And Said You Are Not an Immortal

Comment on Chapter 12: I feel that the author wants to write a novel similar to Lan Ke Qi Yuan and I Have No Intention to Become an Immortal. But it feels like imitating a tiger and a cat, because the protagonist seems to have no emotional intelligence, and the plot of showing off to ordinary people is not satisfying, but rather awkward. Personally, I feel that the original intention was to write the protagonist as a gentleman, but in the end, he was written as a hypocrite.

After reading Chapter 30, I felt that the taste was okay, but the plot became weirder and weirder the more I read. Didn't the author notice? All the benefits of the protagonist come from being a disciple of the Immortal. These four words appear frequently, and it feels a bit like a dog-eat-dog feeling. Has Qin Jiangyue offended the protagonist? The author wants to give up the setting of the first two chapters. Is this break too abrupt? I just feel that the protagonist is letting off steam, and there is a feeling that seems easy-going, but actually endures to the core. Combined with the constant appearance of immortal disciples, it feels that the protagonist is quite proud of his identity and enjoys the benefits it brings with peace of mind. If he writes a few more chapters, it will turn into someone who will die if they don't give him face.

I should say that although I have only read a few chapters, this book should be a good book except for sentence fragments and punctuation marks. But I still want to complain about the author. Why did you write a time-travel protagonist? Just write an indigenous protagonist. I don't know the Fire Dragon Master Chen Tuan. He actually doesn't even know that his master Lu Dongbin is called Lu Yan. Someone may try to bully me into saying "just a time-travel protagonist." Do you know that Lu Dongbin's name is Lu Yan?" I know that many people in reality don't know that one of the famous Eight Immortals, Lu Dongbin, is called Lu Yan, but the problem is that this is not reality, this is a novel. Reality can be illogical, but novels have to talk about it. Moreover, you wrote at the beginning that the protagonist is a time traveler, and the protagonist who time travels doesn't know anything. So if you write about time travel, you might as well write about indigenous people.

I wonder what the main character's hobby is with a mouse, a mouse that can't help but steal things. If he steals something, he returns it unfairly, and he comes to apologize and make amends. Doesn't the mouse need to be punished and reflect on his past? The main character practices training just to support the mice?

Shennong is coming You can try reading the first chapter. If you can get through it, you'll be fine. Also test your language comprehension ability

Nowadays, book lovers are very involuntarily involuted! You must drag me on the road with you

I don't understand it at first. When you are a mortal, you meet an evil cultivator. You don't know why others don't kill you, so you have to compromise. Then the evil cultivator takes a fancy to you and says he wants you to be his apprentice. He asks you to think about it, and then refuses it outright. It's very contradictory. There is no emotional description. How can you be sure that others will not kill you? Just because you are the protagonist, are you stubborn? Then why don't you be tough from the beginning and start collaborating with others? In my opinion, the initial image does not correspond to what you described, so I'd better think about it. Contextual context

At the beginning, why do you act like you are a jerk when your life is clearly in someone else's hands? What kind of character is the protagonist? Fool?

After testing the poison, anyone who can survive the first chapter will probably be fine, but I didn't survive it anyway.

How can I put it this way? It's like playing a single-player game. Except for the protagonist, the plot is all set up. There is no human touch at all. Everything is prepared for the plot of the protagonist.

The author of this book is quite powerful. In the first chapter, he tries to screen out as many smart readers as possible. No matter how big the problem is in the following chapters, people with high poison resistance can probably tolerate it 👍

This book is completely a foil to the main character. It ignores ordinary people's logic and has a somewhat strong aura of being mentally retarded.

This description... The female character was specially described at the beginning, describing both appearance and psychological activities. I thought she was the heroine, but it turned out that a sweetheart fell in love with this female character and then after a bloody plot , the protagonist gave up to the female character Hey, no, it's not the heroine, why did you describe so many appearances? Do you like giving girls away? Also, the Dragon King storyline, isn't this the ancient version of the Dragon King's return?

The main character goes up to ask people about their family cooking skills. Doesn't it seem normal for others to think that you are asking for their family's cooking skills? The protagonist also thinks it's someone else's problem. You are a disciple of the Immortal. If you are interested, others should happily come to your doorstep. This kind of thing, unless it is a gangster cultivating immortality, it will not become an immortal.

It felt very strange at first. I was living under someone else's roof, but I still insisted on my own justice. If I wasn't the halo of the protagonist, I would have sent it a long time ago.

When I read Chapter 78, the writing was okay, and the plot was very strange. There were often confusing plots, and there were often plots that made the protagonist's character very fragmented. He said one thing, but did another. Chapter 78: I was persuaded to quit because the official paid you 150 taels of gold as agreed. You refused others by saying that you didn't need the gold. When people asked you what you wanted, you said that you would just give it to you. Do you have the nerve to give someone less than 150 taels of gold? Isn't this obviously dissatisfaction with 150 taels of gold? It gives people a very serious feeling of trying to repay a favor.

Don't look at it, I almost lost it in the first picture, it was so funny.

It's a mentally retarded novel. You don't need to read it. The first few chapters show that the protagonist is mentally retarded.

Chapter 1: Silence me. At first, you were afraid of death and chose to feed the pigs. Later, you were not afraid of death and chose not to become a disciple. So are you afraid of death or not? In just one chapter, the character changed completely. I admit that the writing is not bad, but does the character's logic treat me as a fool and insult me?

Is the skin written in the fairy's bones or someone disturbed me?

It's pretty. Why do so many people criticize it?

The first chapter can really only be said to persuade him to quit. First of all, the protagonist went to feed the pigs and eat with the evil man every day, which proves that the protagonist wants to live. Then the evil way wants to accept the protagonist as its disciple. As long as a normal person is a normal person, he should coax the evil way to get better first, but the protagonist just jumps into the evil way and says no, I am speechless. The reason given by the protagonist is that he is afraid that the decent people who will slay demons and protect the Tao will casually kill him in the future. Author, do you want to see what kind of situation the protagonist is in? The evil path jumping on the face and the protagonist not knowing how long it will take for the right path to come. This reason is simply untenable. It can only be said that the author's plot setting is that the right path is about to come, so the protagonist refuses, but the author obviously did not notice that the protagonist does not know how long it will take for the right path to arrive. Combining the protagonist's compromise in feeding pigs and eating with evil every day, as well as the words of the protagonist in Chapter 1 when he persuaded the girl to become a piglet, the most fundamental concept of the protagonist is to survive. Under this concept, when the protagonist is accepted by an evil, what he should do is to coax him into following the evil. If he does anything else, it will conflict with the previous setting, so the first chapter will be very discouraging. Even if the protagonist coaxes the evil way first and then resets the plot when the right way comes to kill, it will still be better than now.

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It's very classical I hope you can stick with it. It's hard to feel this kind of book.

I can write it down. People are different. Some people are born to suffer. This is really true, there is no chance of turning around? Then we are still in good health, and a gentleman is constantly striving for self-improvement. Damn it, we are doomed anyway.

Damn it, the old man in the beginning looks so awesome, but he turns out to be just a little guy.

It has been saved for a long time. Come back and see the update 20 days ago? Is this a eunuch?

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This Taoist title is really a failure. In the future, when I become successful in cultivation, do I want others to call me Qingming Jushi Zhenren? Qingming layman's true king?

The writing is very awkward. The author wants to write it well, but the level may be a little lower. It would be better if the language is simpler.