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Before Chapter 80 is released, I really can't stand it anymore, so I will write a long book review to complain about it. I don't plan to abandon the book for the time being Let's talk about the advantages first. In the starting point of the "killing and decisive" trend of wanton and reckless behavior, it is quite commendable that the protagonist is a decent young hero who sticks to his original intention. It is also good to appropriately intersperse some elements of the imperial court, which enriches the world view and plot But the last few chapters before it was released were really confusing. I don't know whether it was in a hurry to release it or because the plot unfolded too abruptly. Suddenly Tian Boguang and Monk Bujie came out, had a fight and cut off Monk Bujie's hand and ran away. Suddenly, the Six Immortals of Peach Valley appeared again, cut off an arm and ran away. He turned around and killed Tian Boguang directly, and then started fighting with Linghu Chong. This paragraph is an important introduction to the original work. In addition to these people, people from the Sword Sect, Yi Lin, Feng Qingyang, Yue Buqun, Songshan Sect, etc. Are involved. Here, there is a rowing Linghu Chong, a protagonist, Tian Boguang will die if he says it, the Six Immortals of Peach Valley will be disabled if they say to Monk Bujie, and Tian Boguang will be disabled if he dies. Hu Chong got so excited for no reason that he started to fuck with the protagonist. The protagonist also had a temper and wanted to take him down on the spot. This group of people, especially the protagonist, had weird behavioral logic and were really a bunch of bastards Tian Boguang had lusted after his wife and daughter. He had done countless evil things. Of course he deserved to be killed, but he couldn't be allowed to die in an unexplained way. That's not to say His sudden departure as a person, but as a character, was too abrupt. Tian Boguang's death was simply to intensify the conflict between the protagonist and Linghu Chong, and there was no foreshadowing. His death was too deliberate Looking back, the Thirteen Taibao of Songshan also died too easily, but there was an antecedent to it. The protagonist knew Knowing their conspiracy, they bumped into them and took action. It would be very disadvantageous for the protagonist not to kill the other party so that they could be on guard. Whether it was for self-preservation or for the benefit of Huashan, they had to try their best to kill the other party. However, Tian Boguang's motive for killing was really insufficient. He lightly said "Everyone can kill evil demons and outsiders." Do you think it is enough for the author? The protagonist first didn't see Tian Boguang commit the crime, and secondly he didn't listen to the victim's confession. How could he have such deep hatred and want to kill someone? Or is it an execution-style killing just for the sake of "eliminating demons and defending morality"? You have to say that his picture title is similar to that of Yue Buqun, otherwise he would not just kill him on the spot in front of Linghu Chong but capture him. It seems that killing Tian Boguang was all to anger Linghu Chong (in terms of plot) Halfway through writing, I reviewed these chapters again. From the moment the monk never quits appeared, the protagonist became inexplicably "angry" "Extremely", "laughing in anger", "look at their verbosity", "have been holding back their anger for a long time", their actions are extremely emotional and illogical, they want to steal the son-in-law, how can you get so angry In the original work, Yue Buqun insisted on letting Linghu Chong kill Tian Boguang because he, as a gentleman's sword, wanted to prevent the eldest disciple from making friends with lewd thieves. What a stain, to earn some reputation for the senior disciple, and Yue Buqun forced Linghu Chong to kill people, but killing him himself had no effect. Later, Linghu Chong hurt himself and acted, and the monk refused to disrupt the situation, so Tian Boguang put it aside. There were many twists and turns, but it was very reasonable, rather than killing someone out of anger And this The paragraph includes the previous chapters. The most important point is that the series of actions of the protagonist interrupts the interrelated continuous plot of Hengshan, Jianzong, Songshan, and the Six Monsters of Peach Valley, as well as the clues in the middle. Playing the game can progress one task at a time, but this is a novel that must be interconnected to be interesting. Furthermore, the plot is not only confusing, but also too simple. When we go to Hengshan, we kill a bunch of people in Songshan in three strikes, five and two, and the crisis is resolved. We go to Zhongtiao Mountain, fight and kill a bunch of people in Songshan. The swordsman follows up the mountain, and goes back to Huashan to fight again and enter the plot of Linghu Chong Kill all the people who promote the plot, and the protagonist has to take the initiative to trigger all events. Is it really possible to play an online game? The protagonist is burdened with the task of "triggering the main plot", which makes all the actions of the protagonist very deliberate. It is not that he, as a time traveler, wants to follow the plot, so he is deliberate, but that the author has no other characters available and can only let the protagonist trigger the plot, so he is deliberate. The original plot introduces events one by one, and it has to be completed in a few chapters. Then the combat power is expanded, new villains are introduced, and events are continued to trigger and resolve events. Finally, it falls into a cliché The interesting story is not about breaking beans or threading beads, but about weaving a web. Characters and roles, events and events must be connected to be interesting. An enemy pops up, kills it, another enemy pops up, kills it again, a teammate pops up, accept it. What's the point of writing such a story? Japanese light novels still buy illustrations and give toilet paper. What can you buy here and give away? I was quite optimistic about this book at the beginning, but now I'm still a bit disappointed. Let's read it again in a while 😔

