Legend of Burning Gun

{"NickName":"Ah","UserId":378971374}@junyang46.34,753.3 😁 Good writing style, reasonable plot, and setting that makes people feel bright. (~￣▽￣)😡 Follow it. Come on, it's good.

Start with the plot, details, and characters. I found that your writing style is just okay, enough to write a magnificent story. But... There is a slight problem. In the first chapter, you wrote about the process of the protagonist obtaining the red gun and a foreshadowing (the protagonist's gun was contracted by someone else). At the same time, you also briefly wrote about the power system - everyone who is over 15 years old and has some strength can contract weapons and use spiritual power and spiritual power to attack. It looks pretty good? But the pit is so big! ! You said you can contract weapons, how can you contract them? Why contract? What happens after the contract? Also, why can only people over 15 years old get a contract? What are some strengths? I thought you would explain it in the second chapter, but in the third golden chapter you directly wrote two chapters of fighting. And it's not well written! What the hell, using a gun as a knife.... Also, I didn't watch it carefully. I remember what the conflict between the protagonist and the villain was about? A boss said casually: "I think that kid deserves a beating, let's go and deal with him together." Then the younger brother went to find trouble with him. That's outrageous. Is a 15-year-old person so stupid? It doesn't matter if the villain is stupid, why do I feel like the protagonist is so stupid too! At least explain the background of the protagonist and the background of the world. The first three chapters directly persuade me to quit, no matter how good your subsequent writing is. Finally, I want to say, keep your enthusiasm, this book is purely for writing practice...

You actually stopped updating for so long! It is recommended to complete it directly