Game of Thrones: The Magic Lord

The setting in the first chapter is disgusting to the readers. A coward who became self-defeating because of telecommunications fraud traveled to a new world and worked hard to survive in a harsher environment. Who would still travel if he had 10% of the courage before traveling? What does the protagonist draw? Just like the people in the past who pooped without paper...

In 2055, after working for three years, a liberal arts graduate from Poujie received a notice from the company: Your department has no value due to the major update of gpt AI and the explosive enhancement of text capabilities. Therefore, it was approved by the board of directors and the entire department was optimized. From this point on, you were fired. For compensation n+1, please log in to the open big data AI interface to confirm. Arts majors: If I had known I would major in science, how would I get along next? Why? Brother what are you doing? The roof is dangerous... Science student: Don't stop me... All the codes in our department have been written for AI. Except for the top design, we have all been laid off... I am older and have a lot of loans. This is going to kill me~ Okay, I will die for you to see!!! Arts student: This can't be like this, I'm going to find the general manager~ There is justice in this world! In the office, a liberal arts student discovered the body of the general manager. Suicide note: The general meeting of shareholders decided to use virtual intelligent managers to operate the company to optimize human errors and labor conflicts~ I can't save the shares in my hand, and I will be fired tomorrow... I can't even afford the car with just a little dividend every year, and the problems in the past few years will also be exposed~ Instead of being sent to justice tomorrow, it is better to die now...

The description of the mist... After reading the comment area, I found that the author is quite confident. Others pointed out the problems, and the author replied that he was sorry, but he would not change it. If you say it is your own work and others are not qualified to comment, then why did you post it? Are you really enjoying yourself?

Others are fighting for hegemony, and you are trying to make soy sauce! Forget about being soy sauce, you can become invisible at every turn. What we want to watch is the pig's feet, not the plot! Otherwise, it's better to binge-watch the show!

The poison has been tested. This is an explanatory text, not a novel, and the explanatory text also explains something unclear!

Author, do you know where your biggest weakness is in your writing? To be honest, your writing is already above the standard, at least it won't be held back by your writing, but your plot arrangement is too poor. The article is written for the readers. You will not feel bored when writing these metaphors, because you can understand every metaphor from a God's perspective, but readers cannot. What readers dislike most is the Riddler. You can bury a few foreshadowings in small paragraphs without any harm, but the whole paragraph or even the whole chapter is full of inexplicable things. Even these metaphors will have to wait a long, long time to be revealed. Who do you think has such patience? Your biggest problem is that like many novice authors, the things you write are for yourself and to please yourself, rather than for readers. Only when you overcome this can you have hope of becoming a god.

The protagonists all like to pursue mystery and are obsessed with magic, and the author focuses on depicting the power system and magic system of the world view. You are abandoning the original and chasing the last. You are like Jianghu who writes martial arts novels but does not write about grudges and grudges. You are obsessed with letting the protagonist practice martial arts and write down detailed training methods and settings of martial arts secrets all day long. No matter how well you write the settings of martial arts secrets, how can someone else write well in the category of fantasy fairy tales? Is it comparable? It's incomparable. When you write about magic in Game of Thrones, can someone write about Hogwarts and DND-like magic? Wizards and wizards are interesting magic. Isn't the upper limit of others writing about researching magic much higher than yours? In Game of Thrones novels, you should write about wars, strategies, and armies. Once again, you should write about beauties, love, and adventures. If you don't write about these, who will? Even game system writers know the basics of killing monsters, upgrading and changing maps, and writing game plots is also the right way to go. But have you ever seen any game writers become popular by writing about how the protagonist studies the personal panel, game skill data and career hidden settings? No, it will only make readers dislike your word count. Leave the original work of Game of Thrones there, everyone has seen it, and everyone knows the setting of the original work. Everyone is not here to see your second creation of the setting, but everyone is here to see you promote the development of the plot. No matter how many settings you write, can you still force the original work to become an official setting?

Your novel ideas are good, but they are really not suitable for writing novels. If it's just for fun, just pretend I didn't say anything. Structure, polish, weight, my dear, you can't tell the difference at all. Machiavellian tactics, wars, and chaos in the depths of rule. You can read more other novels and read some war analysis to strengthen it. This situation is such a waste of good ideas. Otherwise, if you dare not say lv4 or lv5 in your four books, you should at least reach lv3.

The strangest thing about this book is that there was no investigation at the beginning when the whole family was killed. The Citadel killed them. But who was the Citadel's tentacle in the castle and who carried it out? The maester is the super suspect. You still use it? You also told him about magic and asked him to record it and then plagiarize it in the academy? Poisonous

I don't know what the author is writing, I can't understand it, and I don't want to read it! There is no plot, I just kept reading about science and dreaming. I don't know what significance these have to the book. After reading more than ten chapters, it seems that nothing has been written. It's inexplicable to watch! Can't watch.