I want to write about martial arts and also want to include history. What can I say? The idea may be very high and the writing may be unpredictable. The main reason for reading this book is to read martial arts for pleasure. If you want to read historical texts, there are plenty to read on the History Channel, so there is no need to waste time here. The plot is a bit bland, it's tasteless, and it's a pity to abandon it.

The role model in the world of martial arts is Zhang Sanfeng. The protagonist died early in his previous life. In this life, he should learn from Zhang Sanfeng. Practicing martial arts is not to fight, but to live longer and better than anyone else. Those who can only fight will die. He often walks by the river without getting his shoes wet. He takes care of the chivalrous and righteous things when he encounters them, rather than running around for the sake of doing chivalrous and righteous things.

The biggest flaw of this book is that it weakens Wang Chongyang's innate skills. Wang Chongyang can be invincible in the Condor Shooting with only a small degree of innate skills (according to the author). The protagonist of this book has great innate skills but cannot beat Dongfang Bubai. He can only fight Zuo Lengchan and Xiang Wentian at a 50-50 draw. How much do you have to look down on innate skills? Even though they are all grown up, they still have a 50-50 fight with a random passer-by, who is still a character in Swordsman. It's like Wang Chongyang and Sha Tongtianke Zhen evil and his like are fighting back and forth. Isn't this funny? This is very discouraging.

I have never seen such a stubborn author. The more readers don't want to read, the more they want to write. 😅

