Legendary Family

Author, let me ask you, are you going to write a family epic novel similar to Game of Thrones? If not, then give the time traveler more pig trotters roles. You have written so much, but not even one-tenth of the pig's feet have appeared. If so, how many years have you been planning to write? Who would read such a complicated family novel with many pig's feet now?

It's chapter 12 and there's not even a trace of pig's feet? There is no plot to enjoy, it is all narrative and not interesting. Is it okay for the author to write a running story like this?

How many protagonists are there? I'm a little hesitant to look at the character bar.

Take it easy and see. I think the author should consider whether to cut it and rewrite it. The author has a good writing style and good writing skills. But I think the essence of a novel is that a story must have a core. This one lacks the core. In the Internet era, it is difficult to stand up to the current situation. If you are not a top master, it will be difficult for you to get up.

I'm just suggesting this as a reader. I believe there must be some book friends who have mentioned this issue and even want to criticize you. You know the first three chapters are very important. If you are not a master and have old readers to back you up, you should just do the three golden chapters honestly. The first chapter doesn't have any information about the protagonist except the words "three brothers". I know you want to portray the characters. But that doesn't stop you from naming the protagonist. For example, after Ronaldinho left, Slender thought of his comatose younger son. The old rule of the starting point is that the coma is designated as the protagonist. It gives the reader information so that they won't be confused about who the protagonist is. Chapter 2: Su Xing does not explain clearly whether the consciousness of the protagonist is mainly natives or those who have traveled through time. This greatly affects the reader's sense of immersion. It doesn't matter if you are not a time traveler, I'm afraid it will be uncomfortable if you don't know both sides. Chapter 3: I won't talk about it until I get off work. Finally, the content in brackets at the end of some chapters is completely unnecessary. If you want to explain something, just explain it openly. Such suffixes are very abrupt and distract the reader's attention. Of course, there are many advantages that I won't go into.

In fact, when readers have a sense of immersion, you can write about the growth of family members in the protagonist's memories. It would be too time-consuming to open a few chapters.

I feel that the setting of this book is very good, but the mist and mist written earlier do not highlight the priorities. It would be much better if the previous plots were moved back.

There is no chance of this book, it is 80% eunuch.

No, you look at the capital city where the sun rises and then look westward. Have you confused yourself? They set out from the capital of Xiwang. To the City of the Rising Sun. Cultists broke out in the capital of Westward. What did you write? Return to the City of the Rising Sun after slaying the cultists? Then why the hell are they going back to the Capital of the Rising Sun now? That's the capital of Xiwang. Dead speechless. Many times I wrote it backwards. I really can't stand it now. Can you remember it clearly before writing?

This monkey's hook is too wide.

Why must all refugees be assisted? Although cruel, this is also true. Just for a reputation, and then face death together? Looking at this setting, there should be no shortage of people. What the family needs is someone to survive stably.

Slow-burning book. It's an atypical web article, but it's not bad. If you persist, you will get results.

More, it's very interesting, maybe two chapters a day

The branch characters in this novel are full of characters, the main line of the novel is relatively clear, and it has the potential of a top novel.

The most important thing is to establish the protagonist and the person who plays the main role. Other descriptions should be done in the middle and late stages as much as possible.