Live Broadcast in the Heavens Starting from Condor Shooting

The writing so far is very good. On the premise of adding the feature of live broadcast, there are no big poisonous points or that can be covered up. Overall, it is a very good book among the Martial Arts of All Heavens. Then I would like to make some humble opinions: The protagonist is a host and has taught martial arts to the audience. It is best to avoid plots that are coerced by the masses. If this kind of plot must be written, you have to consider whether the subsequent twists and turns can satisfy the readers; , but the follow-up sugar distribution and interaction; In addition, innovative points have been introduced, such as Taoist friends, you know, the netizens are all middle-level Huskies, the protagonist can really create the martial arts of nine hundred with one breath, and then Guan Gong fights Qin Qiong, right It is a huge joy for both the audience inside the host and the readers outside the book; Finally, there is the personality of the protagonist, which implicitly hints at the recklessness of someone like Wang Laoju, and the anchor is a profession that spreads positive energy, so it is recommended to move towards a chivalrous style. If we can write about the place of enlightenment in the later period, and the heroic spirit and belief that I can survive despite thousands of people, in contrast to the image that the audience said is timid and uncomfortable in the early stage, the book will break away from the framework of using bullet points to attract attention and have its own style.

So Huang Rong accepted it. The protagonist interacted with her very well. It was a good relationship. In the end, it was more stomach-ache when she was gone.

I always see people in the group saying: What are the readers' comments, and are scolded by readers, etc., Which makes me feel envious. I'm confused, why don't I have any readers' comments? How about you scold me a few words? It's so uncomfortable to be a stand-alone writer. I don't even know if anyone is watching, I don't have feedback, and I don't know if the writing is good or not. It's so difficult for me! 😭😭😭

Let me help you change the settings. Just change the first chapter. Setting the system as written has the power to make everyone ignore it, making the live broadcast no matter how real it is, subconsciously feel that it is fake. Then, at the beginning of writing it as pig's feet, I was told that the system's live broadcast makes people feel fake, so pig's feet had no choice but to try every means to deceive! ! ! !

If you don't accept Huang Rong, just write less. No one is forcing you to accept it. If you write so much but don't accept it in the end, do you understand that this is called giving away? Do you understand that if you have the ability to rebel, you should die? Your many high-sounding reasons cannot cover up the fact that you are giving away your daughter.

By the way, does the protagonist have no relatives or friends? Audience Platform Are all countries idiots?

This world makes me feel very strange. The system says that this world does not allow the existence of plots in other worlds. Then after the system comes out, the world is directly changed. It makes people feel that the protagonist is a gamer and the whole world is a game.

I've seen Chapter 107. Let's talk about my thoughts after watching it (I only talk about my feelings, I don't dare to give blind guidance). The plot of the Condor Shooting is good, with some minor logical flaws, but it doesn't hurt the overall situation. Overall, it's pretty good, but the plot connection is just average. The dark style shouldn't come so suddenly. Even if a sunny young man is a little dissatisfied with that, even if he turns into a sinister person, he won't become a (pervert). It really feels like this. I think many readers will be persuaded to quit here. As a viewer who has been watching for more than ten years, I really want to watch the last episode of For You, but I will skip this part directly.

May I ask if this live broadcast will bring goods? Family members, the authentic Sunflower Book, I will say a number of 98 Upload the link, only 10,000 orders, start now to surpass the Eastern Invincible

Damn it, if you want to take Li Mochou, just come to the wall, can you? I spent a long time grinding and chirping. Is she a man? It's no problem if I don't want Huang Rong. After waiting for so many years, Li Mochou is now so soft-hearted. He caught her and made her pregnant.

It doesn't matter if the protagonist doesn't marry Huang Rong. After all, Huang Rong has communicated with Guo Jing from the beginning, but it's really enough to find Li Mochou. If you want to find her, can't you arrange it before Lu Zhanyuan gets to know her, or before Li Mochou starts killing people? But what's the point of finding her after she is abandoned? Does it mean it's a vendetta? No matter what, the original description of Li Mochou is that he killed a whole family just because of his surname. It makes sense that this behavior is not a vendetta. It seemed good at first, but the protagonist is the best in the world, and it will be different after the system is shut down. You have completely changed into a different person. I always feel like you are a ghostwriter after selling your account.