The best martial arts fan in recent years. I hope that the development will be stable in the later period. Don't imitate other people's writings about Dongfang being a woman. Lao Yue and Yu Canghai compete for evil sword skills. Actually, before Linghu Chong became famous, no one took warding off evil seriously. The escort agency is at the bottom of the martial arts world. Who would take the inheritance of a bodyguard head seriously? Otherwise, the Lin family would not be able to survive for so many years. The Condor King Wang Chongyang learned the Nine Yin Scriptures himself, why didn't he allow his disciples to learn it? I know I can't keep it, and I'm afraid of causing trouble. How could the Lin family, He De, be safe and sound for decades? Yu Canghai came to trouble the Lin family because Zuo Lengchan asked for directions. Otherwise, instead of busy looking for evil sword manuals, he would take the Lin family and his wife all the way to wash their hands with some kind of golden basin? Why? In his eyes, the sword manual to ward off evil is not as important as Liu Zhengfeng's golden basin to wash his hands. Dongfang was hiding from embroidery, and the Wuyue Sword Sect had no external pressure, so internal conflicts broke out. Zuo Lengchan wanted to merge the factions, but was afraid that the other famous sects would interfere, so he asked Yu Canghai to explore the way and wipe out the entire Lin family, even the provincial branches. He killed innocent people indiscriminately and was even more demonic than the demonic sect. Little Yu Canghai dares to be so arrogant? He also took the evidence of his crime to Hengshan, where decent people gathered. It's just Zuo Lengchan who is in the background. Everyone else also saw it and didn't dare to intervene. Only a stupid hunchback from outside the country came out to grab the secret book. Some people say that Lao Yue attempts to ward off evil spirits at the beginning. Isn't this funny? The peak period of Huashan can be compared with Shanlin Wudang. Under what circumstances would Lao Yue believe that his own inheritance will not be as good as that of a bodyguard? Don't talk about Lin Yuantu's reputation, he is just like that. The biggest victory was against Chang Qingzi, who was not as good as Yu Canghai. Moreover, Chang Qingzi was still unconvinced and died in depression. Is Changqingzi seeking defeat alone? Never lost? If you were so generous, you would have died a long time ago. The main reason is that it is embarrassing. The Escort Agency is at the bottom of Jin Yong's novels. In addition to imitating Liang Yusheng's Sword and Enmity Record, after Jin Yong formed his own style, the Escort Agency has never had a master. Ten thousand steps back, even if Lin Yuantu is good at martial arts, the most he thinks is that he has good talent. It is impossible for Lao Yue to believe that warding off evil spirits can be better than Huashan martial arts. This is like a doctor from Tsinghua University who thinks that an ordinary college has better resources than Tsinghua University. Is this possible? At the beginning, I sent my daughter and my second son to Fuzhou out of sheer curiosity. Otherwise, why would I send a housekeeper and a daughter who has no experience in the world of martial arts? He didn't know that the second child was a spy, otherwise Zixia's magical power would not be lost. The information about the Qingcheng Sect's experience and the evil-repelling sword manual mentioned by the second brother is probably false. It was Zuo Lengchan who wanted to lure Huashan into the game. The first target he sent was probably Huashan. Unfortunately, Lao Yue didn't go. Zuo Lengchan turned around and chose Liu Zhengfeng, who was preparing a golden basin to wash his hands. Lao Yue's acceptance of Lin Pingzhi was not about warding off evil spirits. The first is that Lin Pingzhi has a chivalrous heart and has some connection with his daughter; the second is that Linghu Chong somehow got involved, and the third is that he is simply a chivalrous person. When Jian Zong went up the mountain, the master's wife mocked a golden-eyed crow and said that Lao Yue's nickname was Junzi Sword. What does this mean? At that time, Lao Yue was in his early 50s, and his wife, who lived with him day and night, did not see any black spots in Lao Yue. Just like the situation with Baoqiang's wife, no matter what you say, what he did was indeed a gentleman. In the later period, he was forced by the Songshan Sect, designed by Ren Yingying, and Linghu Chong rebelled. He had no choice but to go dark. And what he did was not extremely sinful at first. The sword manual for warding off evil was given by Linghu Chong. Lin Pingzhi and his junior disciple also started with the second child. Lao Yue attacked Lin Pingzhi and couldn't survive. The little disciple called him master. Jin Yong specifically wrote that he was a little disciple. It was a child who saw the traitorous second brother coming, so it was reasonable to call him master. What's more, there is a corpse similar in size to the second brother, with a scratched face. This is the second brother's plan to escape from the shell. The two old nuns may not have been killed by Lao Yue. He was with Zuo Lengchan, a Shaolin and Wudang master at the time. It was not easy to find opportunities. It is more likely that Ren Woxing has a violent temper. There is no wound, it was killed by the Star Absorbing Magic, the old nun didn't say anything. Ren Yingying was present at that time, how could she speak? Back down the mountain, Ren Yingying said she saw pinholes, which was more likely a lie. When checking the body in the forest, you said there were no wounds at the time. After meeting Ren Woxing, you said there were pinholes? They have always wanted to invite Linghu to Heimu Cliff. Others don't know the news about Dongfang Bubai. Ren Woxing and Xiang Wentian can't possibly not know at all. It is very possible that he wants to put the blame on Dongfang Bubai. But it was of no use. With a few silly words, Linghu Chong decided to shed his blood for them. To be honest, both Lao Yue and Lin Pingzhi are chivalrous and more like protagonists than Linghu Chong, who has no sense of responsibility and is confused. It's a pity that life is bad.

I saw the monkey's father committing suicide and was unable to save him. I thought that the monkey killed him by mistake. One life is worth another. I endured it. I saw the Meishan hero was killed by the White Lotus Sect and could not be saved. NB I thought that the leader of the White Lotus Sect was really right in scolding him. Isn't he a hypocrite and a real villain? Didn't you even read it after writing it now? Can you bring it into the reader's perspective and think you can accept this kind of writing? What's more, there has been a similar plot before and was scolded by readers, so why write it like this? Do you really want to filter out smart readers?

