Something Is Wrong with the Plot of My Divorce Breakup

There is no sense of substitution. I personally feel that this can only be substituted for the heroine. The initiative rests entirely in the hands of the female protagonist, and the male protagonist is controlled so hard that it makes him seem very humble, which naturally makes me feel disgusted. This is an uncomfortable meal. The heroine wanted to get married because of system rewards. Even if she developed a relationship later, I still felt very unhappy. The male protagonist has no merits and his luck is terrible. Apart from the above points, the process of eating soft rice is very boring.

The highlight was that the anti-routine was gone, but the heroine only appeared for a few chapters and then disappeared. The subsequent academy plot was a complete failure.

I came to see how the male protagonist shows off his love for the female protagonist, not to see how the male protagonist Long Aotian Academy upgrades. .

Emm~ If you read the comments, you will know where your problem lies. The positioning of this book: a "soft rice novel". The heroine appears in the first dozen chapters, and the next twenty or thirty chapters are all about the academy. The key plot is still very cliché. It depends on whether you insist on writing a soft rice novel, or whether you rely on the soft rice's resources to become stronger and surpass the heroine. Don't change the anchor point easily, otherwise it will be easy to lose your writing. The kind of fight, life and death, inferior pretense and slap in the face. My lord, times have changed. I've seen too many of these cool things, and my resistance has been maxed out... Relaxation and comedy may be more suitable. Take some time to conceive and perfect the outline... 90% Of the problems with book cutting lie in the outline.

A typical example of selling dog meat on sheep's clothing. It's over 200,000 words long, and the heroine doesn't have as many roles as the supporting role.

The heroine has very few roles and basically disappears after the start.

I just read the first chapter and it was okay, but when I saw that the system was not on the male protagonist, I knew it was a bad choice.

There is something interesting in the front. After the heroine left, the protagonist didn't know what to do. Does it have anything to do with the title of the book? I'm convinced. It's all anecdote. He himself can't practice. Spending so much time in the academy is useless.

I originally wrote a long post, but I decided not to post it. After all, the author wrote this book just for fun. If you read it because of the title, just leave it. Reading this book is better than reading a normal fantasy.

Is it appropriate for a female channel novel to appear in a male channel novel with potential?

It seems that many little boys have a misunderstanding. They think that if their wife is as beautiful as a fairy, they will think that other women are not as good as his wife, so they are not interested in her. This is called nonsense. If according to this statement, celebrities in the entertainment industry will not get divorced after they get married, so why cheat? Even those who are married to beautiful actresses are called prostitutes, so it is too childish to write such a plot No matter how much you like to eat a dish, you can't eat it every day, and you have to change the taste occasionally

It has nothing to do with breaking off the engagement. I am so excited to write about the academy.

It feels like the more I write, the more biased it becomes. I want to watch the male protagonist eat soft rice. Instead of going to the academy to fight

Is this a female villain turning into a heroine? The female villain got the system, and in order to steal the male protagonist's luck, she changed the divorce into a forced marriage. It was also to steal the male protagonist's luck, not feelings. The male protagonist was timid and unable to do anything after his luck was taken away. This article is extremely poisonous.

Is this such a soft rice Liuliu? Except for the heroine in the first few chapters, the rest is all about practicing, fighting monsters and upgrading. What is the role of the heroine? Too watery

I've only read a few chapters, but why do I feel so frustrated?

After reading the comment section, the author was not pleased with both sides. I was on the side of the heroine, but I found that you had concealed the heroine... You withdrew it and the author did not click on his own manuscript and ideas. He let the comment section carry him around, and even made himself fooled.

Female video, the male protagonist is really soft🥚, don't click to read it👀.

Ask the author, how many chapters does the heroine spend in this one-year retreat? I waited and watched.

... I have been writing a lot since I entered the academy!

I thought chasing my husband at the crematorium turned out to be a mess.

Bland, nothing interesting

It makes me sick. The male protagonist is no different from a weakling. How did this thing end up in a male video?

Brother, can you update the book to 600,000 words? I'll tweet it to you.

Brother, believe me, I will lift you up and write quickly

The sooner you can reach 600,000 words, the better

Brother, hurry up I'm just waiting for you 600,000 words

Good article about the eunuch, it's a pity, the tomb sweeper

I think creating your own training system is the stupidest thing, unless you are a great master who can write down the characteristics corresponding to each realm. Otherwise, it would be better to use the mass system

The comments are full of shit. If you don't like it, just don't read it... It means that the article is not in line with your taste, and there are also people who directly curse people.