Douluo Dalu: The Book of Witness and The Unrivaled Tang Sect

Regarding Wuhun, there are a lot of bugs in the setting. The first bug: Twin martial souls in one body. This setting is a problem. It is better to call them companion martial souls or symbiotic martial souls directly. The original work is twin martial souls. You are also called twin martial souls, but you are essentially one and can appear at the same time. The second bug, Wuhun glasses, ability insight analysis, but there is no analysis function. What the author gave is that the soul skill level can be seen. This needs to be seen. The color of the soul ring is already very obvious. Secondly, if it is two levels higher than itself, you will faint after checking it. In my words, you clearly have the ability to judge the strong, and can judge the soul masters who are two realms higher than yourself. If Tang San had this Wuhun, he would know that his father was a strong man, but how does acquiring soul skills affect the Wuhun? It has little effect, is flashy and tasteless, and is a pity to throw away! The second bug, the Book of Martial Spirit Witnesses, ability recording and deduction, requires glasses to record and deduce, it is useless, without eyes this martial spirit is a waste. The name is even more nonsense. It has nothing to do with testimony. You might as well call it the Book of Destiny to deduce destiny. Fuxi plays Bagua and his path is destiny, which is more suitable for destiny.

To be honest, the virtual world part is really terrible. What is the significance of this plot to the growth of the protagonist? Considering from the time line, I will definitely go to the big competition next year, but I don't know when the war with the Sun and Moon Empire will start. At this time, shouldn't we quickly compete with other core disciples and even the inner court to develop our combat abilities and tacit understanding, adapt to various arena competitions, and arrange tactics? There is also the setting of Panlong Continent. The construction of the virtual environment came out with a slap on the forehead. Isn't your awesome plug-in bead just a virtual illusion? You wrote this thing so awesome before, but in the end, you only built a ninth-level soul guide in two years and caught up? There is basically no difference between the existence and non-existence of this plug-in that has no sense of existence. How many years did it take to create the virtual world of Douluo Sanli, how many materials were there, and what level of soul guidance device did the main body have? Can Shrek Academy's level of technology and rare metal reserves be enough to complete it in three years? Excluding the time it took to upgrade to Soul Forging, it took just one year to get it done? The chemical reaction between materials, the various feedbacks received by the characters, the thinking of the virtual characters, and the possible interference caused by the soul power. How to solve these problems? I don't ask you to write it perfectly, at least it can be logically rounded. The last thing is the satellite. I remember that before the God Realm disappeared, there was a barrier outside the planet, but I can't remember this clearly.

Everything else is fine. I'm just waiting for the author to figure out how to join the Tang Sect later on. If the reason for confronting Tang San is not strong enough, the protagonist will be cheating his master and destroying his ancestors. No matter how Tang San got the secret book, you passed it down from someone else, and even if the reason is legitimate, you are still suspected of cheating his master and destroying his ancestors. If you write for Tang San as his younger brother, you can see if the readers will accept it.

You, the author, are making a fool of yourself, didn't you say that? You don't need to double your soul power to unleash your full power. Why are you causing trouble if you still write double soul power here? Soul skills require double soul power. They are not soul skills and do not require double soul power. This is the opposite. Or should you set the outline like this?

It's a bit disgusting to give the protagonist a buggy spirit and then block all kinds of imagination development.

It feels like it's written like a conversation

Tianhu's opening is poorly written, suitable for newcomers who have rarely watched Douluo.

The writing is poor and the thinking is not good. He got into a rage when he ran away because of some family dispute. Seeing that the copied soul skills cannot be analyzed, it requires the cooperation of others to analyze them. The logic does not make sense. Since you have copied them, you cannot analyze them. I jumped and read it again. The plug-in setting is quite powerful. The author's writing style and imagination are not good enough to write it like this.

I still don't quite understand the meaning of the Coiling Dragon Realm. Can I bring the rare metals in it back to the Douluo World? What's the point of occupying the territory inside? So far, this virtual game can only bring practical experience and production experience. I don't understand why the author would spend such a long article writing it, and also make the protagonist group play the game very seriously. What are the benefits?

The author can use 6 soul bones with defensive soul skills as the core of the battle armor. After all, the basic ability of the battle armor is to increase attributes and increase soul skills. This is completely feasible (at this time, the Sun and Moon Empire already has the technology to use soul bones as soul guides). Besides, the protagonist's martial spirit can be deduced better. It would also be good if the soul bones are replaced with soul skills that increase attributes or soul skills! The author thinks about it, after all, Doukai can be continuously upgraded or evolved with martial souls. It is cost-effective to use soul bones with enhanced attributes or enhanced soul skills as the core!