The Protagonists of "The Immortal Practitioner" Are All My Brothers

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First, let's talk about the plot of this chapter (opening chapter) The previous part revolves around the girl. Part One: Someone snatched the baby girl, but was scared off by the protagonist's people. Then the enemy held a meeting and got discouraged and planned to give up the baby girl. Part 2: The protagonist and his party find their sister's house. Part Three: The Royal Palace, the introduction of the emperor, he knows that the protagonist is coming and there are incidents and murders. The front and back do not match, and the two key points are not highlighted. 1. The importance of female babies 2. The core buying point of the novel, look at the title of your novel ——(The following are frequently asked questions in the article) 1. Paragraph questions. 2. Anticlimactic. 3. The protagonist is not specially treated: To put it simply, there is no memory point, and the attention is distracted by various characters. Specialization does not necessarily mean having a cheat. 4. The plot is a bit sudden: the explanation is not sufficient. 5. The perspective is confusing. 6. There is a problem with the emphasis on characterization. 7. Too many characters. 8. Resources are not used rationally: The description of the weather in the opening chapter is too detailed, which will form a resource. You have to use it rationally, that is, events that will occur under this weather. The stick is also a resource, but this resource can become a foreshadowing because it is not a fast-changing resource. —— When writing, you need to understand the following questions 1. What is the key in this plot. For example: the girl in the article. She is the beginning of the whole thing, and she is also the golden finger for the rise of the protagonist, so the entire plot must revolve around her. ——Tell me your own opinion The importance of girls is not highlighted. The biggest failure is that the enemy abandons the girl. This will reduce the importance of the girl, and even become an insignificant figure. In this way, a conflict that could become bigger becomes a slowdown, and there is a feeling that big things are reduced to small, and small things are reduced to nothing. ——Personal Thoughts: In fact, you don't need to slice the entire event. Setting changes: Weather: Thunderstorm. Location: Broken House (Broken Temple) ☞The girl's refuge. Character changes: Gun Yong is about to appear Mi Shen is not needed. Wang Li is upgraded. Yunlong is best changed to: summoned by the emperor. Explanation: The protagonist's father cannot leave the frontier and can only send his confidants to meet him. The result of this chapter: The protagonist cannot get the girl for the time being. Reason: The timing is wrong, the girl has a greater role, paving the way for the next plot. —— The following plot arrangement: On a thunderstorm day, the protagonist and his group entered the ruined temple to take shelter from the rain and greeted the girl. After Zhao Yunlong settled everything. The sky is getting darker, and the rain will hardly stop for a while, but it has a tendency to rain heavily. A look of anxiety was evident on Yunlong's face. He thought for a while, this is Tianqi City, and it is also the place with the best security in the entire x country. After hesitating, he told the protagonist that he came with a mission, and protecting you was just a matter of course. Now that the time limit is approaching, he must go to the meeting. (You can import the original text and give a reasonable reason to leave) There are still many troubles about how a monk can predict the footsteps of mortals! After Yunlong finished speaking, regardless of whether the protagonist responded or not, he rushed out in the heavy rain and disappeared without a trace after a few steps. (Atmosphere rendering) "Crackling" The firewood under the broken house made a sound. The protagonist moved his body closer to his brother and started talking. (Output information) (The transition here is to pave the way for Wang Li's appearance) "Boom——" A thunder exploded tore apart the world, reflecting a black figure in front of the broken house. Wang Li appeared and a conflict broke out. After a few rounds, the protagonist group was at a disadvantage. Wang Li used his spiritual power to avoid long nights and dreams, and used his backhand to shake the protagonist's brother away, and picked up the girl. At this time, an accident happened, (the girl's resistance, imported from the original text) The girl was about to escape, and Wang Li wanted to catch her again. The protagonist saw the right opportunity to interfere, and the two brothers cooperated. Wang Li was guarding the door with one against three. Although he could not completely subdue them for a while, it was impossible for the girl to escape. Wang Li laughed and looked at the girl and said: She is indeed a Chaos xx, so powerful without even practicing, (gives some clues) The reaction of the protagonist group after hearing this. ......(This is a transition that I haven't thought about yet) Yunlong appeared and attacked Wang Li from behind. It turns out that when Yunlong left the ruined temple, he vaguely realized that something was wrong (give the reason). Yunlong and the protagonist's younger brother join forces to fight against Wang Li (it's not important to mention it in one or two strokes) (Quickly switch back to the protagonist's point of view to increase the tension) The protagonist ventures out of the ruined temple, lights the signal, and attracts two people, Guanyong and his sister. (Sister appeared first and overwhelmingly subdued Wang Li. The protagonist team just breathed a sigh of relief when Gun Yong arrived.) Enter the battle again (this is not important, just bring out the main information with a few strokes) Return to the protagonist's point of view again (this time returning to the point of view, no need to rush back, just relax). The protagonist's side has not changed much. He is still at a disadvantage, but he is able to protect the girl. (There is a foil relationship here) Substitute the result of this chapter: the girl escaped on her own, or the girl was captured by the enemy, it doesn't matter. The protagonist can't get her now anyway. After the incident is over, you can switch to the viewpoint, and it's still a thunderstorm (meaning that not long has passed). Imperial Palace The secret guard reported the matter to the emperor. This matter attracted the emperor's attention. —— That's all I thought of, but it didn't highlight the core buying point of the novel: my brother is the protagonist. So you can add some characteristics of the protagonists of popular novels into the article. For example: explosive seed. —— By the way, in order to avoid misunderstanding, here is the explanation. I am a man.

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