Age of Heroes, Ten Consecutive Guarantees

I was baffled by this complaint. After reading dozens of chapters, I didn't even understand the basic situation. The plot was jumpy and incoherent. It was very difficult for readers to read and the experience was poor.

Lighthearted and funny? ? ? Is your label correct? ? After reading more than 40 chapters, I really can't stand it.

The ideas and inspiration are there but the notes are a little poor, and the overall plot is a bit messy and jumpy. The impression of many characters in the plot is that they are pitiful for the sake of being pitiful, and tragic for the sake of tragedy, which is very blunt and not smooth enough. For example, the matryoshka doll at the end of Chapter 3 is a good idea, but it is just a good idea. It is not gentle enough before it is revealed, it is not decisive enough when it is revealed, and the surprise after the reveal is not enough. Improve your notes later and understand the rhythm of online articles. You can write again with similar themes.

This novel is okay in terms of setting. Although the beginning is flawed, it is not unconventional. However, from the beginning of the heroic spirit mission, I felt like eating rice with hair. Can I eat it? Yes. Do you want to eat? No.

What can I say, he is such a stud. He was a good childhood sweetheart, but he is really no match for Tiansheng. There can be four or five female protagonists, but he accepted one of them, including the female partner who is obviously not too talented. It's a succubus.

The author is very good at structuring conflicts. Although some storylines in this book are a bit depressing, they become more refreshing after the twists and turns. There are no supporting characters with no intelligence to show off to the protagonist. The characters are closely connected and written with great care. I hope the author will continue to work hard🌹 and not be a eunuch🥺

It took me a few days to read and catch up on the updated ones. In two words, they are beautiful. There are many questions and criticisms in the discussion thread, and I agree with them, but this does not prevent me from liking the advantages of this book. This is the book with the most stitches and the best stitches I have ever seen. Of course, the stitches have no special meaning. It may also be my personal aesthetics that is subjective. I just like to stitch together a mixed world view, which is better said to be diversified. The author not only has a poor world view, but also has a poor writing style, but I like it. There are some daily jokes, but even the jokes are relatively cold. He is passionate. The first few chapters were a bit mediocre, but looking at the recent ones, you can see that he has made great progress, especially the Dragon Country section, which was written so fluently! From Tao Rusu's life experience to Long Buping's uneasy feelings, to the protagonist's resistance to three attacks at the fifth level, I haven't watched it so much in a long time! Wenqing has it, although not everyone likes it. There is suspense, because the plot is handled well. There are all kinds of Eastern fantasy, fairy tales, Western fantasy, and Japanese samurai (I don't know how to describe the Japanese system). The power system of Daxia can be seen that the author was greatly influenced by Xingtie. Even at a certain moment, I felt that the academic style was too familiar when I read the books of the Third Young Master of the Tang Family (not a curse). Three of the four Douluo books have this style of painting Diversity is diversity, but the separation of painting styles is inevitable, but for the sake of the plot, it has to be separated, such as several countries and several continents , are they allowed to communicate with each other? It seems that the key characters can come and go as they please, while other people in the background have only one world view. For example, they can interfere with the setting of time, sometimes they can change history, and sometimes they can't. The part where the Overlord plans the Dragon Land is quite far-fetched, and the four ghost kings have briefly mentioned it. The author Mouse Tail Juice wants to think about how to deal with the setting of changing time. Although changing time to save the world is simple and very satisfying to achieve the goal, it will be very troublesome to deal with the follow-up. There is also the problem of the protagonist's harem. Tao Rusu's limit has been raised infinitely, but Qin Xuesha's role is almost gone I hope the author can deal with these problems, continue to write, and write better and better. 😜

To be honest, the first few chapters are very well written. It can be done until the end of the first Heroic Spirit plot The ability to change the past is too buggy, and in the book, after the Ji Dao was destroyed by humanity, the protagonist did not only save one person, but everyone who should have been killed after the death of the girl. And it's not just the fate of the girl that has changed. The family members or children of the Yakuza members should have been born after this point in time, or were killed later All the history related to the Yakuza has been reversed, and everything that the changed people come into contact with in the future will be affected. It's like an avalanche. The longer the time span, the more profound the impact. I can't accept this style myself, and to be honest, if I write a book like this, it probably won't be too 🔥. The suggestion to the author is that this change should not bring reality, it can be said that the change is a parallel world.

