Immortal Martial Great Tang: Starting with Sprinkling Beans to Create Soldiers

Chapter 14, is it too fragmented? The previous writings about the house-holding immortal masters all looked like villains, ridiculing, using vulgar language, and not having any atmosphere of cultivating immortals. They were too cliched; but in the latter part, they suddenly had the intention to help others with fists and fists, and showed their good intentions. The writing was very good, and the change was so fast? It feels too abrupt within one chapter!

Something's wrong. You can't walk eighty miles in one day? People who lift pig's feet are not human beings and they don't know how tired they are. When I was a kid, I walked home at 7 a. M. And arrived home at 3 or 4 p. M. When I was in junior high school. Our home was in the mountains, and the road was about 50 kilometers long. We were only fourteen or fifteen years old at the time, and the uphill roads had all kinds of twists and turns! The way you write it, the author, feels like you have directly reduced the so-called immortal in this novel to a playboy.

With just over 70,000 words, you're already in Sanjiang? Which boss's trumpet is this?

Arms should be diverse. There are sword and shield soldiers, spearmen, archers, and cavalry. It should come later.

The day it is released is the time of the eunuch

Tsk tsk, it was eunuch as soon as it was put on the shelves, please don't let the editors put it on the shelves in the future.

It's ridiculous. Just scattering beans and forming an army. Someone came and chopped down all the mung bean merchants.

I read Chapter 7 and I have some questions, why doesn't the protagonist pick up the bag? Whether it's the bandit or the fox demon, they must have some belongings or something. Why doesn't the protagonist pick up the bag? I can't even eat anymore

The subject matter and writing style are okay, but these days it's just a eunuch. It's a pity.

It really fell apart on the first day it was put on the shelves!