Fire Chasers

I tried reading the first volume of the second volume. First of all, let's talk about the protagonist. The eunuch is very good, but due to the lack of psychological description, the protagonist's behavior is too background. Intuitively speaking, it lacks subjective initiative and only serves the plot. Readers cannot know in advance what the protagonist is, what he wants, and what he needs; for the article, the protagonist can hardly advance the plot, and it is very tiring to read. As for the supporting characters, the same problem, background board, the connection established with the protagonist is too coincidental, lacks integration, and is broken too quickly. The parts that should be written in detail are briefly touched on, and the parts that should be tight are suddenly cut off. It is difficult to say whether it is appropriate or not, because the article did not show an abrupt tone in the early stage, and the protagonist did not change or grow much. Secondly, in the plot, it can be seen that the author has put a lot of thought into the background layout and world view, but after reading it, I can say it is "classic" in an exaggerated way. The plot of the first volume is smooth and step-by-step, but the background is too flat. The entire force, background characters and stories are independent and rarely intersect. The background is just the background, neither shaping the protagonist nor promoting the plot. Looking at it this way, I can only say that it is mediocre. The hidden foreshadowing, the secrets that emerge in the development of the story, are also poorly written techniques. In this regard, we don't want to do something as big as Daogui, at least something unexpected is required. Especially in the next college, to be honest, I couldn't continue studying. You can look at the blood tax. It completely collapsed in the academy. Because the academy is a relatively new, closed space, it is too regimented, especially if you don't write in advance what the protagonist is going to do and what will happen in the academy. For readers who like adventure genres, especially when the background and many hidden secrets are hinted at the beginning, it will make people feel boring. Not to mention that the protagonist's connection to the deeper plot has been shown, but it is cut off and started all over again. I think it is a plot point, just like the blood tax, but it also has ntr, although it is "brother's test". Actually, it's okay to read the end of the first volume, and I know what hidden secrets can be discovered, but from the beginning of the second volume, I stopped digging, let's go to school. At least you start to say that I want to dig this. I go to school to dig this. There is still hope for this. How to deal with a relatively fixed space in fantasy writing, such as sects, and many hidden secrets, contradictions and conflicts can be seen at a glance. How Kraft dealt with it was to weaken the idea that the academy is a tool to advance the plot, rather than the main plot unfolding in the academy. This will please readers who like to read adventure genres and can bring plenty of freshness. It is difficult to tell in the first and second volumes what kind of people your book is meant to serve. The protagonist joining the Lighthouse, the Holy See or the army is better than entering such a "classic" academy, and the first volume obviously does not attract readers who pay attention to the academic stream. The writing style and background are good, but it's a pity that the author doesn't seem to have written it for the readers this book will attract.

The male protagonist's setting is confusing. If his friend dies, just call the police and pretend it's nothing? Meeting the priest just to get rid of suspicion? Facing the half-adoptive father of his dead daughter, he actually left without saying hello. I think the male protagonist is still living in his apartment, so there is no breakup. It is true that there is a separation. And the male protagonist is a rare literate person with excellent appearance, physical ability, and the ability to punch prosthetic modified people, and then he works as a dock porter every day? Your brotherhood doesn't have any clerical jobs. Everything else is fine, my writing skills are quite good.

Dear readers, the author Hui Yimeng was hospitalized for surgery on December 10, 2024 due to acute appendicitis. During the surgery, he suffered internal bleeding and went into a coma and entered the rescue room. His current physical condition is that he cannot continue to update. It is expected to resume updating on January 10, 2025. I hope Haihan

The writing is quite good, but I felt very tired while watching it... Maybe it's because the settings are so familiar. Vampire demon steam machine hybrid protagonist.

It might have been popular ten years ago. The writing was good but the plot was too vulgar and had little potential for development.

Finally, there is a cheat who is not a time traveler. It is best not to mess with the system or anything. It should be popular.

I really like this book, but I haven't made any money yet, so I'm not able to make enough money, so I gave it a small reward with some pocket money. Come on, author.

I can say that there are few such good books in Qidian. Why is it not popular? Personal opinion, don't comment.

