The Phantom Thief of Heart in Conan

The name attracts readers. P5 players may stay because of the content, but it will be difficult for non-P5 readers. However, I still feel that it is a bit of a trick, because it looks like it only borrows the skin of Conan. There are no mazes, no guns, no partners, no coop, and the content of the battle of wits and courage between the monster thief and the policeman (fog) in Conan that I most want to see is not included. Generally speaking, the writing is not strong enough and the plot is not attractive enough.

This is the preview letter for Chapter 12. Can anyone tell me how to remove the watermark?

This book is the only fanfic of P5 and Conan that I have seen so far. Before reading this book, I really didn't expect that the combination of these two worldviews would be so attractive. In the Conan worldview, there are a large number of prisoners who are distorted by desires but escape trial for various reasons or require detectives to solve them. However, the Persona in the P5 world can make prisoners repent through super powers. It is no longer the traditional Conan fandom that relies on past life memories, superpowers and other abilities to solve crimes, but to make the sinner repent before the criminal kills someone. This not only allows the sinner to get the fate he deserves, but also allows the misguided criminal and the innocent dead to be saved. Reading from beginning to end of the current 200,000 words, it can be seen that the author wants to pave the way for a world view, want to attract hostile forces, and want to lay various foreshadowings for the subsequent plot. But the problem is that neither readers who want to read Conan fanfics nor readers who want to read P5 fanfics don't want to watch those shadow battles that are basically meaningless. It's entirely possible to describe Ichiban's shadow's twisted shape to show its depraved desires, and then carry the battle through. Continuously improve the protagonist's strength in daily life, and forcibly reduce the combat power in battle. The protagonist's combat power continues to improve in the plot, but when fighting mobs, the protagonist has to rely on luck to defeat the enemies under various preparations. Even if you encounter a decent enemy, you will be defeated. It was like this when he didn't have much fighting power in the early stage. Later he grew up and got different personas. These have caused the protagonist's image to be extremely fragmented. This is why Kaito Kidd was very popular when he was a guest star, but not many people like to watch the main Kaito episode. Even if all factors are eliminated, I can tell at a glance that a considerable part of the prototype of the protagonist's battle scene is P5 animation. So let's take the P5 animation as an example: Can the protagonist be plotted? Of course, it can be done in animations and games, but it needs to be considered in online articles. Whether the protagonist is careless, lacks preparation, or loses the battle due to sudden accidents, this needs to be considered in the animation, but it cannot appear in the game, and it is considered a poisonous point in the online text. Can that happen? After the protagonist has grown up, he still cannot accomplish what he needs to accomplish, and he still cannot achieve what he wants to achieve. The monster he wants to defeat still needs to fight with a narrow escape. Cannot! One last thing to mention, the episodes of P5 animation with the highest praise ratings are almost at the bottom.

It is a very rare collaboration between Conan and P5, except that when Conan heard the protagonist say in front of Xiaolan that he looked like Kudo Shinichi, he immediately became so anxious that he shot an anesthesia needle into the protagonist's forehead, which was a bit hard to accept. The appearance was good. Another idea is... Can we add some ways for the protagonist to make money quickly? It's just a one-man game. If you go to the Impression Space every day, you have to pay the taxi driver QwQ. It's really not possible to imitate the game and catch the monsters and pluck "Is there more? Is there more? Is there any more?" After reading a hundred chapters, I feel that the protagonist is just a tool to save the world (in order to prevent the destruction of the world from the fusion of impression space and reality, he keeps spawning monsters and wearing masks to increase his combat power). He runs in the impression space every day and changes his mind to save people. Those who are rescued cannot express his gratitude to him (I don't know who it is). Emotionally, he is blank (no partner) and cannot make money (even working part-time to earn travel expenses in the impression space). Apart from wearing masks to increase his combat power and save the world, he does nothing. Thinking about it, it's not that this kind of kind-hearted person who wants nothing more than to save the world is bad. In fact, there are almost no such perfect people in reality (Amuro Toru can dance even when meeting Akai in the decathlon). After Amamiya Renryuji and Anzu beat Kamoshida, they picked up an imitation gold medal and went to the cafeteria to eat. The protagonist really paid for the taxi and worked hard in the impression space without making any money (the treasure demon should not be sold, it can only increase the combat power). Miserable The protagonist is miserable Finally, the author is great, where are the book friends (づ ●─● )づ

I hope that the protagonist will not drag others into the Phantom Thieves. If so, I hope it will be Morgana from the original work. There is no need to deliberately describe the interpersonal relationships of this character. More importantly, it can be well coordinated as a pet cat. Although the plot of the companions in the Phantom Thieves in P5 was originally very interesting, wouldn't it be strange to drag a Conan character into the Phantom Thieves? Moreover, multiple partners feel that it will affect the follow-up, and it will be very troublesome every time to cooperate. The most important thing is that it is difficult to write well. If the character of Conan assumes the identity of the Phantom Thieves, then this character will have a lot of descriptions of the Phantom Thieves, which can easily lead to OOC And if you include too many P5 characters, it will be too far away from the plot of Conan, so I feel that it is better for the protagonist to act alone.

