The Strongest Self-Disciplined Captain of the Konoha Guards

Feel free to comment, it may not be pleasant to the ears, so please forgive me if it offends me. First of all, the author should write very seriously, but the content and ideas are a bit taken for granted. I guess it is because the author is young and lacks experience. (I guess the author may be around 20 years old or even less than 20 years old) In general, it is a refreshing work that has just passed the test. It can be read when there is a shortage of books. But I guess it won't be very attractive to readers who continue to read and subscribe. At least I don't have much motivation to continue reading. I plan to put it on the bookshelf to read when there are more updates and there are no other books to read. If I want to elaborate, I will divide it into two parts Generally speaking, the rhythm of the plot in the book is okay, neither too urgent nor too slow. In this aspect, the author has reached the standard line of an online author. If he keeps improving, the book will get better and better. This is the first part and the advantage. Then, the second part is also flawed. The writing style in the book is generally relatively light. Although the author's efforts can be seen, it gives the impression that the author wanted to depict an epic scene. When it was drawn, it was only at the drawing level of a junior high school student. Although everything that should be drawn and wanted to be drawn was drawn, the overall picture was quite plump and intimidating at first glance, but there were problems such as incorrect picture structure, incorrect perspective, inconsistent style, lack of details, etc... This area is a hard standard for professional level and life experience. Without the amount of writing and experience, it will be difficult for you to write the desired effect and correct effect. I don't know exactly how to change it. I just read a lot, but I'm really bad at writing books. But I do have some opinions on the general direction of improvement. Author, just listen to it. The first is the professional level of writing. In my personal opinion, the author's writing level has reached the passing level of professional online writers. To use an LOL analogy, it means that he has escaped from the blind fighting in the Bronze Fish Game. He has already worked hard in the Silver Game and has basic rules. Therefore, the author has nothing to do but read more famous novels and learn from their advantages. I believe he will soon advance to the gold rank and become a qualified professional writer. This basically meets the requirements for writing the desired effect. Secondly, in terms of content, we will not discuss the setting and imagination of the writing here. This thing is just like the fashion trend, no one can say for sure. What I mainly want to say is the internal logic that the author wants to express, such as the logic of character behavior, the self-consistent logic of the worldview, the political logic, the logic of event development, etc. This may give readers a strong sense of violation. The logic of the protagonist's behavior in this book is a little confusing, and the political logic and event development logic of the worldview are also weak. It feels like a binary world that is either black or white. However, the plot description is full of "I, third, and fourth levels", which makes it embarrassing to watch. The simple summary here is that the author lacks experience, so he cannot write the correct desired effect. The solution is to wait until he gets older and get better slowly, and the other is to read more news and gossip, and look at the same thing from various angles, and it will be fine when it accumulates to a certain level.

It is purely NT to say that Itachi is a righteous person who killed his relatives. Konoha was founded by Uchiha and Senju. The aspect of righteousness is untenable, and why did Uchiha want to rebel? For the sake of Konoha, they were able to give up Madara. They fought life and death in three wars and shed their blood for Konoha. In the end, there was no reward, and even their own house was confiscated. Let me use an analogy. You fought for the country and became disabled. However, the country saw you as useless and confiscated your property. How can you still let your family eat dirt for the country? And even if the clan is exterminated, even if the clan is exterminated in ancient times, babies and good old people will not be spared. They are unfaithful, unjust and unfilial. This is Uchiha Itachi

The novel is just average. I don't know why I brought pirate stuff here. Are devil fruits really invincible in the world of Naruto? Some ninjutsu settings are also very advanced. A sea of ​​dead fire, not to mention that pirates are still hydrogen men

Post a post collecting errors, bugs, and poisonous points in the book This is really the first time the author writes about a Naruto fanfic, so mistakes are inevitable, so please be merciful. If you have any questions, please tell me. If it has little impact on the plot, I will modify it or even rewrite it.

The protagonist's operation to overthrow the top management of Konoha should be the fastest among the Naruto fans I have ever seen. Feeling comfortable

When I saw Itachi mentioned in the comment section, I wanted to ask, those who like Itachi and say "Weasel God" at the same time, do they also have any thoughts about their parents and their own people? 😁 One by one, right?

