The Dao Seed of Immortality

After reading more than 50 chapters, there are some things I can't say and feel unhappy about. After reading this book so far, the biggest feeling I feel about this book is the contradictions, especially the fragmentation and conflict in the protagonist's personality. The protagonist has gained the ability to live forever, so he plans to live a cautious life and slowly grow stronger based on time. Then the contradictory point appears. What did the protagonist do with this idea? 1. He caught the eye of the empress and refused two solicitations. 2. The governor of Dongchang, the famous man next to the emperor, regards you as a good brother, and he also knows that you are not an ordinary person. 3. Leaving the palace to kill people. 4. He got involved with the saints of the Lingnan Sect, took one of their magic weapons and promised to help them. 5. Establish a good relationship with the next emperor Don't you think it's outrageous? This doesn't look like someone who plans to live a miserable life. If you really want to show off, why not wear a vest to show off? This is a piece of writing, not a cool one. So far, some of the things the protagonist has wanted to do, such as setting up traps in the room or using disguise techniques to make himself look older, are just things to fool the readers, or they can only be seen in form but not in reality. It is the author's inner thoughts that conflict with the Chang Sheng Gou school. To put it simply, the author wanted to show off and show off, but the subject matter he wrote could not meet this requirement The standard feature of cool writing is actually constant adventures. Gou Wen is just the opposite. Immortality is the greatest opportunity. You have a long time to arrange and wait. If you are immortal, you will pick up magic today, meet the emperor tomorrow, and still pretend to be reserved and say that you don't want to serve for the time being. Then I might as well go directly to read Shuangwen