Unable to bear the repetition of poisonous points, the author seems to be very obedient and should correct any wrong words. But these are just trivial matters. The loopholes in the plot are what persuade me to give up. Why haven't I sorted them out? A while ago, around Chapter 20, I repeatedly made stupid mistakes. First I was unprepared and was poisoned with my bare hands, and then I sent the captured enemies to the masterminds and was surprised that they killed and silenced me. While I'm here, I can't help but want to leave. Is your experience in two lifetimes so naive? The following Chapter 30 is even more powerful. It uses a chapter to exaggerate the badness of the Black Tiger Gang, and also describes in detail the protagonist who witnessed the Black Tiger Gang forcing him to death before taking action. What did you do earlier? This plot design is really outrageous.

The plot is poisonous, the protagonist's character is crappy, and the character of the modern time travel has a scene similar to "Lao Liu eats fans" to prove his innocence. In the article, one life is worth one life. Originally, there was a conflict between the two parties. You would think that it would be okay for the Huashan young hero to stand by and watch indifferently. When someone is about to die, he will use a hidden weapon. If it doesn't work, he can also commit suicide when he wants to. He must have been watching with cold eyes, waiting for the bully to take advantage again and again. The author vividly described it before the young hero took action. It is normal for bullies to bully you again and again. Otherwise, we would not be called bullies. The weakness of our colleagues is also normal. Otherwise, how could we support our bodies before they are cold? Bullies bully people and don't want to report to the official. They are afraid of reporting to the official if someone is killed. A life is worth a life. Where do you put the official? The plot is poisonous, the three views are poisonous, it is really poisonous. Perhaps too many people asked the author to write according to his own ideas, but he wrote about an old society where people cannibalize people. Unfortunately, the young hero of Huashan with modern ideas has been assimilated into a man-eating tiger who only recognizes swords.

Why did you want to kill Yang Lianting? Isn't it a good thing that he brought harm to the Sun and Moon God Sect? Could it be that you, a righteous young man, still want to help the Sun God Sect develop, and kill him to provoke Dongfang Bubai to wipe out the entire Huashan family?

Xiaocheng's innate skills cannot be defeated by Linghu Chong and Lama. Does it require Dacheng's innate skills? Wang Chongyang died early. Whether the innate skills can be practiced to Dacheng is a question. In other words, Lama and Linghu Chong are both Wang Chongyang's strengths. Feng Qingyang is a master far superior to Wang Chongyang. This book's strength setting is wrong! Wang Chongyang is a peerless master, even Feng Qingyang cannot compare with him!

After reading the introduction, I realized that this is a novice novel. Is Sword Sect and Air Sect fighting for a genre? That was a political struggle. Which of those Jianzong elders was weak in internal strength?

I saw in Chapter 131 that the southern sect brought up a monk and fought evenly with a pig's trotter. How can this be considered innate skill? Martial arts also need to be logical, right? Or don't brag about your combat power so much. If you encounter a sidekick later, you will fight back and forth. Your setting is not as good as letting the protagonist go crazy and become possessed, and his skills will be reduced, or he will accidentally be plotted and poisoned. That's not how to suppress the protagonist.

What are you writing about in Chapter 29 and Chapter 30? Are you going to eliminate the readers? What's the point of reading it from beginning to end and waiting for the person to die?

Why is it that among the Wuyue Sword Sect, only the Huashan Sect has a dispute over the Qi Sword? Why doesn't anyone else have it? I guess the Qi Sword dispute is just an excuse, and it's more likely to be a conflict of interest.

Chapter 21: He died of a poisonous attack. When I saw the page, I was thinking about the 400 monthly tickets, barely counting the food and grass... It seems that the author wanted to write an unsystematic protagonist. At the beginning, he wanted to rely on memory to find adventures. Coupled with various childish operations, he obviously gave up his previous life experience, which is obviously traditional martial arts. It's just that I used the background of Xiaoao, and added a golden finger that is not too supermodel. But you didn't write it well when it came to the court, and you poisoned a group of people, and it was inconsistent with history (the Ming vassal kings could actually leave their fiefdoms, I only read the title of Chapter 21) and poisoned a group of people. Bored and unable to sleep, ignoring

Chapter 20 makes me want to vomit. I'm not really sixteen and still such an idiot. I was poisoned to death without a plug-in. Besides, it's really awesome that a little shrimp can have such a powerful poison. It's my first time to enter a martial arts sect and they don't give me detoxifying pills. Don't you know that you are also a soul of several decades? Doesn't your family have a background as a bodyguard and don't have an antidote? I warned him about the dangers in Jianghu before he came out, but he still turned out to be such an idiot. He could poison a palm with a damn thing. What kind of special skills can this little character practice? It's really awesome that he can poison people with poison just painted on the surface. If this chapter is deleted or not, it will not be a book.

