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After reading the latest chapter, I also have a few thoughts that I would like to share with the author. I still like reading this book 1. Norwegian Wood, I don't think it should be written for others, and the protagonist should not write it now. After all, I can't think of anyone under the age of 20 who has the writing skills, social cognition, and own experience to write Norwegian Wood. These conditions are indispensable. How about the supporting actress? It's impossible to write it, and the protagonist is the same, so you might as well not write it. This is one of the poisonous points 2. Weathering With You. To be honest, the plot of Weathering with You is not that good. If you want to write a pure love tragedy, you might as well write Five Centimeters Per Second. I dare say that Five Centimeters Per Second is the best novel with the plot of Xinhai City, and its theme song is not ordinary. I remember it was ranked among the theme songs of animation movies around the world. 3. The protagonist's gay friend and the girl who was bullied, I felt awkward when I saw them. Does the protagonist have such a strong sense of justice? For a girl I just met, I almost broke off the relationship just because my gay friend was involved. Is this what happened after two years of relationship? Can the author portray the protagonist more realistically? I think most people, even if they know their friends are wrong, will not do this to their friends because of a stranger. I hope the author can quickly improve the relationship between the gay friend and the protagonist. I think it is really bad These are the three poisonous points of your book in my opinion. Others are okay. The last time I read the article was last year. I hope the author will get better and better as he writes

The plot of these ten chapters of friends has been too ugly recently. I feel like the author Wen Qing is suffering from a disease. What I want to read is a cool novel, where the protagonist becomes a literary giant and dominates his small life, and also has beautiful women. I thought this pretentious and pointless analysis of my inner emotions was reading a novel about cultivating immortals to relieve my inner demons😰😰😰

I re-read it twice and sorted it out, but I still feel very uncomfortable 1, Chapter 4: The protagonist and Dongming Kyohei were roommates from the first year to the second year of high school. Original sentence "The two studied at the aristocratic school Aoyama High School from the first year of high school, and they were roommates from the first year to the second year of high school." Tongming Kyouhei. He protects the protagonist from being bullied. The original sentence is "The original owner, if it weren't for Toaki Kyohei who has been looking after him, he might have become a bullied existence." The main character's food expenses during difficult times were all paid for by Tomei Kyohei. The original sentence is "The meals at school and other things were paid for by Toaki Kyohei." Let's take a moment." 2, Chapter 14: When the protagonist is ridiculed by people from the literature department, Dongming Kyohei protects the protagonist. The original sentence "This extremely obvious ridicule obviously makes Dongming Kyōhei very dissatisfied." 3, Chapter 19, mentioning the protagonist's meal again. Original sentence "What is friendship? If you have money, you can go to the other person's house and have three meals a day, and then walk away confidently at night." Higashi Ming Kyohei has a very good attitude towards the protagonist. Original sentence "Shinichi Shinichi stands calmly outside the door, although I don't know why every time he comes over. , Dongming Kyohei had to come to pick him up in person instead of opening the door directly." This sentence is connected with the following sentence "But he thought, maybe this is friendship." Higashiki Kyohei talks about everything in front of the protagonist, and even his own parents complain to the protagonist, but he will not do this in front of others. The original sentence is "Why should I say such things to other people? They are not my roommate, and I have never told my girlfriend. What if she tells others?" It can be seen that Kyohei Dongming trusts the protagonist very much, even his own girlfriend does not trust him so much And the girl who was bullied was just the first time we met? It was also mentioned that during the cooling-off period for the next week, there was not much contact with Dongming Kyohei. Is this just because of the regrets of the protagonist's previous life? Or the justice in your heart? This is too Japanese and too beautiful. Author, I chose this because I wanted to make this book better, otherwise I wouldn't have spent the time to re-read it and write a long review. I hope you can listen to some of my suggestions. Recently, I feel that there are fewer people reading this book, and I can't see the number of readers. However, I still hope you can change these avoidable contents that make readers uncomfortable

