Sword Art Online: The Lament of the Beater

It's been a long time since I've read a sword fanfic. The threshold for entry into this book is quite high I suggest those who want to read it xd to re-watch the anime before starting again, otherwise the game terminology will be quite confusing.

Now that I have read Chapter 78, let me tell you my personal feelings first. Sword fandom is a small minority in the first place. There are only a few who are willing to delve into the settings and write carefully and write well after eating a mouthful of IP. This book is considered to be the best among the ones I have seen. Please read it and cherish it. Be sure to read it. Don't let the author feel chilled by cutting it off halfway, that's the real chill... Please look at this anniversary before discussing CP) Look, let's break down Tongya, in fact, even if the part added by the old thief has been revealed in advance There is a sense of emotional line in it, but you have to admit that, based on the timeline that our readers (referring to the original party) looked at, we first saw Sarch, that is, the death of Xing, which then led to the destruction of the Black Cat Knights, and then the star In the scene where he was forced to abandon his treatment and kill his name, he collapsed due to exhaustion, and President Ya successfully captured Kirito in the battle (don't tell me that there was a secret emotion in the first-level crusade. If Kirito hadn't been a bit autistic and didn't talk about his closed beta experience, I wouldn't have been implicated by the little brat who opened the treasure box randomly). The original work also had some meaning of harem party struggle in it, although it was shown that Aya was sitting in the main palace seat and sharing Kirito (bushi) with Ujo. Since it was written that Tonga was separated, luck could not exit and could not be given to the protagonist. In this way, even if Silica and Kirito, the only Pokémon players in the whole game, met later, for the recipients of the hostage For Kirito, who is influenced by the horns, his SAO will not change no matter what (the appearance of the protagonist is equivalent to inciting the butterfly wings, but not completely inciting, I beg you to be nicer to Kirito) Looking at it this way, the goal of the harem is actually very clear. In addition to the foreseeable Li Te in the picture above, Silica and Lisbeth are within the category that can be considered. (Silica's sister-control attribute is suitable for Kirito x, and it is reasonable for Lisbeth to introduce Asuna to Kirito to make swords out of friendship). But after all, I am a little curious about how to deal with the Fairy Kingdom chapter... After all, I feel that if I go with the idea of defeating Sao from the beginning, the leader should not give the power beyond the system to this strange-looking man... In addition, since Yuuki has already appeared, so according to the captain and Kirito himself, Yuuki should have obtained the two-sword style. There is no such thing as a two-sword style in the Odachi... (Right?) Then where should my Kiriko go... (Silence) It is better to transform Kirito into Kiriko, right? (Happy)

I just finished reading Chapter 39. This is the first time a sword fan novel has made me so immersed in the story. The writing is smooth and it is a rare masterpiece among sword fans. I hope the author will continue to keep up. Although I haven't read the last chapter yet, I will follow up on the new chapters released by the author. Come on, author. I will reward you with 1500. It is not disrespectful to be small.

Guys, please recommend some good-looking sword and sword fandom.

Asuna

Grandpa Tong actually kept his 🐔, I can't believe it

I have read dozens of sword fanfics, but I have only read 3-4 in a long time. (The one I have persisted with for the longest time is the one about Kiriko who basically changed the original novel to write a myth in the later period.) Personally, I feel that a common problem with sword fandom in China is: The writing is "broken". The same goes for this book by the author. To put it in more detail: (1) Time jumps quickly and the distribution of words and ink in each time period is extremely uneven; (2) There is basically no description of the "preparatory work" plot; (3) The story line is written through the protagonist. Originally, this is nothing, but when combined with (1), it will create a "broken" feeling; (4) It is easy to have the problem of too short descriptions of scenes and too small a single scene. This is not a flaw when reading carefully and slowly, but when reading continuously, it will produce a particularly serious sense of boredom and fragmentation. The above 4 points combined with 2-3 points are what I think are the common faults of most sword fandoms. Well, to be honest, I am very optimistic about this book by the author (let's talk about the advantages first): 1: First of all, the "closed beta" mentioned in one stroke can be used as a dark line to be interspersed in the subsequent text, and the dark line can be combined with the bright line in a reasonable and clever way. It can create unexpected narrative methods and story tension; 2: Secondly, the setting of "God's Set Collection" is equivalent to digging a big hole to facilitate hydrology (bushi); 3: Next, the writing style is average, this is my personal feeling. 4: Finally, the author's homework for the original work was very detailed. Among the sword fanfics I have read, the level of rigor is definitely at the top level. Then let's talk about the shortcomings (purely personal opinions): [1] The description of reality at the beginning is too hasty, and the protagonist's character image is not established at all. The Kiriko book I have read the longest, half of the first five chapters are spent on reality. They are not about social relationships, but about the protagonist's past life and preparations for SAO (the latter is the focus). The author's depiction of the protagonist's deliberate practice of swordsmanship was very touching, and I still remember it vividly. 2The emotional line is slow and has no sense of existence. This is a matter of opinion. My requirements for the heroine are really very low. I can do it with or without her, and I can do it with her if she doesn't have too many to the point where she becomes a poisonous point. But at least be careful. As for the scene where Asuna is in danger and Mitt is worried, my expectation is that you can at least write a whole chapter or two small chapters... And this is the result. 3Basically do not write about the "preparation" plot (it overlaps with shortcomings [1] but it is worth mentioning separately for criticism). Twenty or thirty chapters later, I just couldn't find a place where "preparation" was described in detail, as if the protagonist's strength was just to "level up" and then "bang bang" jump up. Hmm... Maybe the author is not good at writing this? With so many personal feelings, the advice I want to give is to read the advantages 1 and disadvantages [2] and [3] I wrote above, no more...

Mitter Rabbit Fukasumi

First time🤓

The writing is good, the setting is quite satisfactory, the protagonist is lawful and kind, the article is more of a supplementary setting, and there are no ups and downs.