The Otherworldly Adventurer of Teyvat

You said that hatred cannot be forgotten in a thousand years, provided that the people in this family do not continue to cause trouble in this thousand years, but with the unrepentant and persistent trouble in the game, directly betraying Mondstadt's defense map, collaborating with the enemy and treason, I think they will not be forgotten even in the next thousand years.

How should I put it, this plot is constantly cut and confused, one world jumps to another world at the beginning, and then another world opens in another world. I don't understand what the author is doing. Is it a matryoshka doll? Can you write well? Can you come one by one? First it was time travel, then it was projection, and then it was a clone. The clone was transforming. It was such a mess that it made my head hurt. In Teyvat, which I originally thought was good, is obviously not bad at writing. The second world is also okay. But the more I write, the more crooked it is, reaching the sky. I just hope that when the protagonist travels through the world, he can first complete the things in that world, describe the process, gain gains, complete the summary, and then switch to the world when it is completed or halfway done. Instead of just writing the beginning, jumping to another world, and then repeating it.

The flow of heavens with the original god as the main body. I can accept those two designs. After all, there are many things in Genshin Impact's worldview that are not smooth enough. There are two main points - One is that there are too many typos. An old man picked out most of them, but I saw that there are still some missing ones, and the author has corrected only a handful of them. The other is that there are too many explanations in the main text. It is not necessary for every decision of the protagonist to be followed by an explanation, and the explanation should not be a few paragraphs long. 😨It ruined the reading immersion several times in a row, and the plot progressed slowly and was suspicious of hydrology. Although many people say: "What's wrong with the free chapters?" But the problem is that the free chapters are so good, what's the point of charging money based on the number of words later? ? 😓

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I didn't want to chase anymore, so I hit him with a hammer and a stick. First, Shuangcheng wrote a little bit, and then suddenly ran away from Hokage. Naruto wrote a little bit, and then suddenly ran away from one person. . . I can't imagine how many more worlds there are in the future. The key is that I haven't finished any of them. I just suddenly ran into another world without any warning.

It is similar to Xiao Yiren next door In order to prevent being invincible too quickly, the next door has added several restrictions. In the later stage, the settings are too many to remember It is similar here, paving the way for each world to suppress the combat power, and then just paving the way, you will not take a step, where is the infrastructure No matter how hard you press, this is a spring. It will rebound when it hits the bottom. It's not like eating a handful of melon seeds in one breath. How can you eat them without taking them out? Just realized, how did you write a person into a chat group I won't go into details. I don't know how to change it, but it feels easy to collapse.

As far as Zhutianliu novels are concerned, I can read it, but it is very messy. After chapter 170, I can only talk about fun. For Genshin Impact fans, they are just selling dog meat in sheep's clothing, and they will soon have nothing to do with Genshin Impact. There are more than 200 photos of Genshin Impact that don't even have ten chapters!

Stop jumping around the world, write more about Teyvat. This is just a title. The previous few worlds have been jumping around the world without much development. This kind of writing is a waste of time.

Read the first chapter. If the author writes it this way, I would find it quite alienating if the protagonist is not Mondstadt. After all, in Mondstadt, for thousands of years, most people, whether at the bottom or at the top, have treated the Lawrence family as a trash can. Isn't the protagonist angry? Not angry? Still want to stay in this place and contribute to it? Like a slave? I hope the protagonist will lead the family to go out and develop! If not, I hope the protagonist's family's reasons for staying in Mondstadt are convincing! Finally, if the protagonist's family is still in Mondstadt, I won't watch it. Of course, if it becomes popular later, I will come back to learn. Finally, I wish you a great sale.

Is there anyone who can read this book? Now I see Naruto, One Piece, Marvel and these three things and I feel a little panicked. Can I read this book carefully? 😳

It's a bit messy. Before completing one task, I immediately start the next one, and there isn't much progress.

The plot is seriously torn, and the plot of Zhutian is also like a hammer in one place and a stick in the other. It's uncomfortable to watch.

How should I put it, a common problem in many Zhutian novels It's like you copied a piece of code in [Game A] and then pasted it into [Game B]. Hey, there is no problem at all😓. It's really outrageous... At least there must be a process similar to digestion and absorption, right? ?

Genshinga keeps traveling through the heavens? ? Cold weather nail warning⚠️

It feels like you are already writing randomly. You might as well write a chat group. It is really outrageous to change the world in one or two chapters like this.

There are hammers here and there, and it looks too messy, like a wireless matryoshka doll. It's like I was doing a main quest, and halfway through it I ran off to do a side quest. Before I finished the side quest, I went to find another NPC to take over the quest. After I got through the quest, I went to collect materials to synthesize props. Although I was having fun, it looked very uncomfortable.

I can't stand seeing one person in this world any longer. I'm so tired. When I saw the world of one person, I even forgot that this was a Genshin Impact fanfic, but a Ben Tenshin Tong Chuan Wen. What I wanted to read at first was just a Genshin Impact fanfic. The author writes each world with intention, but it doesn't make sense, right? The biggest problem of Zhutianwen is that the combat power jumps too much, so now it is invincible or pseudo-invincible at the beginning. The slow upgrade flow in the style of this book is no longer popular. One is that it suppresses the combat power, the other is that it is not exciting enough, and the third is that I don't care what the protagonist has paid, I just want to see what he has done.

I withdrew when I saw the Hokage. This kind of backdoor is full. In the early stage, the strength is still weak. In the later stage, it is all about authority. What's the use? The power system is still complicated.

It's so messy, I keep putting it on and off

It's a bit confusing. One world ends suddenly, and then it switches directly from one world to another. The writing in each world is neither much nor deep. Is the author writing articles based on subscriptions? Keep reading more and continue, read less and change the world

You should update more quickly! I've watched it twice! 😆😆😆😆😆😆😆

Although the author always has multiple threads and seems a bit messy, but should I say it or not, the writing is really good. I hope the author can control the plot and not collapse.

You can throw away the book "One Man in Two Days" after writing it.

You haven't finished writing yet? ? ? ? ? ? ?

Where are you writing now? Still in the Republic of China?

There is a lot of knowledge about other worlds that cannot be spread. It will be destroyed by the laws of nature and humanity. Be careful that the laws of nature will wear you down and turn you into a Qiuqiu person. Like the Kanreyan people, there are many Tewatts wandering around in other worlds. Keli's mother often goes to other worlds.

When will I finish writing "One Person"?

I finally understand why the eunuch is here, the plot is messy with a hammer here and a stick here and there.