After watching it for a few days, the protagonist's thoughts really made me feel a little uncomfortable. In Chapter 57, the protagonist's thoughts about Dongming Kyohei were very... Supercilious? I'm sorry, I'm not good at expressing myself in words. I really can't think of other words, but Kyohei Higashikata helps the protagonist so much. Just because of this incident, the protagonist wants to break up with him. This is very outrageous in my third opinion. I even became so bored after reading these chapters that I offset the depression caused by the tragic novel I just finished Even in Chapter 60, the protagonist's mentality changed and I regretted it. It's also hard for me to accept that the protagonist once had such thoughts. Maybe this is what Japanese literary youth are like? I can understand Tomei Kyouhei's psychological activities in Chapter 58, but I am a little confused by Sanno Chimei's actions in Chapter 59. Although I know that this is the most common emotional outburst in Japanese light novels, I just feel it is strange. In the entire content of this book, there are only three points that make me feel uncomfortable, and two of them are related to the supporting female characters. The author should be able to know through readers' comments what parts of the writing make us uncomfortable, and I hope to make more changes. In my opinion, gay friends and editors are the supporting characters you write that are least offensive to readers I can't influence your thoughts, the author. I don't know whether you write the book for yourself or to make money. If you are writing it for yourself, then I can't say more. But if you want to make money, please accept our suggestions and work hard to write a book that makes readers feel comfortable and willing to pay!

Although, although I don't feel comfortable with the author's idea of ​​setting up a protagonist who wants to dominate romance novels with Weathering with You, I have to say that many book friends' comments are confusing, smelly, and fragmented. The plot is controversial, the concept is not explored deeply, and compared with your name, the rubble comes last, correct. "The plot is the answer" is wrong. Looking at the entire story of Weathering with You, there are continuous transitions and connections in the novel, and the branches and endings are also closed. The transition of emotions and the resolution of conflicts are smooth. From the perspective of the story structure, it is on the pass line. "There is no depth at all" is wrong. The core concept of the trolley problem is wrong. If anyone thinks that this issue is not worth mentioning, please post your opinions on various forums to show that China has a lot of talents and masters among the people. It can easily solve this controversial philosophical and ethical issue. In fact, I think that just from the perspective of conceptual discussion, Weathering With You is a bit more literary than Your Name. Previous works, Five Centimeters per Second, The Garden of Words and Beyond the Clouds, all involve conflicts that exist in real society. Weathering With You also has them, but Your Name does not. The reason why there is a big difference in perception between works such as Weathering With You and Second Five is that Weathering with You adopts a semi-open ending, which is enhanced by quasi-tragedy techniques to create a deeper impression, while Weathering with You is an ending given by Makoto Shinkai in the face of contradictions, without giving the audience room to think and daydream. At the same time, it ends with a happy ending, without the addition of tragedy to the impression. "It is not in line with the line of writers" is wrong, it should be expressed as "not as literary as Shin Haicheng's works before his transformation". Tragedy is more suitable for carrying literary nature. Tragedy and comedy are of the same level of thought, giving people the perception and thinking, and the final effect is that tragedy is stronger than comedy. Xin Haicheng does not have this skill. Comedy can also have literary qualities, such as Shakespeare's four comedies. "The last two works of Shinkai Makoto's early works" are wrong. When converted into words, Five Centimeters Per Second, The Garden of Words and Beyond the Clouds are semi-prose (essays) that are not well loaded, which makes the contradictions very abrupt. The advantage is that the emotional appeal is good, but the story is too pulpy (Second Five is highlighted), the transition is abrupt (The Leaves of Words is highlighted), and the literary presence to be discussed is too low and vague (Beyond the Clouds is highlighted). The genre of excellent literary works that can be circulated and recognized internationally is often novels rather than prose poems. Only the novel genre can accommodate various pure literary techniques as well as discussions of social significance and philosophical thinking. This is why most Nobel writers award novels. The following is my suggestion to the author (because the author only hints at the protagonist's thoughts, but the protagonist's thoughts are not necessarily the author's thoughts, and the possibility of the author's writing tricks cannot be completely ruled out, I put them in the form of suggestions.). First: Animated movies have audio-visual bonuses. You cannot copy the data from the novel version with the bonus of real-life movies. This is a very perfunctory behavior. Second: From a purely storyline perspective, the plot of Weathering with You is qualified for an animated movie, but when presented as a novel, excellent literary techniques are hardly used to advance the entire storyline. The tram problem that wants to be discussed in depth is not very harmonious with the story, but creates a sense of separation. If it wants to reach the level of a movie and become a romance work above the pass line, it must at least have extra points for the scenery description skills of "A Ship Full of Clear Dreams Over the Galaxy", supplemented by superb writing to expand and polish the narrative and psychological parts, so that most people can resonate with Fan Gao. Otherwise, if the original plot is translated word for word using ordinary writing, the protagonist may really have to be scolded and defended. Finally, tell me your name. In terms of the plot alone, if you convert your name into a novel, you can see the plot of the entire work, which is body exchange (start, surface comedy constructs an expectation trap), lost contact and search for Sanye (player), truth is dislocated in time and space (player, deep conspiracy causes conflicts), reconnection and rescue (player, small sublimation), amnesia The ending (combined, the second conspiracy creates a new contradictory structure, the trap is lost, and then sublimates). The entire ups and downs of the three-layered wave structure successfully manipulates the audience's emotions. The literary skills are excellent, the characters are full and vivid, and with a little social culture and life principles embellishment, it is a rare and excellent work. This is my advice to some book friends. Since ancient times, the sadness of Liang Zhu and the joy of Xixiang are all representatives of Yan and Huang dramas. How can we say that sadness is noble and happiness is cheap?

