The Eternity of Trickery: I Can See the Entry

The writing is quite good, and the plot is revealed bit by bit. However, when the plot progresses, the protagonist has no ability to take the initiative at all, and has no protagonist appearance. He is just like a camera, which is meaningless. The protagonist needs to participate, or even actively participate. For example, in the previous scenes of sheep transformation and amnesia, the protagonist was not assigned an active skill, and the plot advancement was all passive, which was very boring.

The biggest problem with the protagonist is that he is too useless. He is pushed along by the plot and has no subjective initiative at all. It seems that everyone can use him as a tool, and then through some combination of circumstances, the protagonist will win. If you really want to write this kind of story that doesn't have a lot of upgrading, you should at least add some IQ to the protagonist. He is just a tool to promote the development of the plot. Now

After reading about 10 chapters, your novel is like telling a story. The protagonist arrives in a strange world and narrates what he sees in a way of pushing the case. It feels like watching Detective Conan. The reader does not want you to burn your brain to solve the case. What the reader wants to see is to absorb strange abilities and become an ancestor, breaking all constraints. Do you understand?

It was okay at first, but now it feels like a mess. The protagonist has no distinctive personality. It feels like the author doesn't know what kind of person the protagonist should be. He looks here and there. There is a sense of separation between the story and the characters. In fact, the story of this book is good, but the protagonist is like a passive spectator, rather than integrating into the story and growing up with it. Readers can only get some post-reading rewards from the story, but it is difficult to get them from the protagonist.

How should I put it? The protagonist has been pushed away. There are weird and desperate scenes in the book, and the protagonist's performance is just a slightly peculiar ordinary person with no ability to resist. The mood of the whole book has been going downhill. There is no big breaking point until now. At least there must be a goal.

The writing is very good, fascinating, and has the potential to be a masterpiece, but it feels like it is neither good nor good when reading. The structure is there, but the protagonist has no sense of participation at all. The whole process is just watching what others do. It's awkward, but I just want you to read on. This style is not easy to become popular, but it is indeed a good book. Keep reading and see if there are any readers who like this style.

In fact, there are similarities with the very popular Li Huowang, but the author just wants to feel comfortable writing, and does not want readers to feel comfortable reading.

It's very good, very scary, but the identity of the time traveler also feels like the psychological description is incomplete. For example, why don't you commit suicide and take a look? It's such a bad start, and you don't have any ability to make a comeback. If you don't try to mess it up, just die to him? I want to see how the author writes it?

I have been drawing for a long time, and it feels good to add filters.

Don't be too cruel to me. 84 Photos have not been taken on the path to immortality. You, a certain eunuch, originally looked at the first part and thought about putting it on the shelf and waiting for you to post more, but you are not 100% sure of the rhythm and start to let it go.

Li Yu, he's not just being tortured, but he's being tortured and scheming. It's too outrageous.

Is the protagonist a short guy or a fat guy? WC

Finally the eunuch. Tsk tsk. Call me a prophet.

The narrative is too messy and makes people uncomfortable to watch, but the story is okay. Another thing is that it is not exciting. How can a story without excitement attract readers? It's almost 100 chapters, so the author should think carefully about the follow-up.

Too verbose🥺

There is no main line at all. It is more like a collection of stories rather than a novel, and I don't know if it is an illusion. I always feel that I have seen these stories he wrote in other places, especially the story of the first Yin Immortal. Here, readers who know Aite will look for who published this work. This work should have been published a long time ago.

I can't understand more and more what's going on.

This book is really well written. If the story line was not too confusing, it might make people continue reading it. The gas is very clear, but overall it is inexplicable.

None of the more popular novels nowadays have heroines. I hope it won't be written as an invincible article. I'm tired of reading it. The author's writing style is very good, he is brave in innovation and has strong plot ability.

What happened? It suddenly turned into a side story that had nothing to do with the previous chapter.