I hope everyone takes care of themselves and the author recovers soon.

There are not many online articles with an epic feel these days.

I feel like it's well written. I just finished reading the first two chapters and it's very interesting. I hope the author doesn't give up. 😭

The writing is good, but there's nothing exciting about it. Pig's Foot is a thoughtless puppet.

I personally strongly recommend a niche board game, "Dark World" by White Wolf Game Company (there is an excerpt of the setting in the post, you can click to take a look). The setting of this game is extremely exciting. It has a great influence on the basic setting of werewolves, vampires and other fantasy creatures in modern popular culture. It is basically inseparable from the shadow of this setting collection. But there is very little relevant information online. I wonder if you know the Chinese forum "the ring of wonder"? There are many translations, discussions, and settings of science fiction and fantasy games and works. The wod (world of darkness) section of the Chunmei Apple Orchard Forum also has related Chinese translations. I highly recommend everyone to check it out. The following is an excerpt from the settings:

Now my requirements for online articles have been reduced to the point where I can read them as long as they don't engage in time travel, so please come on, author.

This writing is so awesome! Even when writing physical books, editors often take over.

The reaction to Qingmei's death was too cold. When he saw the body on the way home, he called the police and left. He told the priest the next day and his adoptive father didn't even know.

Beautiful writing👍

As for the previous post, only Chaofan can counter it. If you want to develop other things, you can't suppress the extraordinary, if there is extraordinary

I can do anything😭😭😭

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It's a 23-year-old book. It's so slow to update.

I feel that the author's story is getting better and better as the chapters progress, especially Bei Minzhang's story about the protagonist as a shaman, which is very touching. All the plot designs are very good, just like a movie But can the author advance the plot a little slower? I feel like I won't stay in a scene for a long time before I change it immediately Overall I think it's well written, keep up the good work👏

Just read dozens of chapters? Probably, the previous description is very good, but the plot advancement is too baffling. There are many characters at once, but it feels like the protagonist moves when he needs it, and the protagonist doesn't work when he doesn't. You know, there is something wrong with the character and story design.

The writing is very good and detailed. The result is that readers who are used to reading Qidian Hydrology will have to spend several times the energy and time to read it and will feel tired.

The flavor of Western Fantasy is really strong, and the settings are mixed a lot. It's rich but fairly self-consistent. However, there are some minor flaws in the plot arrangement. This problem is the same as what you mentioned before in the long review you replied to several times in the comment area, so I won't go into details. In short, it lacks foreshadowing and hooks, the characters are not three-dimensional enough, the plot direction is not rich enough and layered, and some plots are still a bit classic. But overall, the plot is still okay and quite satisfactory. In the current environment of Xiaobai Shuangwen, the plot can be regarded as a plus point. At least it is not too intellectually depressing. Although the protagonist's combat power is a bit abnormal at the beginning, there is a lack of foreshadowing and revelation of the protagonist's character at the beginning, resulting in the protagonist's behavior at the beginning being weird. However, the reason why I put it down after reading volume one was actually the heroine. This heroine lacks some charm for me. Whether it is the childhood sweetheart who died in the beginning, the vampire girl or the elf Erin, it will be more in line with my appetite (it may also be because I don't like big sisters. Someone of the same age or a younger sister may be more to my taste. In fact, the big sister type is generally barely acceptable, but you, the big sister, are also too big a sister. In terms of personality, appearance, and even this initiative, it completely gives me the feeling of a domineering female president and a little nanny. The operation at the end of the first volume was so confusing to me that I couldn't stand it anymore. , I don't know if the author has worked hard to write this plot, and I feel that the style of painting has changed... All in all, this kind of big sister-type heroine is very rare in online novels. Even the big-sister-type heroines in his works are not so big sisters), but I basically only like single heroines, and I don't want you to write multiple heroines, so it is difficult to accept it. In addition, I entered the academy in the second volume, and the somewhat weird plot arrangement made me a little bit unbearable. After thinking about it, I will put it aside and wait for the next book. I feel that I will make great progress by learning from the experience in the next book. (Stop being a big sister.) However, at this update rate, when can I see your next book?