Konoha, Self-Destruction Began to Become Stronger

You're writing fucking fantasy, and you still have the air of a jounin

This introduction is really enough to dissuade me. The strong smell of salted fish was directly transmitted to me, making me click on the book without even bothering to click on it.

The book must be raised to death.

The last few posts are a bit strange and I can't read them.

Protagonist Fire Release·Ghost Lantern Ghost Lantern Creates a ghost lantern that floats in place for 8 seconds in front of you. When an enemy touches the ghost lantern, the ghost lantern will explode, causing 433% damage Cooling time 15s Upgrade Fragments Ghost Lantern Fragments How to Obtain: There is a chance to obtain it by participating in a team raid

After reading Chapter 3.5, It was quite childlike. .

The creativity is quite good, but the writing is too poor and the plot setting is unreasonable. It is very uncomfortable to watch and I have no interest in reading it.

I only read a few chapters and felt that the plot was outrageous. The ghost lantern technique turned into invincible defense in the hands of the protagonist. It used very little chakra, forcing Danzo to kneel down and apologize. In the late stage of Chuunibyou, Tenhu started. This is

That's a little suggestion. Author, don't be too hasty. Slow down the transitions. If it's too fast, it will jump. The description in the novel can be more detailed, unlike the animation movie. After reading a few chapters, I felt like I just couldn't connect, as if a sentence or a short paragraph in the middle had been deleted. To put it bluntly, it's a big jump. You still have to understand it in your mind. What I saw was a bit inconsistent and out of character.

It's 2022 and I'm still writing about Naruto starting from the ninja school. Even if the writing is excellent, few people want to read it.

The beating of joy passed in a daze, and how much happiness was hazy here. Actually, you no longer need to chase. Just keep dancing and shout Hi Hi Hi. Give me a drink

I feel like there's something wrong with the punctuation, I'm not sure if it's the author's habit or some other reason.