According to the author's setting, Itachi is a character who kills relatives for the sake of justice. I don't know why everyone is pitting Itachi. Maybe it's because of Japanese culture. I think if it were converted to China, it was a family force that conspired to rebel and wanted to cholera the world and reach the pinnacle of power. Then the son of the family patriarch killed his family for the sake of national peace and security, and wiped out his own family, and was charged with unfilial piety. Isn't it great to think like this to sacrifice one's own family to help everyone? Many people won't agree with it, I understand, and I don't agree with it either, but that doesn't stop his great ideas.

This book is not good. Let's see if there is any improvement in the next one. It's a bit praising for a novice.

Although I know that you, the author, have your own ideas, it looks like a fly in boiled water to me. That's it for now, so I decided to put my mind aside for the time being and taste it first. If I can't get up, I'll see you again.

The most damn annoying thing is that there are devil fruits in Naruto!

Book Friends Circle doesn't know why I can't post pictures I want to post this I used this guy's timeline

I've seen this kind of plot too much and it's a bit boring. I might as well write the protagonist killing everyone and directly destroying Konoha and bringing it down.

How many episodes of Naruto have you watched, author, so many questions

I forcibly refrained from killing Danzo and Obito. I avoided writing fanfics because I was afraid that killing the original characters would make it difficult to write. You, the protagonist, have invincible strength in the early stages of the game and can kill Obito without following you. Yes, the original book sets Kamui to be able to sense space. If Obito dares to use it once in front of the protagonist, it will be useless.

Although the protagonist has a fixed personality, I hope that the original plot will not remain unchanged. It is better to prevent some tragedies.

This author is really good at boasting and returning the vest. It made me laugh to death. This kind of layout and plot advancement is what an old author should have, not to mention a book with a million words. Stop being funny and pretending to be an old man. At least you have some strength. After these few operations, our expectations for you have been raised and dropped. Can you achieve results? I'm really into dandruff, it's disgusting

There is no need for ink marks in the Eternal Kaleidoscope. The high-level officials were directly destroyed. Other gods controlled the third generation. The other three and other insiders were directly killed. Then the blame was put on Itachi and he was executed. Itachi was supported by controlling the third generation to become Hokage.

,,. It feels like the protagonist does not look like someone who has traveled through the ninja world for more than ten years, but like someone who has just traveled through it. And the game mentality is timid. . What an unexpected ninja. . . You never know what the next plot will do to your mentality. . . The writing is okay, but the plot is a bit bland and boring. You can guess the idea just by looking at the table of contents, and the plot of the novel is a bit confusing.

Uchiha Itachi simply didn't study when he was a child, and his father didn't know how to teach. Learning without thinking is useless. He only knows how to fight and kill and has no education. He is in his teens and has no experience. He can't find a way out if he is fooled. He also likes to get into trouble. He went to Akatsuki to see the world. After hanging out with some old fools, he realized that he had been fooled. So he didn't want to live anymore. Otherwise, one of his brothers would have committed suicide.

Although it was quite enjoyable to watch, it would be nice if there were more life stories, some comedy or complaints

I would like to make a suggestion: I am currently reading Chapter 5, and the author has written too many settings and introductions. If you write it like this at the beginning, readers may not have the patience to read so much introduction.

I have given you a reward for the paragraph, please say a few words. The subject matter is good, but there are often situations that do not fit the basic personality of the characters. It is the kind of situation that feels a bit strange when you glance at it, but if you look carefully, you find that it does not fit the character's personality. This is a Then the hang-up is too big. You can be invincible but you are always merciful. This adds to the unreasonableness of the plot. The protagonist is a little bit. . . How should I put it? There are double standards in some aspects. Some of his own ideas have actually been criticized in his own evaluations of other people. . Of course, he didn't have any problem talking about it. In addition, after seeing Chapter 15, I will withdraw it first. The author will continue to work hard.

If there is no heroine, there will be no ambiguity, the author

Maybe it's because the author's chuuni level is not enough. The cool vocabulary and the unique setting are, for an Uchiha, and for me, the lack of chuuni creativity is like losing the soul.

It is also very strange that the conflict between Konoha and Uchiha has developed like this. After all, the good minister chose a tree to live here and did not stay here. He had his own place to stay. However, a lunatic played it for Sasha. The whole family

With Kamui, you can put all Uchiha and family property into space and take them away.

I just explained it with a picture. I haven't read it yet. I hope the author won't take advantage of the setting. If I'm wrong, please use the formula book to refute me. Thank you

Purely invincible and refreshing article, if you like reading this kind of article, please read it

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There is a very powerful thunder escape named Qilin, but Kidō's Ninety-Nine Five Dragons Transformed to Destruction is also a thunder, the protagonist can refer to it.