In fact, this book was really well written at the beginning. Personally, I think it's a pity that I had to cut it off at the end. In fact, the core problem is that the rhythm completely collapsed later in the writing, and I was unable to continue to stabilize the rhythm in the early stage. To understand the specific rhythm problem, we must first understand what the core highlight of Changsheng flow is. What is the longevity stream? That is, the protagonist can always live. On the other hand, it means that other people are mortal, but the protagonist is still alive. Therefore, the longevity flow is actually very different from the traditional kingly upgrade text in terms of structural level. What do readers want to see when watching Changshengliu? What they really want to see is the emotional collision and communication between the main supporting characters and the protagonist in their life and death under the torrent of time. The biggest breaking point in this book is the plot. I personally think it is undoubtedly the plot where the empress dies. Because the death of the supporting character in time detonated all the previous character creations, forming a sharp contrast with the protagonist who is still young and can still live with no end in sight, and all the previous involvements, experiences and bonds between this supporting character and the protagonist are concentrated at the moment of death, thus creating a high-intensity emotional resonance with the readers. This kind of emotional resonance and the contrast between life and death are the most interesting and exciting points of the longevity stream. I believe the author must understand this, otherwise he would not be able to write such a wonderful first half. If you understand the core elements of the longevity flow, you can understand what the correct rhythm of the longevity flow should be. In my personal opinion, the core of the rhythm suitable for longevity flow is actually slow and methodical. Immortality flow is like casting a net for fishing. The creation of supporting characters, the protagonist and the stories of generations of supporting characters are the nets cast out. The entire process of shaping supporting characters is actually just a process of foreshadowing. The moment when the supporting characters die under the power of time and the protagonist is still alive and continues to live is the moment when the net is closed. All the previous character creations, stories and experiences have become fish in the net, and are fished out by readers to create strong emotional resonance, pushing the artistic conception and achievements of the book to a higher level. Therefore, for traditional kingly upgrade stories, the creation of the protagonist is the real core of ensuring the lower limit, and the creation of supporting characters is the icing on the cake to expand the upper limit. On the contrary, for Changshengliu, the creation of supporting characters is the absolute core of the lower limit of Changshengliu novels, and the creation of protagonists is the icing on the cake. Because if the supporting characters are not well-shaped and do not leave a deep impression on people's hearts, they will not be able to resonate with readers at the final moment of closing the net, and there will be no difference between Changshengliu and other novels. Without differentiation, why should readers read this book instead of other novels? The pacing in the early stages of this book is actually quite good. But what puzzles me is that after the death of the empress, the pace speeds up. After the death of Emperor Jin, the author significantly accelerated the speed. For the Changsheng stream, one should be very cautious in speeding up the pace of plot advancement, because once the speed is increased, it will be difficult to ensure the high-quality creation of supporting characters as before. If the supporting characters are not deep enough, the biggest highlight of the Changsheng stream will be gone. When changing the map, go to the world of immortality after sixty years. These sixty years are obviously a good opportunity to reconnect with the mortal world. It is more than enough to create a supporting role in the mortal world. But the author chose to skip sixty years in one chapter and go directly to the world of immortality. This choice is certainly not wrong, but it is an obvious signal that the pace is increasing. When it comes to the world of immortality in Middle-earth, the plot rhythm is obviously much faster than that of the mortal world, but the author failed to grasp the accelerated pace, and the three-dimensionality of the character creation is obviously weaker than that of the mortal world. In the Qi refining stage, there are still a few dazzling supporting characters. But when I was promoted to Foundation Establishment, it was a complete failure to seize the secret realm against the Golden Core cultivator. First, there was no need for Su Chen to take such a big risk. As for longevity flow, since Su Chen can live forever, it would be a more reasonable choice to use his lifespan to avoid risks. The Eternal Life Style must never have the view that "Ten thousand years is too long, and we must seize the day and night." On the contrary, it should be "the days and nights are too short, and we must fight for thousands of years." Only then can we feel the uniqueness and excitement of the Eternal Life Style. Of course, under the circumstances in the plot, one cannot arbitrarily say that there is a problem with Su Chen's choice, but the problem is that this kind of plot construction method that extremes the situation should not appear at all in a longevity-style novel that pays great attention to the choice of the protagonist. Second, after seizing the secret realm, Su Chen had no way out and had to break through it quickly in a short period of time. This caused the already somewhat out-of-control plot rhythm to run out of control. It took nearly one hundred and seventy chapters to reach the foundation building, but after the plot speeded up again, it only took about twenty chapters to reach the core building, and the rhythm collapsed. Not to mention the longevity-style novels that emphasize slowing down the pace, even the traditional royal way upgrade novels, this kind of plot advancement speed can be said to be overwhelming. Even if it is a fanfic that pays attention to a highly condensed plot, going from foundation building to pill formation in less than twenty chapters is not a healthy ratio. The rhythm has collapsed to such an extent that there is no longer any supporting characters, let alone emotional resonance with the readers. The highlights of the Immortal Stream have been completely abandoned so far, and if you continue to write about it, it will be an old mortal stream with nothing new. It is said that you should maximize your strengths and avoid weaknesses. For this book, the highlight of the longevity stream is undoubtedly the length. If you end up writing it to the point of exploiting the weaknesses and avoiding the strengths, and abandon the highlight of the longevity stream that the title, introduction, and early stage all turned into labels, then there is no doubt that it will be a dead end. Except for the most obvious issue of rhythm, other issues are more subjective. I personally feel that the Immortality Stream model is simply not suitable to be linked to the already perfect worldview of cultivating immortals. What is the world view of Xianxia Fantasy? The common point is that there is a huge difference between high cultivation and low cultivation. Moreover, increasing one's cultivation level is often directly equivalent to increasing one's lifespan. A person with a high level of cultivation can easily outlast dozens of generations of monks with a low level of cultivation. In this case, the protagonist's "immortality" cannot be well highlighted. It can often only be used as a guarantee of confidence, and it is even difficult to use it. As far as this book is concerned, Su Chen is not a stupid person with unqualified qualifications. Is it necessary to write that each of his realms requires far longer than his own lifespan to break through? That requires reasonably strong suppression of promotion time, which is difficult and unpleasant. What's more, if it is written normally, the protagonist will definitely reach an unparalleled, even unprecedented, super height. Is it possible to convince the readers that a foolish person who has struggled to break through the lower realms can reach such heights just by living a long time? But if the protagonist can always break through the realm and extend his life before the realm's life limit, then the effect of the "immortality" plug-in will be greatly weakened. If the core of this book is "Gou Daoliu" and immortality is just a means of guaranteeing survival, then it would not be a bad idea to write it this way. But the first half of this book is obviously not that. It is about the emotional conflict and resonance that the protagonist lives forever but others cannot. In this case, the essence of the Immortality Stream will be affected if it is connected to a Xianxia worldview. Even if you want to receive the mature Xianxia system, then receiving the mortal stream is definitely the next best choice. Mortals rely on stacking resources to cultivate immortality. In essence, they are repeatedly searching for better resources (including elixirs, magic weapons, exercises, rare objects, etc.) To cultivate. Almost all conflicts and contradictions revolve around the process of finding resources. But finding resources is a very personal process. In this process, the absolute protagonist can only be the protagonist himself. This conflicts with the previously mentioned highlight of the longevity stream, which is the "virtual protagonist and real supporting role". It is difficult for the author to "cast the net and close the net" of the Immortal style in the conflicts and stories surrounding finding resources. Personally, I feel that even if you want to accept the worldview of cultivating immortals, you should choose a mind-cultivation system that has a huge gap between realms and tends to directly comprehend the great road and the world of mortals. The gap in cultivation is large and the breakthrough is difficult, so the protagonist can more reasonably stay in the same realm for a longer time and have more opportunities to shape the supporting role of this level. If, like the mortal flow, the breakthrough is taking drugs, and the breakthrough time is relatively short, then there will be a very embarrassing situation. The supporting characters during the foundation building period have not been fully formed, and before death or other events trigger emotional resonance, the protagonist has already reached the golden elixir, and the golden elixir has met a new group of people. Moreover, the golden elixir is different from the foundation building cloud mud, and the opportunities for the original supporting characters to appear and further shape are bound to be compressed. Repeatedly like this, it falls into the cliché of upgraded articles. Only a system that focuses on understanding the human world and understanding the great road can more reasonably allow the protagonist to go deep into the human world and influence the fate of each supporting character. In the process, the supporting characters can be shaped and the emotional resonance of readers can be harvested. Or simply abandon the mature system of cultivating immortals and let the protagonist use the trait of immortality to become the ancestor of magic creation and expand the upper limit of realm step by step in the world of mortals. This may be a better choice. And for Immortality-ryu, it should be about the vicissitudes of the protagonist going through the mortal world, the kind of changing identities and hiding in the world, and experiencing the fate of the mortal world, which is the best thing to watch. There is no need to stick to the main plot of continuous upgrading. On the contrary, it is easy to ignore the rhythm of the longevity stream and write it down as an upgrade article. In the end, if I have to say, I still support the author's courage and decision to cut the book decisively. It can be said that the book is rotten when it is written like this. If you continue to write it just because you want to finish the book and can't let it be unfinished, you will only destroy your creative enthusiasm and spirituality. It is better to just cut the next book. I would rather suggest that the author not rush to start a new book, but at least absorb the lessons learned from this book and think carefully before starting a new creative journey. It doesn't matter if one book is cut, but if the second book fails miserably and ends up being cut, it will seriously affect the trust and attention among the readers. After that time, there will definitely be fewer people willing to follow up on the books. To be honest, I think the first half of this book is as good as a master, and I hope the author can succeed next time~

