gunpowder, and there was also the Chiyujin Gundam 😰

The inner demon you wrote about constantly talking to yourself is really a failure among failures.

I can't pass this level of inner demons. I'm a failure.

If Daluo Cave Temple is for divination, wouldn't it conflict with Fenghou Qimen? Qimen has divination. I remember that his wish was to see through everything, and then he obtained Daluo Cave Temple.

It is obvious that the outline has not been prepared, and the taste is wrong. The performance of the Eight Wonders can be referred to under one person, and the practice method must be referred to the Enlightenment Chapter. The Eight Wonders are techniques, not methods. Taoism has the distinction between skills, methods, and magical powers. For one person, the Eight Wonders are techniques, the thunder method is a method, and the Celestial Master is similar to magical powers. The skills are magical, the Dharma needs to be cultivated, and the magical power depends on enlightenment. There is no strong or weak distinction among the three, but these prerequisites are that the protagonist has enough qualifications, otherwise he will not be able to get in. A mortal can say that there are no taboos and he can do whatever he wants, because his ability will always be an outsider from the perspective of practice. The deeper a person practices, the more bound he will be by the rules, so what he seeks is transcendence. Your writing style is very simple, suitable for writing silly and sweet love stories. Cultivation of life is the starting point of practice. The protagonist you wrote is too fake and empty. He has no life and life of his own and is just a puppet without a brain. So you are just enjoying yourself, just writing whatever comes to mind.

The pictures are so long-winded, the plot has no progress, the inner activities are too much, and the dialogues are all useless.

In the first three chapters, the protagonist stayed alone at the crossing point, and then watched as he stepped on the strange door behind the wind that suddenly launched, and suddenly felt a desire to devour the surrounding life. Finally, the wolf came. I just wrote three chapters. Can I still read it? Brother, you can't screen readers like this! How could you be like this? Just use the sieve with the largest number of meshes first and look at it later. If the author still likes brainwriting so much, he will really have no choice but to give up.

I was quite surprised when I saw the title, so I won't go into the specific content. Goodbye!

When Qi Qing has a self, the poison will be gone!

It's too dull. When talking to someone, the sentence you say may only be a short paragraph, and then the author writes out for you the complete mental journey of the character when he said this sentence in five or six paragraphs. It's not that I can't understand the dialogue. Forget about the main characters, you can give several paragraphs to analyze a single sentence of a gatekeeper. The section about overcoming the tribulation took seven or eight chapters to write. No serious fantasy or fairy tale is as good as you. Often write the same sentence several times in different sentences in consecutive chapters. Change the method of hydrology. The part where Shan Mingzhu targeted Xu Qingxian, she even revealed the complete reasoning process at the end. There are many similar things. For example, if you write about Han Fei reasoning about things based on a few details, forget about important scenes. You can also write out the reasoning process for small things. Is this a detective story? Lots of speculative details. There are few conversations between the "brother and sister" that are simple. They are written like two people fighting in the palace, analyzing each other's every word and action. It's really too watery.

Let's change the name to "Qin Shi Mingyue: Two or three things about my sister and I who have eight magical skills". This name is more appropriate.

I wrote this conversational demon just for the sake of word count. A batch of water. Goodbye.

You come out as soon as you incarnate, one chapter and half a chapter. Don't you feel uncomfortable with the plot advancement?

It is recommended that you write more about the Eight Magic Skills and less about the inner demons interjecting. The protagonist has inner demons following every few words he says, so there is no need to use them so frequently 😰

There are too many inner dramas. Either write them more relaxedly or write them more meaningfully. Some of them are pretending to be deep but seem deliberate.

I felt so awkward after reading ten pictures. There are a lot of psychological descriptions and complaints. Moreover, I introduced myself to Nianduan before as an ordinary Taoist disciple. After a while, when the Mohist giant came to Jinghu Lake, he also said that he was a casual cultivator? Also, this Mohist giant has an inexplicable feeling about the protagonist's murderous intention. The protagonist has not practiced Yin Yang, so it is impossible to tell from the aura of practicing that he is wearing a Taoist robe. Moreover, Duan Murong also briefly explained how the protagonist came to be, and how did he have the murderous intention towards the protagonist?

It's outrageous. It's completely unnecessary before 70 photos.

In the future, can you open a novel about the world of the bright moon in the Qin Dynasty, about the girl Madam Hu and the girl Hu Meiren?

When will I start the latest novel?

Will the next novel be a novel about the world of Mingyue in the Qin Dynasty?