I Am Traveling Across the Sea in the World of Cultivating Immortals

I have ordered nearly 300 chapters in total. I felt good about it since it was released. It took me three days to read it. Let's talk about the advantages first First of all, the writing style is normal, the style is mature and has a strong mortal flavor, and the overall logic is smooth. Secondly, the logic in the article is normal, the protagonist's behavior is consistent with the character, the causes and consequences of the events encountered are clear, and there is no very poisonous plot to reduce intelligence. Furthermore, the pace of the article is friendly, the pace of development and competition is normal, and the transitions have obvious growth. There is no routine of getting stuck in one game after another and then escaping, nor is there over-development that makes the article boring. Finally, the article as a whole feels very mature to me. I can clearly understand what kind of article the author wants to write, and he does not change his style halfway. Let's talk about the shortcomings First of all, what I want to complain about the most is that there are too many typos in the article, and some places even affect normal reading. It makes me feel like I am reading on a pirated website (helpless). I hope the author can check it before publishing it. At least read it once and feel that the article is smooth before publishing it. Secondly, I don't know whether it is the author's writing habit or a special purpose. Each chapter must be "continued", which greatly affects the reader's perception. It can be broken into chapters to attract attention. However, it is not necessary to repeat the beginning of the chapter. Some repetitions also cause the previous and next chapters to be stuck (this feeling is very obvious after reading it in one go). It can be said to be a bad habit. "Continuing" can be a simple narration to recall the previous text, but it is not a simple repetition, which will make the reader feel that it is unclear. Finally, there is no break away from the shackles of traditional immortality writing. What is a shackle? It does not look original at first glance, but looks like a second creation. There can be mortals, eternal green, lingering in the demon world, etc. In the article. Shadows of famous immortality writings, but you cannot really apply the framework inside, which means that the style of becoming a mortal fails and being ordinary. People's style should have their own opinions in the world view, practice view and interpersonal view, and bring out the old and bring out the new, so that it can be interesting, rather than second creation. The second creation is to satisfy the deficiencies that are not in the original text or to divergence based on the content of the original text. The original text must have its own thing. I mentioned this in my previous chapter. It is indeed difficult to innovate, but this is the only way from ordinary articles to sacred articles. The author has indeed added new things, but the overall article has not changed significantly. The shadow of mortals is too heavy, whether it is the world view or the overall writing routine, and the vast number of immortal articles in recent years. The homogeneous articles in the book are too similar, and the homogeneity leads to involution. If there is no novel point of view, it will soon be forgotten by everyone. The point of interest of this book has been exhausted, and there is no new point of view. The protagonist still writes according to the routine of ordinary mortals, resulting in this book being tepid. After writing so much, the author has persisted in writing for more than half a year despite the tepid results. Writing a book itself is a mentally and physically boring task. The author's ability to persist for so long and still write shows that he really wants to write well. Yes, I have read more than 20 books on cultivating immortals. Some of them are unfinished, eunuchs are eunuchs, and hydrology is hydrology. There are only a few that are really completed and read. Writing a book is really tiring, especially if you have to keep writing when there are not many people to read it. The author has to change his mind if he wants to write well. It is very possible that improving the article will improve the performance of the book. The shaping of the article is still very high. I hope this book will get better. This is also the true wish of an old bookworm who has read online articles for more than ten years. There are too many immortality articles that have collapsed halfway.

You are a garbage spiritual cultivator again. I don't know how you, a person with incomplete Five Elements, survived.

As soon as I saw Three Views of Normal, I didn't want to read it anymore. I talked about the three views of the earth in another world, so why not write about the city?

If you write a villain, several chapters will be his monologue.

At least ten golden elixirs are reasonable. Three golden elixirs and one Nascent Soul are nonsense.

In fact, everything else is pretty good, but it's strange to see people belittling elixirs every time. The Mirror-Breaking Pill consumes potential. Is the Foundation-Building Pill considered a Mirror-Breaking Pill? It is true that the elixirs used to improve mana are erysipelas, and there is no need to belittle them like this.

I'm not saying that. I feel that many readers nowadays are very violent and want to kill people at every turn. I think the character design is disgusting, so I don't think so.

It's a good book, very appetizing, but why is it not popular🤔️

There is too much nonsense, the language is not concise, and it is very tiring to read.

Keep your head down and update, look up at the road, listen to the window with both ears, correct it if there is any problem, and encourage it if there is no problem. Come on Oli!

It's very similar to a certain book. Other people have nine cards, and you have four. In addition, if you have a cauldron but don't know how to refine weapons, you can't make elixirs. So what use is this cauldron to you? If my setting fails to integrate with the plot, my technique will be half-failed.

I thought it was written using AI intelligence. Many of the plots and plots in it are found in other books.

There are too many irrelevant things. It only takes half a chapter to fight a villain, but several chapters to describe his mental journey. This is really not good.

😥 What is the difference between the boiled eggs given by the sect and those given by the ancestor of Yuanying? If you have to do something, why should the author highlight the protagonist's caution in boiling eggs?

The greatest goodness is like water. Water benefits all things without dispute. He is hated by everyone, so he is close to the Tao. I hope the author writes that the supreme good is like water, not just water, but close to the Tao, the kind that can do anything 😏

The writing form at the beginning is now obsolete. The three books I read all started with Three Lives and Three Worlds. Give me the exact same beginning. They all come out of fantasy

The golden elixir in Xuanyuan's relics is actually safer than the secret method. Because the relic is known to the ancestor of Nascent Soul. Something is wrong if you give me the secret method. The secret method usually matches the skill. If there is a secret method, people will suspect that you have the skill.

