I Made up the Global Era of Immortality

After reading it, there is a feeling that it forces you to be moved, and that it forces you to feel great. The three-dimensional description of the characters is not done well. It feels like the author is forcing you to think he is awesome. Instead, through the linkage of small stories, you will admire what this person does. Writing about a global mastermind game, but the layout is too small. At the beginning, our team has all positive buffs, and their effects are awesome. The enemies have disabled buffs, and they are poisonous. Not only does it not make me feel that our team is awesome, but it makes me feel petty. It's like watching Su Bingtian's game. The opponents are all masters and in good condition. Su Bingtian gets the first place. I will cheer for him. He is the pride of the yellow race. The feeling of this book is that it first breaks the legs of all the opponents, and then lets Su Bingtian get the first place, and also forces everyone to be moved. I feel that we are very afraid of our opponents. I think the plot should start with a group of heroes competing for hegemony, and then dominate China. Alas, just order all of them first to support the new author, and there will be no follow-up.

It's really funny. I started writing about national heroes, but then I started talking about competition and being absolutely objective You chose such a starting point on a Chinese website. You have to be absolutely objective. Isn't that just being absolutely unobjective? It is a good thing not to favor one side, but it does not mean that when it is objective, every country is a country When it is not objective, it is a Chinese team against the entire West (including Asia)

This is my first time watching this genre, and I think it's quite fresh. I rushed to revive my spiritual energy and skipped all the foreign events. The pages are getting more and more irritating, none of the domestic fantasy events are outstanding, and there are too many chapters about vampires and werewolves abroad.

Ten years ago, I was watching pretending to be slapped in the face, and now I am still pretending to be slapped in the face. It's shocking

Behind the scenes, it's all about confrontation to make it look good. As a result, your writing is one-sided. What's so interesting about this? This is no longer behind the scenes. Or start writing about global unification. On the one hand, he writes that a lot of people will die when there is a problem, and on the other hand, he writes that when a problem occurs, someone will solve it. Is this called behind the scenes?

Starting with the Sword Fairy in White, it's time to cliché again. When China encounters a problem, someone must come out to solve it!

The writing is good, especially the interaction between netizens, which is very funny. The problem is that the domestic government's response will risk being blocked. The creation of group portraits requires extremely detailed conception and investment of energy. The participation of the protagonist also requires wisdom, otherwise it is easy to not be three-dimensional enough and feel that the supporting character has an IQ problem. It's a test of the author's skill.

Don't write history, it's too easy to block in modern times. Also, it's too middle-class, and the flattery is too serious.

The plot is forcibly spliced ​​together with too many elements, such as spiritual energy recovery + ancient ruins + mutated animals. These are enough to write. Later, vampires, werewolves, onmyojis, resentful spirits, mummies and other characters and plots are forcibly added, and it becomes a hodgepodge. Forget about it being a hodgepodge. The original intention of everyone reading your book was not to pursue the Eastern fantasy to cultivate immortality. After it was put on the shelf, you put a bunch of Western fantasy and just brushed it off, but you wrote it as the main line. The standard of this book is really not good. There are more flowers blooming behind the scenes. The question is which flower is specifically described? If you were to write about the East from the perspective of the East, you would be totally different now.

The beauty of the behind-the-scenes flow is that the people behind the scenes use characters or events to set off a chain reaction to achieve the effect of affecting the whole body. If you don't deliberately control it, there will be no surprises.

How about changing the name of the extraordinary realm in foreign countries? It would be really funny if a vampire and a mummy call each other the innate realm and the transcendent realm. It is not as good as bronze, silver and gold.

It's so old-fashioned that people are still cultivating immortals at this age. I'm almost sick of seeing it. But people who are behind the scenes are always cultivating immortals. It's so cliche.

Let me know what I think and find some books to read. It's really hard to find a book that I can read. I couldn't watch this movie until Chapter 8. The first point is that modern civilization has a very dramatic story like the Jin Yi Wei Shangshu. The second thing is to find a woman in the entertainment industry who behaves like a human being in Chapter 8... I gave up immediately after seeing this plot. It's better to write an article about a professor than to write like that... It's really hard to find novels that you can read now...

Winning by belittling my opponent doesn't make me feel how awesome I am.

Shen Nong Post The first 7 chapters of the article are highly overlapped with the content of a behind-the-scenes novel that makes up myths. The protagonist of the other book is Kurosawa. He has two skills against Yuan. The more he kills, the stronger he gets. This is probably what makes the mountain collapse. Yuan's side is the wolf guard, a giant wolf several meters high. The ending is that they are all killed by Kurosawa in Niujiao Mountain. That one is also very poisonous, so I don't recommend it Having said that, this article is very cliche. Archeology, live broadcast, beauty, having a high-level father, and then all kinds of shocks in the live broadcast room, written about 10 years ago Chapter 8, a sophomore female student, who is called the Fairy Fairy Moon during filming, what an excellent body, isn't it just virginity before Yuan Yin is broken? Filming, Yellow River, falling, unknown cave is inherited, this inheritance of Emperor Huanyue, the name cannot be a woman, right, and our last sect leader, Nangong Yue, can only be inherited once in an era, Zhen Zhenzhen Then there are several fruits that increase cultivation, let's not talk about a bug, can you withstand the state of mind that you have gained for hundreds of years at the age of 18 And then there is the setting, can this Ran Yu be resurrected? Then there were archeology, live broadcasts, leaks of the exercises, deciphering of the exercises, nationwide practice, and various shocks on the Internet. Then there were rumors behind the scenes that the protagonist used the vest of a swordsman in white to slap him in the face with a pen, and he was not pretending well. Hang Qingmeng (Fairy Haoyue) was shocked, this sword fairy is so awesome. 40-Meter sword energy! ! ! Then after pretending not to leave, he said that he had only practiced for more than 10 years and it was too old. The previous routine was that Hang Qingmeng was so awesome that he was almost beaten to death by a monster, and the protagonist came. The most important thing is that the protagonist's waistcoat is still that of a modern man. He dropped out of school and went to Kunlun to get the inheritance. He lived in seclusion in Taibai Mountain and was not allowed to be disturbed Overall review: Just look at the title and you will know what this chapter is about. The whole text is very poisonous and too deliberate, like a flowing novel

