I'm Safe in Hokage, Right?

Naruto is difficult to write, too strong. Collapse, too weak. Collapse, Hinata, Ushiha, must collapse. Ordinary people live in Naruto, this routine is fresh, write slowly, keep going. If you want to be more popular, add some Chinese two sentences and Sunshine Chicken Soup. Slowly become that light. The word "human heart" means everything.

This wave is too fat

The writing is so poor, there is no sense of empathy at all

The story feels good, but the author should really pay attention to his writing. This writing is really like a stick in his neck. After reading more than ten chapters, sometimes I feel that it is too awkward to read with a preface that does not match the follow-up. The author may not be able to understand what he writes, but the reader has a really hard time reading it.

The writing is confusing and difficult to read. Others add water to wine, but you add firewood to wine...

A rubbish novel, firmly finished

After reading a few chapters, I'm sure it's a garbage novel!

It is strongly recommended that the author read the article twice before publishing it. It is full of typos and incoherence. Why should this kind of book attract readers?

Author, let me provide you with some ideas, hoping to strengthen or supplement your work. People in the ninja world are not "human". After Liu Dao sown chakra seeds, their own genes changed. As a native who has lived for an unknown period of time, he can't feel the natural energy? The base is large but very few, only a handful. And this can also be used as a direction for development to rely on. The first chakra generation converter is the sacred tree, and humans are similar. You can dig into this aspect. How to write it or whether to add it is up to you.

Go to the Hinata family to express your views on the main family and the separate families? Is this seeking death? Compare humans to ants? If an ant had a mind, wouldn't it want to take over? It's a bit far-fetched to also guide father and mother to become stronger.

How should I put it? It's a Naruto fanfic written from a completely new angle, but too many sentences before and after it don't match. It would be much better if it was revised properly.

Doesn't the author read it again after writing it? Problems with sentence fragmentation, typos, and multiple words are common.

I have read more than 40 chapters. Generally speaking, there is nothing too poisonous. The plot of reducing intelligence is basically nothing. Of course, it is not interesting, and it tends to be relatively dull. But there are not many points to persuade you to retreat. The main reason is that the priority is not clear, there is a piece of writing here and there, and everything that should be explained is not explained clearly. It feels a bit like a running account, but it is not. It feels like I don't have an outline. I write wherever I think of it. When I feel good about it, I write more. If I have a lot, I write a beginning, and then I change hands and do other things.

There are too many inner dramas, my head hurts from watching them

What are you writing? You don't even read it?