Start with Planetary Governor

I like the author's books very much. After reading these reviews, I want to share my thoughts with the author. I hope it can be of some help to the author. I don't know if the author can see it if I post it here. First of all, let me praise the advantages. So far, there are no structural problems in the entire novel world. Whether it is Goldfinger, the protagonist's life experience, the background of the empire, the pace of alliance development, etc., They are still controllable and have not escaped the author's control. There will be room for patching or expansion in the future. If the author is a newbie, this is especially worthy of congratulations. Then praise the author's goal, which is to get rid of the empty system conquest routine and try to describe a specific operation process. Even if what you write is not outstanding enough, you still need encouragement. After all, if there is no goal, your level will only stagnate. Finally, let's talk about some details that the author did not handle well enough. The most important point is that the novel is empty, that is, it floats on the surface. This thing is like if I just say "your novel is too empty" or "too watery", then the sentence itself is quite empty. The author needs to figure out what the readers want from the novel, which is nothing more than emotions, contradictions, and imagination. It is enough that the writing is above the passing mark. Good writing is only a bonus. The novel written by the author is like playing a strategy game. What technology did I research, where did I build a factory, how many soldiers were produced, what enemies were attacked, what enemies were eliminated, and what happened in the side missions. Although the content of many novels can be summarized in the above sentence, if you only write this sentence, don't blame the readers for being disrespectful. Especially after the protagonist becomes the leader of the alliance, Shenyin leads no troops, this feeling becomes even stronger. A lot of content worth writing is written by the author in just one sentence. The emotional rendering is not in place, the conflict is not prominent, and there is nothing to show your imagination. For example, I read the plot of the conquest of the Qinggu area in a hurry (I guess I am an average reader), and I only remembered to fight the cults, monsters, and demons. After the demons were defeated, there was no one to control the monsters and I continued to fight the monsters. I've omitted the details and this is what the plot looks like. But in fact, it is very easy to write a good war plot. One is that there are so many things that can be used for reference, whether it is other novels or actual war materials. You can write about maneuvers, tactics, strategic arrangements, and adjustments at the front and rear; the other is that war is inherently a concentrated explosion of emotions and conflicts. To show your faith, you can write about ordinary soldiers protecting refugees, the transformation of the faith of Qinggu youths, you can spare no effort in writing about how bad cults are, suicide attacks, how cruel the Warhammer world is, and you can arrange troops on the battlefield to make readers feel happy, etc. These are all common but useful plots. For another example, the construction of Star Port was delayed for several months, but the author actually finished writing a few sentences. The author needs to explain to readers why this matter is serious, what consequences it has, and what kind of disaster it has caused. None of these are available. My feeling is as ordinary as if I dropped a bowl while washing dishes. Then the author is not good at describing characters. In fact, he is not good at describing events and conflicts. In fact, characters are built on contradictions. The author should not be stingy about defining the characters and writing personality labels. You are not a master yet, and you do not have that kind of writing power. Don't try to let readers refine the character's personality from your description of grass, gray snakes, and thousands of miles of twists and turns. Defining the character's personality through events can at least allow readers to remember one or two characters. After all, I still remember the warrior with outstanding faith in the Aura Storm incident, but I can't remember what the protagonist did. Finally, the author should be stingy about the death of the character, at least make the death of the character worthwhile. For example, a recent plot was about the anti-corruption movement triggered by the silence of a soldier. How did the author deal with it? First, I wrote two chapters of sunny daily life. I guess I wanted to describe the calm before the storm, and then the latest chapter turned to government affairs. The soldier died in the mouth of the official. I didn't feel any waves in my heart. Author, your writing skills are not strong enough to write about a person's death that caused a bloody storm, and your reputation does not support the reader's patience to read a few chapters of peaceful daily life. If hindsight had allowed me to write, how would I have handled it? I would go into a huge public execution and the warrior would not die, he would be the one to accuse. Then entering the memories, when he first retired from the battlefield, he would not be disabled. His disabilities and wounds would definitely be tortured and persecuted by the scum in the government. Then as the memory goes by, it gradually overlaps with reality, the atmosphere reaches a climax, and the characters are bound to this belief in this plot.