When practicing pig trotters, they are invincible and better than anyone else. When fighting, no one can defeat them.

I haven't read the novel, but I can tell from the author's name that it's not very good. The battle between swords and qi is just a struggle for interests. I can't even understand this.

I saw the Meishan Conference. The protagonist clearly understood the meaning of swordsmanship, achieved great success in internal strength, and made great progress in martial arts. The moves and internal strength of Master Duan were much weaker than that of the protagonist, and he was empty-handed. The protagonist was holding a sharp sword, which should be Master Duan. He could break his hands and break his feet. However, a few moves can overwhelm the opponent, but in the end, dozens of moves have been fought? The winning moment in the end was even more ridiculous. When the opponent slapped him, the protagonist actually palmed him without using a sword. . . Why don't you just cut off his hand with a sword and save more effort? ?

The author wrote very well before, but he somewhat made (Xiantian Kung Fu) a first-class Kung Fu, even (Zixia Divine Kung Fu) is much stronger than it. Wang Chongyang did not reach great achievements in Xiantian Kung Fu, but he was already the best in the world. If Wang Chongyang had reached great achievements, he would not have died early! Xiao Ao is at best the best. The only top ones are Dongfang Bubai and Feng Qingyang. They mainly use swords because their magical skills have been lost! The protagonists have all perfected their innate skills to the point where they surpass Wang Chongyang, so that's it. They can be considered superb. Whatever is written now has appeared (the way of heaven), small trends can be changed, but big trends cannot be changed! It's boring and the vote was in vain!

The protagonist is not good. Isn't this what the combination of Qi and sword is like? Of course, you have to eat enough to have the strength to fight the 40-meter sword.

The innate skill is so powerful! What about the Nine Yang Manual and the Nine Yin Manual? ! I hope the author can check more relevant information! If there are too many loopholes, it will also affect your interests as the author! It will make readers give up!

This Dacheng's innate skill is too good, right?

I just saw the appearance of that nymphomaniac Yu Shishi, and I hope the author doesn't try another trick: the woman stalks her, and in the end the man is so moved that he falls in love with her with just one sentence: "How can I live up to it?" Or try another trick: being drugged and having sex, and then the victim accepts the other party's good intentions, which is a bad trick! These are so disgusting and poisonous!

The earlier the better, the better. Firstly, children are unstable and can easily become distracted in their Qi practice. Secondly, Internal Qigong is a method of refining and transforming Qi. Children's premature consumption of energy affects their development. Thirdly, children have limited ability to understand too profound things. So many disciples of the big sect were literate before the age of ten, laying a foundation and strengthening their bones. Internal skills are only taught when they are in their teens, because at this time, children only understand the importance and begin to think logically. Even if you are extremely talented, you cannot start practicing internal strength at the age of 5

The front is okay, but the back is rubbish.

It's well written, but it's a bit short, the map is too small, and there are too few techniques. The next book can cover a larger world.

I still suggest that the author writes according to his own ideas. Nowadays, this kind of more old-school martial arts is basically invisible, because many of the highlights of old-school martial arts are not pleasing to today's readers, but they are poisonous. It can only be said that each has its own views and ideas. I'm still looking forward to the next plot, well, it's not the kind that will be drastically changed according to readers' requests. As for the lack of a book review, there is actually not much to say. The plot is relatively bland, which is just fine for me personally. On the contrary, the pace is too fast, digging holes in each chapter and filling in the next chapter immediately. I already felt tired reading it. The author has some little easter eggs, such as connecting Tang Bohu with the descendants of Peach Blossom Island, which is pretty good. But I think it's superfluous to drag a Korean over to steal the Dugu Nine Swords. I originally thought it would be Zuo Lengchan who snatched the evil-fighting sword manual. First, I was reluctant to let Zuo Lengchan not cut it, and then I designed a plot where the protagonist was frightened and cut it. It's a pity that he died like this. Well, if nothing else happens, the monthly votes saved this month will slowly be used to support the author. I read few books and don't have a lot of monthly tickets, so don't be offended by the author.