Swallowed Star: The Blade-Crazed Sword Fanatic

The writing style feels strange, the inner drama is very disturbing, and the details that should be detailed feel like writing an outline. Also, he did not retaliate after being beaten by mushroom eggs, and the system was broken back by those in power. In the front, I was thinking about being a warrior for all people, but in the back, after being exposed to a mushroom, I became a dog. In the first part, you write about how you were in your previous life, but in the second part, your mood is as fragile as if you just left society. Aren't you contradictory?

What a mess. Seeing now, I don't even know what the attributes of your domain are. Is it the sword domain? Then what kind of law will you understand when you understand the law in the future, the law of the sword? It's not in the original text at all. You are not so innovative in writing fan fiction.

What kind of thing is written? I just looked at the table of contents without reading it. Why is there still Dou Di? Isn't it swallowing the stars?

It's very uncomfortable to read the writing. Several of the pictures are quite disturbing. The writing by the senior management is a bit poisonous. The Great Nirvana is about sacrifice, about sacrificing the individual for the sake of righteousness to achieve the greater self. What are you writing about, human infighting? Is this the point?

Ye Xiaochai, the crazy swordsman, is raising it first, right? 😏 Let's watch after he's fattened up

How should I put it, I am not a troll to deceive you, but to be honest, everyone is here to watch and devour fellow fans. The proportion is too low and the purity is too poor.

First, the things the protagonist practices, and some of them are a bit too fantasy, and don't fit in with the background of the star-devouring sky. Second, I don't know if that woman is the protagonist, and she has clear eyes. Shouldn't she be actively improving her abilities now? Don't write various descriptions of girls Thirdly, the protagonist is a bit too cowardly. If someone messes with him, he won't fight back, and then he will be bombed by others with a nuclear bomb. It doesn't look good at all, and I think most book friends feel it.

It can only be said that the author has been domesticated very well.

In the Devouring World, if you want to write about time travel, don't think about things that affect Luo Feng. If there was a so-called Luo City Lord, the protagonist would not be able to travel through time at all. He would have been casually destroyed by Luo City Lord, who has already merged the multiple timelines. The most likely thing is that it is impossible for you, little Karami, to travel through the path of his growth. You should write it as it was before Luo Feng became enlightened, otherwise everything you do as a time traveler will be illogical and will be regarded as a disgusting fantasy. For example, the protagonist in the article has affected the general trend of the world in advance. To be honest, according to logic, Luo Feng will never be born again. Even if this Luo Feng is born, it is not Bi Luo Feng. Maybe it is a girl. His parents can no longer be conceived on the same day at the same time. The tadpole that is Luo Feng may have been washed away by the sewer.

I don't even have a harem, so what's the point of always being like this?