Immortality Begins with the Dog Official

If you don't know how to write emotional dramas, don't write them. Those chapters of Hua Nongyue are too toxic. Did you fall in love with her without any emotional foundation? The protagonist was moved immediately? Dissuaded

1. The setting of this book is very good, but your ideas keep wandering here and there. The introduction, early stage, and middle stage are not unified. Readers will be lost several times, which greatly affects the performance. 2. I read your new book, it's average. 3. You are not suitable for writing cool articles. It is recommended that you start a new book based on the ideas of the middle period of this book. 4. The system of this book can be used again, modified, improved, written well, and it will become popular. 5. This book should have had a higher score, it is better to reflect on it.

Where is the dog you promised? Why is he such a bad person

There is such a baffling setting as Tiandao's household registration

The protagonist does not seem to have the talent to be the mastermind behind the scenes. Every time he does something, there will always be loopholes, which will bring trouble to the big boss. He is addicted to people and food, and always goes wrong at critical moments.

, I won't recognize you as a dog official if you haven't raped a civilian girl.

The setting is too big and I feel like the author can't control it. The character of the protagonist is too complex and will collapse sooner or later.

I can't understand the setting: Martial arts strength determines everything - then you have to practice martial arts - martial arts training requires martial arts - martial arts can only be obtained by being an official - becoming an official requires participating in the imperial examination - participating in the imperial examination requires studying - the quality of studying has nothing to do with martial arts qualifications. Then most of the officials selected through the imperial examination have average martial arts qualifications. This logic makes no sense at all.

As soon as you look at the introduction, you will know that he is a dog official who betrays his own class.

The beginning was not bad. Crazy promotion of martial arts. Everyone who knew about it was killed. It means no one knew. Domineering The female rebels started to be very poisonous. The man wrote so hypocritically. Writing about why he was such a virgin. Things about modern people. He also messed with the body memory As a result, the woman's passive reaction was to kill him. It was just like trying to kill him after looking at the body of the rescuer.

Author Do normal people touch their noses from time to time? No matter when, where or who you are? Don't you feel embarrassed? It is recommended that you touch your nose less. In fact, you can touch other objects on your body, such as objects similar to your nose, which can not only relieve your embarrassment, become a saint, become a Buddha, but also instantly enter the sage mode, which is beneficial to your body and mind!

When I saw Huajia Lou Chuan and Xu Chongzhong waiting to die in seclusion, I had a question❓  Hua Nongyue and Xu Chong did not have any relationship foundation in the previous works. They had not even met or had any contact with each other. From the first meeting, the heroine's sister-in-law was forced to describe falling in love with the protagonist. They used far-fetched reasons (a poem and some imagination). It was originally a misunderstanding, and they were brought together abruptly. Starting from the beginning, the protagonist did not like Hua Nongyue and thought it was a misunderstanding. Later, he almost failed to cultivate Taoism in the Zi Mansion, and the author made no sense. He wrote the inner monologue into sadness for fear that Hua Nongyue would be sad? Such a sudden change? In just a few days, it turned into a love that lasts until death? Too stiff, too fake, The heroine Sun Yourong and the protagonist have gone through a lot of foreshadowing in the previous articles, and have developed according to the heroine's line of writing. The author's head suddenly popped up, and inexplicably inserted a character named Hua Nongyue, the heroine's sister-in-law? The author wanted to come up with it, right?

I don't understand the introduction. Where are you from? Are you right or wrong? Everyone usually sees the dog official coming, but from what you wrote, it seems that Bao Qingtian is still a loyal minister, but you don't take away the bird position and write a villain for us. Isn't it good to be the master? What kind of house slave do you want to be?

I don't quite understand it after reading Chapter 30. Have you seen the explanation at the end? The core martial arts are said to be directly related to public opinion, so shouldn't all officials be clean and honest? From monarch to philosopher king? Popular public opinion can affect martial arts, it is an absolutely fair KPI calculation method.

Brother, don't think about feelings, it's too poisonous

Please read it! ! ! Thank you! ! !

Can I read this book? Reading reviews of the book said that the heroine became sworn to each other within two chapters... It seems to be very toxic. Have you ever tried poison?

You can say you don't know the extra information, but you can't use rules to suppress it. Then you are a proper cultivator. If this is the case, why are you doing the ascending channel below?

In a world where anyone who learns martial arts privately will be exterminated, the protagonist can redeem his skills to cover up, but he doesn't. The plot of chapters 19 and 20 is simply disgusting

The author seems to like to tell lies, and the plot is full of nonsense. The protagonist's father has been using embezzled money to provide relief to the people. He is a good man. So, how can he not be found out and not reveal any flaws when he gives hundreds of taels of relief every time? And judging from the plot, the protagonist's father had martial arts before he became an official. Later, his cousin said that his father was not a Taiping Dao person, so where did his martial arts come from? Also, his cousin should have been helped by his father, but as a result, his father died, and his cousin immediately ran away, not caring about anything, and still being a Riddler. How much of a white-eyed wolf is this? The protagonist is just a virgin, knowing that her cousin is a villain and will die if found out, but she still tries her best to help others, but the key point is that she has no emotions at all. It was also said that his father found strangulation marks on his neck and decided to die himself. Why do you think the protagonist committed suicide? His father is the famous detective Conan. At this time, shouldn't it be a conspiracy theory? Do you think the county magistrate is up to something? And according to the world view of this novel, it should indeed be like this. The most cunning thing is to decide to die by yourself and not make it difficult for the protagonist, right? Come on, the protagonist's cousin is saying that his father has a death wish. As such an image who loves children deeply, there is no explanation. Why, in such a dark society, I really feel that the protagonist can survive well. All in all, it's just a bunch of confusing logic and conspiracy for conspiracy's sake.

Traveling through ancient times is like walking at night in brocade clothes

Eunuch, he deserves it, what a wonderful thing he wrote.

After reading a few chapters, I have to complain. An official rushed in to put out the fire and was burned to death, but turned out to be a martial arts master. There is a world where there is still a knowledge barrier. As a result, there are too many martial arts practitioners.

Big cheers for the author, vote for recommendation

As an 18-year old bookworm and a 28-level VIP reader, I think the quality of this book can reach the platinum level. The plot planning and language expression are all top-notch. It makes us old bookworms have the desire to read seriously. Unlike many books, I can guess the next thirty chapters after reading three chapters. The shortcoming of this book is that the title is too lousy and it is difficult to attract readers' attention. In addition, I am a novice and has no reputation, so the effect may not be very good. I hope the author will give it more thought and then conceive a 300 book. For an hour of more than 10,000 words, the pace does not need to be so fast. Just do some small copies that do not affect the main structure. The scale must be grand. I believe you can become a super god 🪖🪖🪖🪖

The True Biography of Gu Long, looking forward to the new book!

This book is so well written! Facing the sea, the sky is clear, the moon is bright, and the flying dragons are in the sky under the warm spring flowers. To put it simply: you are immersed in the scene and have a strong sense of immersion.

Clean out the bookshelf and dig out this book. When I read this book, it was a bit exaggerated to tell me that it was a famous work by a platinum writer, but there is absolutely no problem with it being a work by an ordinary great writer. After seeing that the author level is only level 4, it's a bit incredible. This book has only made tens of thousands? I hope the author can persist. With another book of this level, with the current subscription level, it will definitely be no problem to earn hundreds of thousands.

The section of Zifu Zhongdao where you give medicine is very poisonous, but the front part is pretty good.

Xu Song? Can you sing Luzhou Moon?