Is the beginning and part of the transition of this book modeled after "I am Eternally Green in the World of Immortal Cultivation"? Looks familiar to me

No, it's so miserable, only eight book friends spent the money

As far as I can see, Chapter 14 is a good start in terms of usage. Although it borrows a lot from other books, it also has its own flavor. However, there are some things that need to be complained about, such as the classification of monsters and the name change of Zhao Zhu. These two are obviously poisonous points and you still have to copy them. The level of monsters was complained about by mortals back then. In addition, with the current cultivation system that is improving year by year (Qi Lianjian Foundation Pill = first level, second level and third level), except for common mortals, few people anymore Use that problematic system, and then change the name of Zhao Zhu, which is simply a change of loneliness, it is better to give him a Taoist name In general, the book is still well written, has its own ideas, and also writes its own taste. It was not popular in the first two months, which is more or less related to these poisonous points.

Can't you follow even one picture a day? Remember to pay the debt you owe.

The writing is okay, but the update is too slow. I can't update it twice a day. I have to update it at least once a day. Otherwise, you wouldn't be so aggressive?

Should this book continue to be written or should it be a eunuch? What do you think about the way updates are discontinued and updated whenever they feel like it?

Ever since the Mortal's Cultivation of Immortality came out, there have been countless imitators. Most of them have average skills, but this one is one of the few that is very good. Gods are made by mortals. However, immortal cultivators and mortals are already at different levels of life, and cannot be replaced with a mortal mentality. Some readers hope that the protagonist can kill all heaven and earth, dominate the fairy world, and no one else dares to disobey an order; some hope that the protagonist will have three wives and four concubines, and that any female cultivator from different planes who wants to have a relationship will have a group of wives and concubines. Everyone wants something different, and this is everyone's way. What I appreciate most about this book is that the protagonist tries to avoid cause and effect, has a strong will and good character, and the golden finger is just right. It should be noted that ordinary people are afraid of consequences, and Bodhisattvas are afraid of causes. The entanglement of cause and effect requires more energy. The protagonist Nascent Soul has no bottleneck in the early stage, but his spiritual root qualifications are slightly inferior, so it is right to avoid cause and effect. Besides, talking about the nature of mind, there is nothing wrong with the fact that there is only one in the immortal world, and there are many wives and concubines. If you want to be born in the world, you must first enter the world. In mythology, the Emperor of Heaven experienced thirteen thousand kalpas after reincarnation and before ascending to the throne. It can be seen that the end of the immortal path and endless life expectancy to transcend, a will that will endure through all tribulations is indispensable. The overall writing style is smooth and the fighting descriptions are more vivid. The atmosphere in the sect is not cold either. I think that most of the monks in the family are too weak-minded to become great talents, so I appreciate the development of the sect and the inheritance between master and disciple. Of course, where there are people, there are rivers and lakes, and interpersonal relationships are handled well. We also deal with the enemy as soon as possible to prevent others from lying on their hands for thirty years to the east of Hedong and thirty years to the west of Hexi. There is also just the right amount of goodness. Some people may think that some little girls should be killed, but killing innocent people without any cause and effect of hatred, I think is too extreme, and it is sad for the inner demons. Price is also handled relatively appropriately. Then let me talk about something that I personally think is unreasonable. First of all, in this book, the defensive magic weapon is very fragile. Even the best defensive magic weapon can be easily damaged. Attack is far stronger than defense. Logically speaking, there shouldn't be such a big difference at first. Then the protagonist encounters a battle and is not sufficiently prepared in advance. Most of them are talismans, which is fine, but when building the foundation, I also took an ordinary high-grade defensive magic weapon. The storage bag obviously contained tens of thousands of spiritual stones. One-time treasures such as Tianleizi were not seen at all, and I never saw the talismans during the foundation building and fighting. Logically speaking, the power of talismans is lower than that of magic weapons, and they are not used for golden elixirs. Then the ruler magic weapon that gave treasures at the beginning disappeared in the later stage. As for the plot, the study of talismans and formations can be described in more detail. If you want to reduce the number of words, you can go in this direction instead of writing about irrelevant people's messy things and deviating from the topic. Moreover, every time you give a treasure, you get too much easily. You can download a few more copies to increase the number of words. For example, in the seaside dungeon in the later stage of foundation building, you can become rich all of a sudden, one after another. You only need to eat delicious food once in a while, but you will feel overwhelmed even if you eat so much at once. It is recommended to add more, to understand the skills, understand the natural world, refine the heart in the world of mortals, study talismans, fight more sea monsters, save materials, and study formations. This kind of word count is better than writing about how unrelated people fight. There are a few books on mortals that I personally like, including Big Brother in the Mortal World, Scientific Cultivation of Immortality among Mortals, and Jiang Chuan. About these few books, the rest are mediocre and not worthy of my evaluation, and I have no impression. Now there is more of this book on Ambrosia, so come on, the author!

Why don't you occupy a spiritual land, cultivate some, grow elixirs, teas, trees, bees, and fish? Collecting resources is no better than fighting alone. The setting of the protagonist not taking elixirs is extremely poisonous.

The author can learn from it (I practice immortality in Taoism, and I will live forever in the Demon Sect)

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It has a strong flavor of a mortal's journey to immortality It's okay, I just hope the author can write his own stuff