After reading 800 chapters, I just want to say, the emperor has been promoted to a god, and he has become a god. After being promoted to a god, the empire is still a piece of shit? Are you kidding me?

The hero and heroine

The origin of this book is actually very simple: a story started from a hobby. Game players, deduction enthusiasts, Warhammer fans, military fans... From these points of interest, derived: interstellar themes, space operas, World War I/World War II style war atmosphere, artillery tanks, mechas, special forces... These story elements. Splicing the creative source of Total War-Stars-Hearts of Iron-Warhammer 40k settings. In the end, such a hodgepodge of interstellar farming stories was formed. With smooth writing and solid farming management, we see a planetary governor going from the dilemma of not being able to pay taxes to walking towards the stars and the sea step by step. Space warriors, infantry-artillery/infantry-tank coordination, large corps operations, the sky-blocking Star Sea Fleet, the earth-shattering Titan mecha army... These exciting elements are all well and reasonably unfolded at each stage of the story. Farming management is the writer's strength. Based on logical deductions from Goldfinger, a utopian structure with Warhammer characteristics is constructed, with many familiar elements. If you are like me and can relate to the brain waves of this work, then you will fall in love with this book.

Alright

Good looking

Forming a war group privately is nonsense. The primarchs and gene-seeds are all available. What do you use to form one? Or do you think you are better than the Emperor?

In the interstellar era, the war mode is still stuck in the Anti-Japanese War period. There are no mechas or armors. I feel that the author is not imaginative enough, and I kind of question whether the author can write science fiction well.

The stratification of the power system is indeed broken. Interstellar military force is equivalent to planetary garrison (based on the protagonist Goldfinger). Such an exaggerated training master empire can be ignored when the empire is fighting on all sides... I can only say that the internal and external logic is indeed quite embarrassing The interstellar warriors are actually quite inconsistent. While they are talking about running across the universe, they can be surrounded by an interstellar corps. Don't you, the author, feel embarrassed? Interstellar battlefields are fought by large corps. If the interstellar warriors encounter large armies, they will be surrounded and killed. Why do they have such a high status?

How to put it this way, the combat power of this kind of interstellar empire with jump technology is indeed not high. Generally speaking, the galactic-level forces have at least Titan-level battleships, equipped with standard destroyer-star main guns, and there should be a lot of destroyers, cruisers and the like. Gunpowder weapons should be eliminated. Plasma, plasma, and laser weapons are the mainstream. Electromagnetic guns, railguns, etc., As described in this book, the destroyers are very good, and cruisers are the main force, which feels a bit ridiculous.                                                                                                                             The soldiers use gunpowder weapons, and it feels no different from us now. It gives me a general feeling of an interstellar empire. My ideal is to be at the interstellar level. At least the weapons that destroy the stars are not common, but at least there are a lot of them, right? There is very little shown here, and there is basically no feeling. The Extermination Order is all about wiping out the surface of the planet. I think the annihilation is about breaking the planet. The description of the force is not very grand There are no interstellar wonders, such as the Dyson sphere that is orbiting and running rampant? There is also the black technology of compressing stars, opening up different spaces. The symbol is a 100-meter battleship, the internal space is ten times a hundred times, etc.,, It's not that the writing is not good, it is very good, but the level of description is a bit different from what I thought. Except for psychic powers and the like, it gives me the feeling of the level of civilization that has just stepped out of the planet. Except that it can jump, it feels no different from us now. The ship has become a battleship.,, Maybe it's because the golden age is over? Anyway, it feels a bit weird

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It's been so long, and it feels like it's all just foreshadowing, not a single explosive point. The rewards and lottery after the war were a bit more exciting. I expected these things to develop a lot, but in the end there was nothing. So many black boxes were buried in the pit. Characters are popping up in piles, but they are basically tool men. I need to point them out a little bit. To put it exaggeratedly, I almost didn't even remember the name of the protagonist.