I don't know where the author's butt is. China has not yet stood up. He is only a semi-supernormal. He is also the ancestor of vampires and Egyptian mythology. Later, he is also doing supernormal things in his childhood. For the sake of luck, don't give up, right? China has more than one billion. Isn't it nice for you to make them all supernormal? It's so funny.

Are you sick? In the early stage, the ninety-five points of exercises, characters, and scenes are all there. Later, it was said that a universal exercise method would be created taking into account the physical problems of human beings around the world. At the beginning of the co-authorship, this is a bonus for the first deposit, right? Is your luck also causing inflation?

If the Daxia Kingdom described by the author had not experienced the humiliation of seclusion during the Qing Dynasty, then Bangzi and Fusang would regard Daxia Kingdom as their father country. I hope the author can also change the behavior patterns of surrounding countries after describing that our country has undergone strong historical changes. Don't change half and leave half, such a setting loophole.

When I came back to take a look, I found there was a surprise. Although this book was boring and pretentious at the beginning, now that I have written about the Western plot, I found that it is still good, at least I can read it. But what I think is the funniest thing is that you can feel that the author is patriotic and wants to write the Eastern plot beautifully. The result is that the Eastern plot is full of a strong sense of falsehood and becomes a dissuading chapter of the book. On the contrary, the Western plot is well written and can be seen as inspirational. The political turmoil amidst the revival of Qi, each character in it is working hard for his own purpose, Dracula's evil and pursuit of power, Immorton's infatuation and brainlessness, Van Helsing's decadence and redemption, and the national salvation actions of everyone in the Western Intelligence Agency. It can be said that each has its own characteristics, with conflict and cooperation, good and evil. The three characters created in the book, Ran Yu, Hang Qingmeng, and Xiao Zilin, are also full of flaws. Hang Qingmeng is a transparent person and has no impression of her plot. Xiao Zilin is a joke. His white hair reaches his waist, he is so handsome, and his eyes are so beautiful. I was confused. Has this guy watched too many fujoshi TV series? He doesn't really think he is so awesome. If you really want to create an awesome character, you should speak less and strike harder. Just write a few sentences when you appear. For example: A young man with short black hair came down from the mountain angrily, glared at everyone in Xia Ansi, swung his sword and split the cow python in half, turned around and left The next sentence is, "Those who trespass on this mountain will die. That's enough. If you think it's not enough, you can continue to add some side descriptions, such as the Jin Yiwei went up the mountain to ask for a meeting, and was swept down the mountain with a sword, leaving behind a person who can't catch a word or a sword and is not qualified to see me." Also, the name Xiao Zilin might as well be called Wang Tiezhu for more dramatic effect. Ran Yu, it can be seen that the author really wants to portray him as a respected hero, but the result is that he has no feeling at all. To put it bluntly, Ran Yu is DC Superman with an oriental skin. This is a hero with modern Western mainstream values, strong, invulnerable, unable to bleed, and kind-hearted. The heroes respected in the East are those who have the persistence to "do something even when they know it cannot be done" and the handsomeness of "if it is gone and never comes back, it will never come back!" The author's characterization misses the point. Originally, Dongfang also had wonderful supporting characters, but it was a pity that they were written down. For example, Uncle Jiu, Jackie Chan, Master Ye and Feng Xiaoxiu in Chapter 119. The first two movies were randomly selected and the original plots were enough to fill more than ten chapters, but the author turned them into four boring characters. There is no use in writing an effective chemical reaction if you have to combine four people who are not suitable for each other. Feng Xiaoxiu is a ruthless and unruly martial arts fanatic, and Uncle Jiu is a Taoist priest who is full of righteousness. How can he look down on Feng Xiaoxiu, who is full of evil spirits? Not to mention Jackie Chan, he is a policeman with a sense of justice, but Feng Xiaoxiu is a murderer after all. It is abnormal not to arrest him on the spot, but he actively invites cooperation? And Master Ye is the leader of kung fu in Guangdong Province. He usually values ​​peace as the most important thing, but when he encounters someone like Feng Xiaoxiu who forces a fight and insists on killing him, it would be better if he doesn't do it. Originally, when these four met together, there would be a explosive moment, but in the end, it was forced to be written as unity and friendship. It feels like the company sent four movie stars to cooperate with the author in filming, but the author asked the movie stars to play the role of passers-by, which had no effect at all. Life should be dull, but novels, dramas, and movies must have conflicts to be effective. If they are all good or all bad, it will only make the plot boring, so it is better to remove it.

It looked pretty good at first, until the white-haired swordsman appeared. . . It instantly became a joke