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When I read Chapter 5, it was okay. Several small plots were good. It was indeed a lot slower than the previous one. But brother, what is this first chapter? I didn't want to read it until halfway through. It was too flat, just like boiled water. I just dismissed it. I skipped directly to the part where three people were drinking, but it still didn't taste that good. It's that attractive flavor. I trust the characters you designed, author, but you just threw out a concept. I don't know how it is different from Xia Liuqing's, but... Okay, the map of Yan Kingdom is long enough, I won't pretend anymore, author, I want to teach you how to write the beginning. Have you seen Marvel movies or listened to pop music? Who doesn't always put the most attractive things first? (Trailer, chorus) Author, you can definitely bring out the protagonist's ability for a while, leaving a suspense, pretending to be a b first, not telling us what it is called, and making us curious. Isn't this just pulling it off? Then you thank the author for the first chapter. Why did you spend one page introducing the original characters? Who doesn't know that? On the contrary, the character of the protagonist was not shown at all. Wasn't the beginning of your last book good? You can just copy it! For example, if you encounter a few miscellaneous fish on the way to anywhere, even if the protagonist's personality is not suitable for showing to his companions, isn't there still some miscellaneous fish to practice with? The description of the protagonist's personality in the five pictures is not outstanding enough, it is too templated. The most outstanding thing about you, author, is the character design! ! ! Besides, the main ceiling for fandom is there, so it's better to make the characters stand out. This is my first time doing a book review, and it's definitely wrong to teach people how to write books, but I just want to say that I read online novels just to drink! Not here to drink plain water! I'm about to have a climax in Chapter 6. I'll give you some pointers after I finish reading it🐶 I stand on the moral high ground and give pointers. Jpg

Isn't it just a little thing to feed the fish? Who can read this stuff? If I don't save four or five million words, I won't be able to read it. I'm afraid I'll feed you to death. But if I don't save it, I can't read this little thing. It's too little and I'll have to forget it if I keep it. 🐶

It turns out that you also wrote "The Ancestor of Ten Thousand Dharmas". No wonder this "Quan Xing, Huang Sheng" looks so familiar.

The writing is very good, but it's a pity that the protagonist is an aborigine. The Sa family still likes time travellers. After all, it feels so immersive. Otherwise, the sudden appearance of an aboriginal in the original work would be quite inconsistent with the plot.

Test the Poison, in the first two chapters of the current update, the plot starts from the Luotian Dajiao in Longhu Mountain and becomes nonsensical, with time and space traveling, and gods invading consciousness. There is no coherent line, and the subsequent articles are deliberately watery, starting with descriptions of physical appearance. Personal summary, bad

Mine Clearance: Time Travel and War is full of water. There are a lot of incomprehensible descriptions of the little Japanese sidekick, and they are all complimentary, making it seem like they want to join the protagonist group. There are basically no descriptions of the Nuo beasts that are one of the highlights, and Pokémon has become a martial arts movie. They all describe the protagonist charging forward with the Jin Ge, and what about sweeping, thrusting and blocking, and it feels like it can't be rounded. How did the protagonist defeat Little Japan and a Nuo beast sneak attack came? Brother, you are a witch who can sneak attack with a Nuo beast, so why rush up and fight in melee ( •᷄ࡇ•᷅💧​)

Fang Xiangshi's palms are covered with bear skin, his eyes are golden, and he wears black clothes and red clothes. He holds a shield and carries a gun. ——"Zhou Rites. Xia Guan. Fang Xiangshi"

The first part is so good, why is the second part so bad? He also traveled back in time to the War of Resistance, which was pretty bad.

Before 179, it was okay. From 179 to the latest chapters, they are all about fighting. It can be said that if you have read it, you have not read it. It is disgusting. Always describe the battle, the Japanese are tricking one after another, or do you just charge with a gold gun, where is your witch beast? Let me go, I asked why there were no comments on the following chapters, no, I didn't reflect on it myself. I looked at the combat chapter and it didn't improve at all. If it doesn't work, you can just give it a rough description. Write it in such detail. You write about working from nine to five, going to and from get off work, fishing in troubled waters, and improving your strength. There is no need to describe the fighting content so much. After 2 and 30 chapters of physical fighting and life and death fights, I feel numb The experience pack for killing devils all knows the summons. It makes me numb Generally speaking, I can read the front and the back, but I don't recommend it.

The drama has been changed a bit too much, I can't stand it. I can't stand it from the chapter on the death of the Heavenly Master. Not to mention the plot, Zhang Chulan's character alone is very different from Aid. A little cunt has turned into a loser.

The writing is very good, but the problem is the introduction... The ten guys are useless, the Heavenly Master is also a ten guy, can he do this?

Does the back feel like AI? After the fight, the protagonist lamented that the battle gained a lot/lost a lot, and then! There is no turning point, the next boss appears directly, there is a fight, the protagonist sighs, the next boss appears in seconds, my God, is this something written by a human?

There is no need to read Chapter 178. It is all about combat descriptions. The environment description and appearance description account for one-third at the beginning, and then the battle continues for seven or eight chapters. In the middle, there is also a lot of psychological descriptions. After killing a little devil, you immediately switch to the next little devil. It is like a level-breaking game. There is no plot link to directly defeat the boss.

A good novel, what are you doing? It's so unlucky.

It's a pity, since it's not very good to use the character perception of the previous book. It's okay to introduce the protagonist of the previous book, but it is a poisonous point for a small author and you are still writing a fanfic. You can just create an original character and set it to time travel. How great.

It's so good after it's put on the shelves. I don't even want to subscribe anymore

It's AI when I travel back in time. It feels like I've abandoned Hun Quanqin.

There are two possibilities. There is a new person. He is not as good as the one before and can only write journals. The other is that the money is just bad and it is just bad. If you can eat a little, it is better.

The author is probably from the south. If you can't write Erhuayin, it's better not to write it. It's too awkward to read.

The first part was okay, but after it was put on the shelves, there was a long paragraph that was inexplicable. Everyone gave you 4 or 5 paragraphs of description. After traveling to the war, the little Japanese experience package had a long paragraph of appearance description, and they always used praise words such as perseverance, determination, indestructibility, and courage in this original set. Brother, who are you trying to figure out who is the protagonist? You won't want to change someone midway and become the Japanese Long Aotian, right? •᷄ࡇ•᷅ And just to see those Nuo beasts, and the witchcraft, but in the end, they rushed up to fight with "holding gold swords". Are you a mage and turned into a martial arts movie? (•᷄ࡇ•᷅💧​)

I remember that the Eight Magic Skills all have great side effects, because they need to be used to deal with the devils quickly, the spirit-obtaining general's service, the Liuku Immortal Thief's cannibalism, the interior of the Fenghou Qimen, the others are not clear at the moment, and the Nascent Soul of the Qi Ti Origin can control the body. I don't know if it counts.

Just caught up with the latest chapter. To give a brief summary, it is watery and short. The author's good starting hand may be ruined.

The hydrology is too serious, and there are countless useless descriptions of the environment and appearance, so I have abandoned it.