Female Captain!

The new chapter highlights a difficult question, why do we talk about human rights in Warhammer? Joke? I ask you to go to which battlefield, and you still have the right to say that I won't go? I just don't understand what kind of plane the protagonist is doing! It is clear that both personal power and centralization far exceed that of the empire's governing body, so what are you doing with a feeble-minded and feeble-minded person in Makabaka? What do you mean by not wanting to fight on a difficult front? What world do you think you are in? In Warhammer you say this?

It feels like a Warhammer world view

To be honest, what the author wrote is okay. Although the restoration of the Warhammer world is not too comprehensive, the world foreshadowing is okay, but the portrayal of the protagonist is really rubbish. You are not writing a YY novel. The protagonist is pretending to be Long Aotian, and he is just an ordinary person who traveled through time, and he is still a human being like Warhammer. Like the world of dogs, you don't even grow at all and you become a qualified cold ruler. It's too disgusting and the sense of separation is too strong. The time progress written in there is no point where the protagonist can change or grow quickly, and it is really uncomfortable to have such high-end combat power to reduce intelligence. All in all, it is really not bad when 99% of the starting point is rubbish. As long as you block out the author's plot about the characters that are not pretentious but actually very pretentious, it is still a good book. If the author is real and focuses on the writing of the characters, the subsequent books will definitely become popular.

The problem is huge, and the protagonist's tricks are pretty big to be honest, but why is it that every time he encounters a tough battle to the death? How did the protagonist survive the Atonement Crusade after taking the lead several times and dying early? If you come to your planet and die one after another, what else can you do to atone for your sins? If I just send you to fight on your planet for two years, maybe the whole group will be wiped out. You want to show the cruelty of the world, so what are you trying to do? All kinds of things were turned on, but the result was the same as if they were not turned on. The slogan of "reviving the planet" was shouted loudly. I didn't know that the protagonist had conquered this planet. I saw that there was only one city. After one month of training to become an elite, it felt very strong. The result is the title, right? The surrounding dangers were dealt with in a hurry. After defeating a greenskin that emerged from the side on the ground, the alien fleet came. I charged all kinds of money to the monsters, right? You also play dnf?

Wu Jiarong!

It looked good from the front, and there happened to be a 40% discount on full bookings, so I bought it with a huge sum of 8,000. The result is that the further back I go, the more wet it becomes. It's so wet that I can't stand it anymore, dear.

Did the author consider one thing? That is, the Warhammer universe is too small, and then the system develops a plane jumping function, or lets the system combine its own divine power upgrades to add a special building synthesis pool, and then the protagonist draws out a plane jumping building. The source can be the emperor to help the protagonist, or it can be the unresurrected side of the universe to help the protagonist, go to other universes to increase power, and then come back to reshape the entire universe. Otherwise, it feels a bit boring to explain the plot of water everywhere every day. I think we should add some plots of learning magic, or strengthening one's own fighting spirit, and cultivating immortals.

I really can't promote it, Warhammer has such a shitty world view

It is said to be a Warhammer world view, but many places are unreasonable. First of all, I don't know how to build a system in the Warhammer world. The conspiracy of traitor Qi, it would be okay if there is an explanation later. In the next few days, he was trained into an elite soldier, and he was not afraid of being reported to the Inquisition. Third, if he did not have a Martian background, he would have no idea. It's okay to have one or two STCs, but if there are more, where will they come from? If you don't hand them over to the oil guys, they will just grab them. Fourthly, the greenskins have formed a very large tribe. According to the character of the greenskins, this planet should be destroyed. Fifthly, what about the defense forces of this planet? Without them, how can the greenskins, cults, and alien species be dealt with?

It's almost a million words long. The main character is still a trash brother. He can kick anyone who comes. The army is still hundreds of thousands in size. This is the reason why I don't vote. I'm not happy. I'm not happy at all. I'm just complaining.

