Wizard: Beginning with a Wizard's Right Eye

I don't expect it to continue. The plot is not clear at all. It's like skipping dozens of chapters at the beginning. I can only enjoy myself when writing online articles like this.

It would be better to open a preface and explain the protagonist's past! The first few chapters were confusing.

The writing at the front is too messy, with a bunch of fancy names. I can't remember who the main character is, but I just remember the perverted mentor, because it consists of two simple words.

I read more than 10 chapters, and it was inexplicable. Whether it was golden fingers, abilities, or timelines, everything was a mess. The battles were also confusing. I didn't even know how the first-order man who killed randomly fell into the hands of Pig's Foot. The whole plot was just about Pig's Foot talking nonchalant nonsense, and then a cut scene entered the game. Same, start... End... And then enter the next plot, nothing is explained, nothing is clear, what happened to the pig's feet in the previous life, how did the eyes of the pig's feet come from, why is it reborn, the mechanism of ability engine, realm, how to calculate talents, I only saw that the pig's feet did nothing, and I passed the plot with a careless and brainless operation.

It can be seen that the author wanted to write a protagonist with a crushing IQ, but the writing was not strong enough and he only wrote a very smart protagonist.

After looking carefully, I don't think it's messy or clueless as everyone said. The characters' behavior can be understood clearly through the context. The details may be a little different, but it shouldn't be a big problem. The main thing is that from a large-scale perspective, the thoughts and actions of the characters in this world have a chaotic feeling of low-intelligent AI. The judgments and reactions of various characters and forces when encountering things have a feeling that they can proceed to the next step through very simple logic. There is no rationality, and it is not too fake like the real world. There is a feeling that everyone is just acting according to the script. The entire upper level also has a feeling that it is finished and the world will collapse at any time. Maybe it's my problem. After all, I haven't written a novel, maybe I haven't read enough and I'm not used to it 😵.

It is very illogical in many places. For example, the same period in the training camp and the landlady witch have stated that the average age is 13.4 Years old. Fighting and physical fitness are not mentioned for the time being. In this context, a 13.4-Year-old person can communicate normally with all kinds of people without being rejected. This is a very illogical thing in itself. If you change it to It's the same now, and let's talk about the recoil of a single-shot gun in a fight. It's outrageous that a minor can go back and forth with that pervert sent by the Holy See who can be an instructor, and then the protagonist's name will come up the next second. There are too many inexplicable places. This is what the author wrote for himself 🤫

I can't understand the opening plot 🤫 The wizard organization wants to capture the dark wizard, so why do we need to find the protagonist? Was it because he was not strong enough that he found the protagonist? Can't you just want to find the protagonist or make the protagonist rebel? 😅 The protagonist is just a rookie. What role can a first-level wizard apprentice play? All by writing the first-order dark wizard as a waste and letting the protagonist kill him?

When I read Chapter 4, I was in a fog. After reading the post posted by the author, I can see that I wanted to write it well. Let me mention the problems I encountered You said it would take hundreds of words to list it out, but some things can be roughly explained by adding a few words or mentioning a sentence. 1. What kind of organization the company is? This should be explained when it first appears. At least it should be given a full name 2. The protagonist's previous life experience plays a big role in the plot arrangement. It is not too much to summarize it in a short paragraph and dozens of words Why are you talking about this? The author should have an outline or a set of settings, but readers have no idea about these new people or things. They don't know what they are or whether they are hostile. This is the reason why everyone in the comment area feels confused and confused about the plot description. Look at the novels you write from the perspective of readers (I'm not sure about the relationship between writers and editors. The editor should be involved in reviewing this work)

Can't the protagonist become stronger during other times besides going to class? Like an idiot, except for practicing the corresponding skills in the corresponding class, the rest of the time is showing off.