Longevity Begins with Hong Kong TV Series

There are too many explanations and not much actual plot in each chapter.

What's going on with the protagonist in these chapters? His personality is a bit broken. It doesn't matter if he wins money. Why does he keep mocking others and acting like a villain? He's totally different from the Hong Xing who used to collect protection money.

A few suggestions, the author should not go into long explanations, character ideas, settings, etc. Normal readers don't like to argue with these things. As long as your logic is basically reasonable, the pundits won't be discouraged just because of your lengthy explanation.

I finally found a book that I can read. It's good. The author's bones are amazing and he may die tomorrow. Let me talk about a few points that can be improved and need attention. After all, I am also a colleague. First of all, I don't need to say that readers have probably said a lot. Now, when you start explaining, it shouldn't be too long. When you come back to your senses and finish reading it, you will forget everything about the plot, then the meaning of the explanation itself will be lost. And in fact, people who insist on bullying you will still bully you no matter how much you say. Second, it's a concept thrown out by a certain ghost king Practice existing skills to become someone else's meat pig? It is understandable if you want the protagonist to no longer have to fight monsters, upgrade, change equipment, skills, and then fight monsters and upgrade like other upgrade streams. But the difficulty increases too much at once. After all, it is starting from scratch. If this is not good, If you deal with it, it may be a big thunder. There are many examples to cite. Many future opponents have become pigs, but they are stronger than the protagonist who made up his own skills, and they were not harvested because of the problem of their skills until their death. So what is the advantage of the protagonist? Also, it is mentioned that the Kung Fu can be understood through Daozang or something, so why hasn't Daozang been tricked by someone? It's already 250,000 words, which is not too short. The protagonist's current cultivation system has not been set up at all. He just relies on the accumulation of attributes. To suddenly realize a skill is inappropriate and abrupt. If you don't make efforts in this area, it is completely unjustifiable. And how to reasonably write the protagonist's integration of hundreds of schools of thought to create a skill also requires rationality.

First of all, thank you for your comments, I have seen them all. Let me talk about it here, because I am just a small author now. There are no veteran authors or great authors who have so many old readers who can explain the new book. Therefore, many things in the book need to be explained in more detail, otherwise there will be a lot of points, so some readers feel that there are too many explanations. I thought that might be the case until I saw a comment that completely shocked me. Injustice ghosts, I think it should be clearly written in the book. This is a level setting. All ghosts that reach a certain level of power are called injustice ghosts, and then there are fierce ghosts. As a result, some people say that only those who die due to injustice can be called injustice souls... Is this all quantum reading? Thankfully it was written in detail, otherwise I wouldn't dare to imagine how it would be sprayed.

It is recommended not to add any messy settings. If you want Eastern fantasy, just be Eastern fantasy. If you are horror and supernatural, just be horror and supernatural. Don't just add random settings like Cthulhu as you write. It is easy to collapse. For example, learning other people's skills will be regarded as food. This looks a bit Cthulhu. Lu's feeling, and it's only been a few dozen chapters, and you've dug such a big hole. If you continue writing this idea, the probability of collapse is quite high There are many novels that collapse like this. They were originally well written, but suddenly they had a brain convulsion and added a bunch of messy and incorrect settings, and then they couldn't come back together

Since the Yin-Yang Corpse has grown long and smelly, a Yin-Yang Corpse in Chapter 20-30 is just water, water, water 🥵

Seriously, author, your latest chapters fully demonstrate that the protagonist is an idiot.

Does the author understand the word kill differently from me or from most people? In my understanding, killing means killing, but the author's killing means beating?

Two-thirds of the whole article is set up and explained. A lot of explanations are either useless or not close together, which is too verbose.

Then finally there is the problem of the protagonist's character. Originally the character of the protagonist was not obvious and seemed stable, but later it became a bit too joyful. In a sense, it overlaps with Li Ang's character and is not suitable for description and plot. It will also lose certain characteristics of the protagonist.

To be honest, author, if you are really a magical rainbow horse, you talk about how new you are while knowing better than anyone else. One sentence seems to be like an iron abacus and it can end the world. You feel that everyone in the world is drunk and there is no need to listen to any advice. Then we should break up. It doesn't matter if you are good to me, the money will be given to you for free. If I am fooled, I will leave now.

That mission selection is really redundant.

How should I put it? I could have done a good job of cheating, but in the end I did some cultivation and the cheating was suppressed. It was useless.

The plug-in settings are good, and the book is very readable based on the Hong Kong film and television background. The second part of the plot, the cultivation plot, is too messy to read, and the plot is not very smooth to read. It's like watching an NBA game and seeing half of the TV stations cut to football for you. It's too jumpy and the plot twist isn't good enough.

There is a saying that as soon as Chapter 30 of the Ghost King Realm came out, I felt like I was in the spotlight instantly.

Briefly talk about the advantages and disadvantages of this book. Advantages: The beginning is well written, and it quickly enters the golden finger. Pig's feet are very subjective. When they find the source, they will take the initiative to kill the weird ones to absorb the points. Upgrade speed is super fast. And there is a principle of not killing or harming others. With the cow's tear vision, the streets were full of monsters in broad daylight, but they did not harm anyone, and the pig's feet did not attack them. The interaction with psychopathic Li Ang is also very interesting. The increase in ability comes from adding points to the dark blue of Gold Finger, which is considered a casual cultivator. Disadvantages, starting from the appearance of Professor Tianbaozhao, the author did not handle some of the dialogue well. The words spoken by the supporting characters did not fit the characters and the environment. It was probably because the writing was too late and I did not think about it carefully. Then the professor explained to Pig Knuckle what is common sense in such a bad street in the training world. Obviously, the author added this setting in order to broaden the depth and breadth of cultivation. However, it had the opposite effect, making readers feel that the pig's feet are not so unique, creating a contrast, affecting the desire to read, and it would be less interesting to figure it out on my own like I am a vampire.

The beginning was good, but then the writing became more and more confusing. A bunch of explanations were messed up.

Is there a female protagonist? There is a heroine who kicks me. It's okay if he's an impotent protagonist.

As far as the plot is concerned, it is quite interesting, especially the plot of Yin and Yang, but the update is too slow. Of course, the setting is novel and not comprehensive. Some problems will be difficult to write if the outline is not solved in the later stage. The situation of this setting is a bit small.

At the beginning, the game was about defeating everything. The trip to Mongkok was not good enough. The selection system itself should be all kinds of reckless, but after the big boss appeared, he took it seriously and then kept being cowardly. What's the use if you can't practice it yourself?

The book is good. Is the author going to get the money? It's a pity for the eunuch.

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