I hope the author can fix it quickly. It's still being treated as an act, which is really too witty.

The author has been single for hundreds of years to write such a cool plot? ! ! 😒😒😒

I don't know what I'm doing with these two useless snacks from Xiaowu.

It's not bad. Although there are some bugs, they don't have much impact. The main thing is to plan the future path of the protagonist. Also, it is ancient times after all. Although it is a martial arts novel, it must also pay attention to the basic laws of ancient times. The protagonist said that it is not good to talk about marriage. In ancient times, People pay attention to the rules of heaven and earth, the king, the master, the orders of parents, the words of matchmakers, and the protagonist practices the way of free love. This is alien and a heretic. Don't do it again next time. Also, you can't contradict your elders. You can say it tactfully, but you can't contradict them directly. This is very serious.

It's not that you can't find Li Mochou, it's that you can't "insist on finding" Li Mochou. There is no foreshadowing, why should we look for her? Because of personality? But you are so inconsistent. It was originally said that the protagonist's personality has changed after more than ten years, but in the end he still likes Li Mochou. I can't find a reason why the protagonist likes Li Mochou so much.

Liang Ziwen, where did that snake go?

What kind of rubbish has been written in these two chapters recently? What is the role of your military training? Is it just to improve your numbers? After training, you will leave it to others to be used as cannon fodder, and then go off on your own, then what nonsense do you write about military training?

It's a pity. I thought I could top up money and vote for monthly votes at the back of this book. But after reading the book, I lost my mind and gave up.

You want to write about the pure world, but the protagonist is cheating and invincible. You want to write cool articles, but you don't follow the rules of cool articles.

Find Li Mochou as the heroine! Just the character written in the book! That's not Huang Rong's fussing. She will destroy your family in a matter of minutes. By then, let alone three wives and four concubines, you will be prepared to die just by looking at someone else. Huang Rong can still be reasonable, but Li Mochou is crazy and unreasonable! Faint

The second hypothesis is too serious. In the original work, the Quanzhen Sect was pro-Song Dynasty and the Anti-Yuan Dynasty, but you changed it directly to the Quanzhen Sect in the history books? Even if you really want to create a second design, just give it a reason that you can understand! For example, Wang Chuyi accidentally heard a "prophecy" saying that Mongolia would be unified, and the Quanzhen Seven Sons decided to join the Mongols in order to preserve the religious tradition. It would be better than directly saying that they would surrender to the Mongols.

It's so awkward, it's becoming more and more pedantic, and the protagonist has changed.

After reading a few chapters, I feel that the protagonist's golden fingers are all wasted on irrelevant things, such as kitchen gift bags and the like. It can obviously add some basic understanding, but it is not added. Moreover, the audience can learn internal skills through watching the live broadcast, which is also a poisonous point. In short, the subject matter is okay, but the content is a bit nauseating.

There has been no update for three days. What's going on? Are you a eunuch? A little worried.

It is far different from the Immortality of Ten Thousand Worlds Live Broadcast. At least he dares to act and never flaunts himself as a righteous person. He just goes to grab whoever he likes, and is not influenced by the live broadcast audience! Do you do whatever they ask you to do? Are you still afraid of moral kidnapping after traveling through time?

Let's put it this way... Full of compromises In the early days, the protagonist spoke lofty ideals and made sarcastic remarks to the heroes, but after wasting more than ten years in the world, he ended up living a life that he once hated. Although he was still unrestrained and went his own way, he no longer had the ambition of youth and could only take care of the whole family. The author initially just wanted to write a different kind of "ordinary" protagonist, who was ordinary but refused to accept his fate, relying on a golden finger to change the world. Then... The setting was changed, and the male protagonist became like an uncle, which was also a compromise.

The writing is good and the author's emotions are correct. The disadvantage is that it is not very popular. Take your time!

What is the author planning to write in the next copy?

The world's turmoil comes from my generation, and the years rush me as soon as I enter the world. The world is like a tide and people are like water. Only a few people talk about the rivers and lakes.