After Becoming an Immortal, My Hometown on Blue Star Contacted Me

It's one thing that all the navigators are women, but the mounts are also female. The key point is that even if it's just women, you should at least set them up properly. Why write two sentences for this one and three sentences for that one? Are you afraid I'll remember them?

The protagonist is described as incredibly powerful, but the protagonist I see is like a barbarian with only brute force and no skill, who can only throw wild punches.

Personally, I feel that themes like the rise and fall of civilizations should never be juxtaposed with gender. The disconnect between the rise and fall of civilizations and romantic relationships creates a severe sense of separation. It's like a Shanghai fortress movie, with women everywhere, and even descriptions of their appearances. The descriptions of the guides' appearances in the first few chapters made me want to vomit.

The navigator and guide format was initially quite novel, but the recent chapters have fallen into an unavoidable trope of boasting and face-slapping. While this might quickly fill space, it undoubtedly filters out readers. Filling in the gaps is fine, but it needs to be interesting. If it's all formulaic, there's no desire to continue reading. Hopefully, the next time I think of this book, it will be at a higher level.

Could the author please stop padding the plot? 😅 After being published, aside from the impressive article titles, the actual content was entirely about various water-related activities/games. Let me analyze this turning point. In the first 50 chapters, when the city lord saw the purple aura coming from the east and knelt to worship the sage, I thought it was a major climax and I was incredibly…

How should I put it? Yahweh is a monotheistic religion; even the Messiah is called the Son of God, not God. Even angels, equivalent to the gods of polytheistic religions, cannot be worshipped. You claim to believe in Yahweh while simultaneously saying you've returned as a god, and no one objects. That truly baffles me. If you said as an angel or the Son of God, that would be one thing, but as a god? Those who believe in Yahweh won't tolerate that.

The price system is beginning to collapse: According to Chapter 16, based on a comparison of land prices, servant prices, and women's prices, one crystal coin was roughly equivalent to 10 taels of silver in the Ming Dynasty. That is, 1 mu of land was worth 10 taels, a servant was worth 20 to 30 taels under normal circumstances (in years without disasters), and a woman of decent appearance was…

At first, I thought it was a mindless, invincible story, but as the world-building expanded, I discovered there was additional content. The outline was good, but the Earth storyline was a bit weak, with limited content and relatively low quality.

Author, this plot twist in the new chapter feels a bit unsettling in a novel. The protagonist's development in another world is just beginning, and now they're suddenly fighting against darkness. I know you wanted to write both sides simultaneously, creating a cinematic or television feel, but it's very difficult in a web novel.

The part about Lady White Bone was really off-putting. If you're writing a savior story, you should at least have some empathy. But how can you choose to forgive the White Bone Demon? It's incomprehensible from both a moral and logical standpoint. She came to kill the protagonist, but the protagonist gave her an opportunity instead. She treats humans like ants, killing them at will, and the protagonist can turn a blind eye, simply because he chose a good appearance. Died from poisoning