The Seventh God of Overclocking

The character of the protagonist is not well written. You should want to set the protagonist as a person who is sometimes funny and sometimes serious. In this regard, you can look at starting from the red moon. Also, the writing at the beginning of the first chapter is a bit not very good, and the pace is a bit slow.

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The plot is too broken. When I read Chapter 8, I felt like I understood something and felt lonely. There is nothing attractive about it. If the subsequent plots are all this random narration, I'm afraid I won't be able to retain people. But I quite like the title and chapter names of this book, they are a bit like Japanese anime.

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What does it mean when there is an x ​​in a chapter? It's very interesting to write. I support each other on the road to new books

The writing style is okay, not too bad, but the first few chapters just feel wrong. The multi-line narrative is difficult to understand. Generally, two or three lines are considered too many. I didn't even notice your lines. Another problem is that without characterization, information can only be found from known dialogue. I don't know how to put it, but it's probably because the writing has the ability to describe things, but the details are almost invisible. The pace is very fast, and I am completely reading the story. It feels like I am listening to the person next to me tell a story that is not very smooth, and I am not touched at all. Of course, I'm just mentioning my feelings and it's just a comment.

①The writing is okay. It seems to be quite fluent, there are no sentences that are incomprehensible, and I can imagine the corresponding pictures in my mind when reading ②I feel that the development of the protagonist line is too slow, or there are too many foreshadowings. When I saw the protagonist in the third chapter, there was no readable content. They all followed the protagonist. Even if it is a group portrait, the protagonist has the most lines! ③There are so many characters appearing all at once at the beginning of the novel. The motivations of the characters' behavior can only be guessed by the readers themselves, who don't know anything. According to the description, there should be conflicts, but when you watch it, you should be nervous or not, relaxed or not, and you will feel confused while watching it.

Ouch, why is the website short at 20,000 words? I can't accept it!