Fengtian Chengyun

Fellow Taoist's writing is good. I have collected it and will continue to read it. We signed the contract at about the same time. I saw Fellow Daoist's book on the public writer list a few days ago. There are only a few signed books out of hundreds of books, including you and me. The review section is too deserted, please support each other! I wish fellow Taoists to ascend to godhood as soon as possible!

Probably everyone will find that my writing skills are very poor. Actually, I spend more time choosing words and sentences than I do conceiving plots.

I only read the first chapter. The more I write, the better it will be. Subjective point of view: This is a world that many time-travelers have traveled through, and there may also be many time-traveling predecessors (guess, if you follow the comic daily cultivation of immortality, the embarrassing things of your predecessors must be inevitable. If you follow the main line of cultivation of immortality, then To slay demons and defend the way, to defeat monsters and upgrade, and to inquire about immortality, the seniors are likely to become help and stumbling blocks.) Also, the reason why the protagonist was expelled from the master should be foreshadowing, but I don't think it is enough foreshadowing. At least at that moment in the article, the protagonist has no emotional changes, such as hatred, regret, or regret. Instead, it was a calm, somewhat silky transition to reconsidering joining the sect. The subjective feeling here is not very good. For reference only. I have a sense of the whimsical vision of the celestial eye. However, the scene where the protagonist opens his eyes for the first time was not shocking enough and did not give me the feeling of light up. Finally, the current starting point of the novel should be attractive enough at the beginning, and can be appropriately funny (generally used by great authors). New authors are more recommended to focus on the main line. For example, the number of words in the article introducing the time-traveling predecessors is too many. Sometimes, just one sentence is all it takes. Readers will understand it, but if it is too long, readers will get bored. This is a suggestion. Second, I quickly glanced at the first chapter, which is a common operation for online readers. However, at the end of the first chapter, I still didn't know what the future of the male protagonist would be, and the main plot of the article was not clear enough. For example, Tang Monk wanted to learn the scriptures, Luffy wanted to become the Pirate King, and what the protagonist needs to do after crossing over. Or what is the purpose of the protagonist's cultivation of immortality? This is my little suggestion. I still hope the author can keep writing. Come on.