One Piece: I Have Admiral Patrick Star
海贼：我有大将派大星
- Status
- Completed
- Length
- 386k Words
- Subgenre
- Myriad Worlds
- Updated
- 3y ago
- Source
- Qidian
Synopsis
164Chapters
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Reader comments 18
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Possible crew members: [Welcome to add] 1. Admiral Pai Star 2. Golden Flying Pig - Toph of the North 3. Dragon Man - Connor 4. Red Queen in Wonderland 5. Cub of Light - Little Fatty
I can't understand it. It's written like this and everything I just read has been wiped out. Later, the author blames the poor grades and starts not wanting to write. Who can blame this? , Do you really think free chapters don't matter? Even if you write well later, what's the use?
Young version - Moonlight Moria [Gothic class representative]
Cub version - Smoker [Arrogant Imp]
"I am Lu Bu, I just became a pirate, Whitebeard wants me to be his son" 😏
Can you write so many characters? The various characters and abilities are enough for you to drink, and then you have to analyze who is strong and who is weak. An ordinary author writes a hodgepodge without any self-awareness. Just write one or two characters honestly and it will be enough. You can't handle writing too many.
117 And 118 are so easy to persuade. Not to mention that there is no woman in the heart to draw the sword of the natural god. The protagonist has also met the ancient god. Shouldn't he like black goats?
The style is too out-of-the-box, with a hammer here and there. Chapter 11 is about the protagonist's duel with Moriah, and then in Chapter 21, the protagonist starts to fight with Moriah, and the middle part is full of messy things like Pinocchio's commentary. It gives me a headache to watch! I still don't suit this style, so I moisturized it.
Personally, I suggest that the author either rewrites the previous chapters, or gives a summary and tells everyone where to jump to start. Although reading the author's post in the comment area, the crew members appearing later may be interesting, but I really can't stand the last part, the writing in the front is too bad.
To be honest, this paragraph of Moonlight Moria you wrote is too long. Just play Moonlight Moria. The chapter you wrote is too long. In the early stage, I was attracted by the various people you summoned. But your fight has no description and no meaning. And what they did when they came to Pirates was also very inexplicable. I didn't know what they were doing. I don't even know why they invited Roger.