My Girlfriend Is a Baby Bear

Xiong Tao Cooperation

It's rare to find a book with a bear heroine, so good luck to the author. The writing style is a bit immature, but still readable. Here are a few suggestions: When writing multi-person dialogue, try to indicate who said it. For example, I was a little confused when reading the three-person dialogue in the first chapter. You, the author, know who said which sentence, but we readers don't. Some sentences describing people also need to indicate who they are referring to. Chapter 4 has a sentence about "speaks Thai", but I don't know whether it is the protagonist or the doctor who knows Thai. Then I spend a lot of pen and ink on some unimportant things, which seems a bit watery, and I miss some important points one after another. For example, the protagonist's daily routine, is that what we want to see? What we want to see is the daily life of the protagonist and the bear (and Red Beibei)!

My bear, kiss it, hug it, hold it high

I came here especially to observe, a man of 20,000 yuan a day.

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