Normal people don't seem to like this book, nor do righteous people. People from the devilish way don't seem to like it, and if it is neither righteous nor evil, they will look uncomfortable. Generally speaking, the moral bottom line in the heart has not collapsed yet, but they want to be a person who has no desires and desires, neither up nor down, neither high nor low. If you like to read this kind of human society, you can take a look. Different people will have different understandings! Since you have decided to live forever, it would be better to cut off things like feelings as early as possible (눈_눈)

Aren't most of us recommended by Sanjiang? Why is it that one comment is called a troll, and the author is said to have offended people?

I was full of expectations but unsatisfactory I originally came here for the fake eunuch in the harem In the end, the protagonist has been living in the harem for more than ten years, and a woman appeared in the harem, and she was the queen Forget it, the protagonist still has nothing to do with the queen Ridiculous, I don't know what the author is Why did you arrange for the protagonist to be a fake eunuch in the harem but he turned out to be a real eunuch? You can't lose your virginity even though you practice the exercises. You usually just fish and stay in the harem and it's inconvenient to do anything. As a result, the protagonist has never been discovered Practice a exercise to strengthen your body and you almost lose your health even for a year What's the fuss? Not even those quick-acting techniques?

Brushing so hard? Wan Ding's book only has so many reviews?

I've only read three or four chapters, so I subscribed to the comments directly, so I won't complain. This is the empress trick again, the princess is smart, the prince is incompetent, and the thief is disgusting to watch. It is clearly written that the protagonist is afraid of trouble, but he accidentally messed up Hai Dongqing. If something happens to the empress in the future, will this bird fly over? When the protagonist sees that the empress is in trouble, he will immediately go to save her? The starting point of this routine is not only ten thousand but also one thousand. Why not just write about the princess rebelling and being killed? Do you really have to keep dragging me? If you really want to commit a crime, can the eldest princess marry a consort who is not the protagonist? But I guess you won't write it like this. The most disgusting thing is to see a readable book and then have it destroyed by a woman for no reason. Nowadays, if authors are not good at writing female protagonists, they should write less about women, and less involve them with the male protagonist.

Just like studio writing, it's tasteless, the quotations sometimes don't make sense, the historical knowledge is also poor, and there are no highlights.

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