My evaluation is that it is not generally good-looking. As for the female protagonist, is there no female protagonist or only one female protagonist? (Forget it about the Conan fan harem, there are too few written like this) I have to choose the heroine, and I personally will definitely vote for Xiao Ai, but I guess many people are tired of seeing Xiao Ai and don't want Xiao Ai as the heroine, so how about adding a P5 character Wu Jianmiao? The big sister with short hair has a good personality and looks similar to the male protagonist of the original P5 work. And if you are injured, it would be convenient to have a doctor who can keep your secrets, right?

The bonds of people are true power! Stop worrying about that Zhongmo fight, let's have some coop

Single heroine or no heroine, don't have a harem, the last Conan fan who had half a lover is no longer good, don't do that thing with this one

Why are you thinking about writing a love line? It is not recommended for newcomers to write a love line right away, because most of them are not good at mastering it. If they can't write this part well, adding a heroine will be a failure. You can't see that the plot of She Jingbing has become more complicated after adding a heroine. I think it's pretty good now. The author has his own ideas. We're only at the beginning of the chapter and there aren't many cards yet. We can definitely develop slowly.

Author, you need to figure out whether you want to write a p5 fanfic in the context of "Conan", or a Conan fanfic wearing Amamiya Renpi. If the focus is on p5, the bond, friendship, team, and the core "resistance" of p5 must not be missing. But I really didn't see any of these elements in your update. It's not that the protagonist can't be frustrated, but the recent content has no content at all. The plot logic is complicated and confusing. I want to quickly enter the next stage without any foreshadowing. The writing looks very impetuous at first glance. The author really needs to calm down

After watching Moon Shadow Island, the protagonist's character plummeted, like he fell from a trickster to a novice superhero. Can't the protagonist become a complete Joker? What's interesting about watching Conan is the interaction of the plot and the participation of P5 abilities, rather than having the protagonist to fight monsters and upgrade step by step.

I read various discussions about female protagonists, doesn't Koizumi Anko look good? The same extraordinary existence, and it is easy to dismantle the cp of Yijid and will not cause a scolding war. She is still an invincible beautiful girl except that sometimes she is off-line.

The first part is pretty good, at least better than the next door book Conan: The Phantom Thief of Hearts.

There is one point that makes me unhappy. Why do police officers, detectives, and even ordinary people all agree that the Phantom is a criminal? What can be used to convict him if he is caught? Brainwashing? The problem is that the protagonist is not brainwashing, and it is impossible to find evidence that he brainwashes others. The most important thing is, shouldn't it be the police's favorite thing to make criminals wake up and repent in advance? Why are you going to such great lengths to capture the protagonist?

I don't quite understand the author's plot design. Apart from bringing out the shadow of the Earl of Dark Night, do you think your plot design has any meaning? It really makes it impossible to guess the development of the plot, but this is a plot that suddenly developed without giving the readers any information. The plot you are describing now is like someone who has always wanted the treasure demon but couldn't get it due to various reasons or something like a dimensionality reduction attack. He's a real clown🤡, don't call him Phantom Thief, just call him joker. At least there's a clown in addition to being an ace.

The subject matter is good, but Conan actually threatens the protagonist and shoots the protagonist in front of his face with a tranquilizer gun. Conan has always been a law-abiding citizen in so many episodes, and his character suddenly falls apart. Instantly I lost the desire to read any more.

The author is looking for a job after graduation, so there is no need to wait.

In the latest chapter, if you don't explain clearly why the Night Baron is also a monster thief, and even crossed over to take away the treasure demon, then the character you created as the only trickster in the world will be almost smashed to pieces by yourself. I don't know why you want the protagonist to be depressed all the time. If you don't want to add new plug-ins to the protagonist so quickly and slow down the pace, then you shouldn't write the plot of Bao Mo. It's somewhat of a failure. With so many phantom thieves, I feel that it will only become more and more confusing. The subject matter of Conan you wrote is very easy to mess up. If you write like this, it will only become more and more confusing.

I don't quite understand why I listen to and accept Conan's confession and still trust him. . Become a pseudo-Conan. . . Wouldn't it be more interesting and exciting to see the male protagonist and his companions (I don't know if there are any later) and the police department and detectives as rivals? After thinking about it for a while, there is no confrontation point. The male protagonist steals the evil in the hearts of the "evil people", and the evil people reflect on themselves to achieve truth, goodness and beauty. Confession and apology and confession. . . . It feels awkward to seriously arrest a true, kind and beautiful woman whose heart was stolen (she also admitted her mistake and apologized~~I forgive her). . . ps: If the focus of this book is the heart-stealing battles in Lost Stories, the above can be treated as nonsense😄😄

Mainly p5's "Stealing Hearts - Evildoers Repent". This process is too fairy tale and very selective for readers. Therefore, it is difficult for p5 articles to attract newcomers. Almost all old people support it.

Koizumi Hongzi's writing is very embarrassing, and she licks it inexplicably

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