Every time I see the combination of Gu Hang and his son, I always think of "Desire." . . . . . Love. . . . . . Am I abnormal? I lost my father when I was young, but my father died before he was born. The important point is that my mother is "Chun". I didn't listen to my mother since I was a child, but the other side wanted to listen. However, in order for her children to live a better life, my mother had to rely on family power to continuously climb up and start her own business, so the relationship was relatively distant. Later, she took in a virgin aunt in her 20s (do you know how old the protagonist is?), As well as a biological aunt and a biological aunt.

Now that I think about it, when I first started reading this book, it seemed that it only had a million words, and it was at the stage where the planets were unifying and preparing to open the sea of ​​stars. But now that I saw chapter 715, I suddenly lost the desire to read any more. The reason is probably because I thought that the role of one of the heroines would be lost to everyone? It's not right to say that. I've almost forgotten about her. This is just an introduction at best, and it doesn't mean it's watery or watery. From the middle to the later stages of a long online article, it will seem boring and full of water. The most obvious thing to me is that, the author, you have no passion for writing... At least I can't feel your passion for writing. I vaguely remember the first time I read this book. It was a refreshing interstellar farming type. Although I have never played Warhammer, Qunxing is already a senior war criminal. As the saying goes, he knows everything about everything, and I read it with gusto. Some book friends even made a comment about "lust" that made me like it and leave a comment. I remember that it was even more refined. But as the alliance's territory expanded day by day, and the subspace kingdom prospered, a certain sense of isolation and alienation also emerged. I gradually became unable to bring the perspective of the male protagonist, and even began to break away, looking at this increasingly "politicized" and "leader-oriented" political creature from a third party. Especially the emotional line between the heroine and Gu Hang, although the initial background structure is a bit embarrassing and many people complained that it was unreasonable, the subsequent emotional development between the two is considered to be in line with common sense. Then I fast-forwarded to the political marriage, and the only scene that adjusted my emotions was cut out at once, and then there was pregnancy and childbirth at the speed of light. From then on, I can't tell what I watched. In short, it was fighting, fighting, fighting... It is true that farming requires management and fighting, but it can't be squeezed in all at once, right? Think about it for yourself. It's been a long time since I've written about characters like Gu Hang's mother and the heroine. I've had a hunch since I was pregnant and gave birth to a baby. Generally, most authors give readers an explanation near the end. Otherwise, it's really who wrote and who sucked. Out of ten Internet article authors, nine of them wrote the follow-up. You're better, if you write it, you haven't written it, and the scene hasn't appeared. But then again, why do you have to write it? You gave me the feeling that in the middle and late stages, you were planning to step on the accelerator to finish, but due to the update speed of the hip pull, it caused gastrointestinal discomfort and squatted for half a night. As a result, when I saw the granular excrement, I had to squat for half a year... It tortured the readers as well as myself. I remember someone in a comment said very early on that he was becoming less and less immersed. I thought he was noisy at the time, and he liked to read but not watch, and his chatter affected the senses. Now that I look at it, alas... He's gone. See you again if we have the chance. Come on!

Lord Governor!

Why can green-skinned orcs take G9 bullets? A civilization that has achieved interstellar travel is afraid of mere flesh and blood? Inexplicable weapon system, the most advanced rifle in the empire can't kill orcs instantly? There are also things like artillery. This novel gave me the feeling that one second I was driving a starship in an interstellar civilization and using nuclear fusion energy, and the next second I was back in the 20th century playing infantry-tank synergy with rifles and tanks. It's too disrespectful to the value of an interstellar civilization's technology. If you suppress your combat power for the sake of the plot in the early stage, there will definitely be big problems later.

I feel that the naval showdown is all about whether the hero can behead the opponent's boss. It has nothing to do with how many ships there are in the fleet. No matter how many battleships are deployed, there is no change in strength 😅

The word count is about the same, so don't be too lazy. What's going on in the middle and later stages? What a great early writing! This is too bad. It's not like I won't write this book.

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