It's a typical popcorn movie, and it doesn't fit the protagonist's role as a writer. Makoto Shinkai's movies, "Five Centimeters per Second" and "The Garden of Words" have plots and are worth recalling. When it comes to "Your Name", the combination of exchange + time travel was relatively new at the time, and coupled with the breakthrough in image quality, it was indeed okay. But when it comes to "Weathering With You", I am completely watching the beautiful wallpapers and a visual feast, but after watching it, I don't know what I watched, and it is not worth recalling. I don't know why the author values ​​"Weathering With You" so much, but the film's thin plot is inconsistent with the line of writers.

Has the author considered the style of writing? I gave the outline of the movie Xiuchundao to two masters, Jin Yong and Gu Long, to write it into a novel. The outline has not changed. Can the two versions be read the same to others? If you set the protagonist to only remember the main story content, you are not sure that the results will be the same as the original work.

I feel like chapters 9 to 14 are a bit redundant. The same goes for that friend. It's the same routine as in previous urban novels. The protagonist was not starved to death but died of poverty, but he had a rich second-generation brother. The protagonist traveled back in time and treated that brother better than his son. I don't even want to think about how the original person died.

The background design at the beginning is weird. The tuition fees of Japanese private schools are not bad. How can the protagonist's original single parent be able to attend? You can't feel it even through performance or special moves?

The bet is too inconsistent. I won once and lost three times. I promised to go up the mountain of swords and to the sea of ​​fire. Although I know you will win, I just can't stand it anymore. Goodbye.

Half of the readers in the previous chapters were missing. What's the point of not talking about the plot? What can you say clearly about literary theory? The characters you wrote can't stand up. How can you make readers believe in these preaching theories you wrote? I think you are really not as good as those authors of homogeneous works. They are at least lowering the difficulty to make up for their shortcomings. Unlike you, who can't even do the basics well!

The copywriter still needs someone else to write for him, it's really poisonous

It seems that Hayao Miyazaki has a greater influence. I have watched Spirited Away 5 times. I will not watch Weathering With You after watching it once.

Xin Haicheng is powerful, but Weathering With You blew him away. It's not as good as the previous works and feels too commercial.

In terms of plot alone, Makoto Shinkai is not as accurate as Asae, let alone top-notch.

This one will be used first...

Weathering With You is nothing but bullshit. It's so awesome. I'll hit you with Xu Laoke's Butterfly Lovers. Compared with this one, it's nothing. Have you watched too many good movies?

Introduction to Xinhai City? ? ? ?

After reading the debate, I had the feeling that the ministers were about to fight to the death, but why did your Majesty surrender first? I just took on the role of the protagonist a little bit, and the protagonist's surrender instantly separated me.

The character Ryoko Kamikura was very strange when she first appeared. Now the author has to spend so much time shaping it, why not just disappear. Anyone who has been to high school knows the problem of improving writing skills. Once you accumulate a certain amount of reading and writing, your level will naturally improve. During the three years of high school, I wrote a weekly diary once a week and an essay once a month. If I had a perfect score of 60 for the essay in the college entrance examination, I would be able to write about 50 points no matter what. With high-intensity writing like pig's feet, if you write a million words, the improvement will be very obvious. What are you looking for that woman for? If she can still give you initiation, why not do a system flow...

Sorry, I couldn't stick with it. The first book I copied was The Devotion of Suspect X. I didn't feel very Sister Li. Then I read Weathering with You, and I didn't feel like Sister Li anymore. The Devotion of Suspect Maybe the author wants to create some anime-style characters and plots, such as living together with his childhood sweetheart idol female singer, the arrogant female senior of the literary club who first despises and then finds that the male protagonist is unusually full of support, saving the thin and introverted junior girl with glasses who was bullied, and having a small affair with the newly joined young female editor OL, which is a bit like a light novel, but not that much. Author, you are not concentrated enough!

The author will listen to everyone's opinions when they see them. I have changed about ten details so far, and now I am planning to delete the useless parts of Chapters 9-14. But please be sensible. You can make comments and complain, but don't curse.