Of course it would be fine if it were an anime. After all, even complex descriptions can go by very quickly, but the novel is a bit delayed. After all, readers are busy knowing the plot. I suggest, just a suggestion, that some plots can be narrated in flashbacks and kept as briefly as possible to make the plot more compact. And today's readers don't have a good impression of protagonists who talk a lot. In terms of characters, it can be seen that the attempt is to enrich the characters through dialogue, but it always feels weird when looking at it, and it can be seen at a glance that the word count is too high. Maybe you can intersperse some action, environment, psychology, etc. In the middle of the dialogue. After all, the word count of water with legitimate reasons cannot be called the word count of water. Of course, in addition to dialogue, behavior can also enrich the character's behavior. It depends on the author's writing skills. My feeling is that the later writing is better than the previous one. If you can continue to improve, you should be able to achieve good results. (I recommended the book from the short video of station B. Those so-called poisonous points should be buried pits. After all, the protagonist's mission is to change the destiny. This will test the author even more. I hope the author can control it.)

It's not a cool book, the transition is very slow, the protagonist uses very few of the abilities in the title, not very sexy, and is toxic. If you don't like reversing time to save, don't read. The heroine dies at the beginning, and the bones are decorated. Although the time is reversed, it is not pleasant. The protagonist is an anonymous stream, and likes too much character description. The combat and ability settings are a mess. Many abilities are unclear or skipped. It all depends on the plot and needs to be edited.

I just finished reading this novel, and I can talk about Chapter 64. This is a new beginning. This is a new life, this is integration after time travel. This makes the plot ups and downs, but it will also lose some readers. It is indeed a bit too depressing, but I think his writing is very legendary.

Why the hell does Maodu have to make the protagonist more difficult at the beginning? Either he is poor or someone wants to kill him, he either has a big revenge to take, or the protagonist is disabled and strong, his talent is rubbish, or he is about to be affected by danger, it hurts.

The light novels you write are labeled as lighthearted and funny. Then it all happened, one person silently shouldered everything, sacrificed everything to save others, and ended up with nothing. Thank you for others' bravery. You have nothing. No one will know when you die in a corner.

If you are assassinated ten times, you will definitely die suddenly (=①ω①=)

The subject matter is very good, but the suffering is great and the hatred is deep. It was depressing throughout and basically not enjoyable at all. Take the word "easy" off the label. This book has several shortcomings. The first cheat mechanism is very messy and complicated. It would be nice if you could write it clearly, but maybe it's because of my poor understanding, I feel like it's a mess. The author will automatically assume that the reader understands the mechanism of the golden finger, and will just keep writing, which will give him a headache. For example, when we went to kill the shepherd, this chapter did not explain how to find the shepherd at all. It took a few chapters, note that it was several chapters later, to explain how to find the shepherd. There were more than one or two omissions like this, which made me very tired. The second point is that the few chapters after it was released made me feel sick for a long time, which was also the main reason why I decided to start trolling. The protagonist wanted to save people, but because Qin Xue was afraid of exposing his golden finger and hiding his clumsiness, he almost died because of his lack of strength. Ruan Qingshan died blocking an arrow for the protagonist. It's nothing here. Next, he stopped pretending and used the Civilized Staff to kill the person with a buff that would allow him to break through in battle. So I said, what were you doing before? The most speechless thing was when he went to play Zhuang Dao, he cheated directly and unabashedly in front of Qin Xuezhao! ! ! He was acting cool while driving! ! ! Ruan Qingshan died in vain 🤔🤔🤔 In short, I felt very bad after reading it. The writing is good, but there are too many flaws. I hope the author will continue to work hard.

Remarks on the poison test (I suppressed nausea to read Chapter 59) Summary: This book is extremely poisonous Poison point 1. The heroine's personality changes drastically after getting back together, and her facial makeup is severely changed. The toxic female partner robs the heroine's role after the resurrection. Readers with a single heroine will be fed poison, and readers with multiple heroines will not see the excitement of having a harem. 2. The author likes to show off and slap the face very much, especially the description of the two battles in which the protagonist kills the shepherd and the rose girl. As we all know, the villain dies from talking too much, while the protagonist and the villain talk nonsense. And there is no level of nonsense at all, and it is poisonous in the second degree. 3. The power system collapses, and monsters can tear apart the barrier between the two worlds and attack the protagonist and the heroine (the role of the heroine here is another cancer within the cancer, the heroine is in dire straits or dies in two timelines, but the protagonist does not cherish time and wastes time on the heroine). I advise you to stay away from this book and try the poison yourself. Now you are dying from the poison.

You're outrageous. You'll get guaranteed results after ten rounds. Then I'll go directly to the photolithography machine drawings. Don't worry about how I draw them. The drawing will be successful on the tenth time. Go buy the secret book of cultivating immortals. It will be true on the tenth time. It will be true on the tenth time of cultivating immortals. The villain will be stabbed to death on the tenth time.

