The Transmigration and Rebirth Film and TV Connection System

Author, have you ever counted how many "Isn't that right?" You've written? It affects the sense of reading so much that I didn't even finish the first chapter.

Almost every paragraph has the word "" at the end

The author needs to improve his word choice. When I read The Red Mansion, I really struggled to read it. There were too many words like "when" and the writing was stumbling. I hope that after the author finishes writing, he will read it again from the perspective of the reader. No matter what, it's good to be able to write articles, so keep working hard

This book looks twisted, very awkward. The plot and concept are both good. The fault lies in the writing and dialogue. There are too many modal particles, and the system dialogue will dissuade you. I feel like it should be pretty good if you really look into it. It's a pity that I can't substitute. What a pity

There are too many same words. Now I just listen to books. The experience is too bad.

Can there be less of that? Every sentence contains that and of. It affects listening to the book too much.

Even after taking it, there are a lot of system explanations, the fucking system is your nanny, and Shennongjia can't support you all the time.

Water word count: when, when, when, when, when, when, when, can it be deleted? Don't you know how uncomfortable it is to listen to novels? After listening to a novel, I compared it to your novel

Oh my god, I can't stand listening to it anymore. There are too many words like "That's..."... Does the author usually talk like this? This is usually the case when no one talks, so it's too hard to hold back!

How old is the author? Is he still a ghostwriter? How did he learn to use words and sentences? Are you a fluent reader? You can express the meaning in one sentence but it is still not fluent after eight sentences, so no one can understand it.