The familiar Bai family, the familiar principles of heroes, the familiar apples, the familiar yandere, the familiar fragments, the familiar ones. . .

It looks like it was written by two people, either without an outline or sold to a studio. The writing becomes more and more strange, the setting becomes more and more complex and bloated, and the main line is unclear. At first, I thought it was a battle of wits and courage with the underground evil forces, then it turned into a fantasy version of a youth love and development comedy, and then in PenglaiTM, it turned into a cool campus fairy tale about Long Aotian pretending to be a slap in the face. The whole plot highlights one person and writes whatever comes to mind. The messy settings crammed into the world look like a 200-pound fat woman wearing a children's shirt.

It is purely poisonous. In order to survive at the age of 27, I gave birth to a child, then made the child a scapegoat, and then deprived my child of the right to choose. I abolished the bloodline of the Bai family and the Beiming family's twin saints, and did not see any preparation to protect the child. I suspect that if both parents were protagonists of saint blood, the child would have been stillborn.      🙅🏻‍♂️  ，👌🏻       The most explosive thing is that Su Ruoli's parents told the protagonist what happened back then and said that his mother was imprisoned by the Beiming family. It turned out that the protagonist was a clown🤡 and just didn't want to raise him. The mother had to concentrate on being a saint and had no time. Fortunately, Su Ruoli's parents comforted the protagonist that it wasn't that his mother didn't want to accompany him, but that he was forced to leave because of coercion from the Beiming family.

The protagonist's mother voluntarily took poison, turning all three generations of the Bai family into clowns

Bai Yu: I was poisoned and my bloodline was abolished since I was a child My mother was imprisoned and we were not allowed to see each other My father went deep into dangerous places to help me detoxify and disappeared My grandfather came to ask for an explanation and was deported I want revenge. Bai Ma: Hey, I was the one who poisoned me. I was not imprisoned. I just don't want to see you. You three are so stupid Bai Yu: 🤡 Bai Fu: 🤡 Bai Potian: 🤡 Beiming Family: 🤡

He voluntarily took poison instead of being imprisoned. The child was left outside for foster care. The husband disappeared while looking for an antidote. The father-in-law was driven out of the country because of injustice. Did the author think this character was well written?

You continue to be a literary youth and have a depressive style. I don't know where it came from. If you didn't write a cool article at the starting point, I would write this. I wish you become a platinum god and I won't accompany you anymore. I didn't subscribe, after all, I only read level 15 copies

It's okay in the early stage, even if it's a mindless and fun story, it's also okay in terms of emotional transition. The worst thing to say later is that a bitch will go into heat for no reason when she sees the male protagonist.

The most unacceptable thing is that the protagonist's mother abandoned her own child for a bullshit nephew. I don't know, I thought his mother was trained by the Beiming family to become a mother. The funniest thing is that in order to keep the protagonist safe, his talent was destroyed. Please, if it hadn't been for Goldfinger Awakening, your son would have died in the first chapter.

Emmmm, in the first chapter, it was because I wanted to hide my clumsiness, and then I couldn't beat him directly. To put it bluntly, now I am suppressing my fighting power, but I am nosy. Now in the latest chapter, it's time to reveal my identity.

I came here for the ten consecutive guarantees, but as I watched, it turned into a system article. What's more, it's really frustrating to have all of them be liberalized by the system, and there's also the literary youth in the frustration. 😰

Why is it that the officials in every Mao book are trash? I just don't understand how trash can become the official without being overthrown. How funny is that?

As soon as I subscribed, I took a bite of poison. The brother of the protagonist's classmate was tricked into becoming a demon. The protagonist insisted on going up to level 0 to reach the peak of level 1. He had a trump card and didn't use it, so he had to hide his weakness. As a result, his brother also died because he blocked the gun. Playing a pig has really become the ultimate example of a pig. It can be said to be an incredible plot. Why did you write this plot? Really, if I don't ask anything else, I'm just asking you what you're doing for, is there any benefit? Can it lead to the growth of the protagonist? Isn't the pressure the protagonist has been under enough before? Do you insist on pretending to be a pig? Then there is a woman with intellectual problems who turns into a dog puppet, dragging her down even if she doesn't need it, and putting pressure on the protagonist when she can't do anything? Forcing the protagonist to help her find the cause of death, there are threats both overt and covert. If you don't help me, I will go find your childhood sweetheart. She will definitely help me. Author, what do you want to do? Isn't there a problem with putting this plot on the shelves? That's also something I didn't do right at all, right?