An Immortal Cultivation Clan That Began with a Rogue Cultivator

Although it's a bit white, I can read it, but the paragraph is too long. To establish a family, pig's feet are just one person, and there are more wives to have children. I have read a book about family. I don't marry a wife, but build a family with a few people, and then take in orphans. It's disgusting.

The protagonist is too licky. In the previous life, he worked hard for three hundred years before he got a popular golden elixir technique. In this life, after talking to the heroine, he immediately gave him a Nascent Soul-level technique. The protagonist asked to take responsibility. The heroine acted like it was all your fault. There was no need to deliberately poison.

Maybe this is my first time writing, the storyline is too straightforward

You are the one who supports the family. I don't understand the use of creating such a family.

Come on, author, it's best to break it down into paragraphs. It's a bit tiring to read, just my personal opinion.

Stories can. It's just too straightforward. There should be more descriptions, scenes, etc. This thing of yours is too fluid. No sense of ups and downs at all

I'm so lucky, I didn't see the golden finger, bad review

You are planning to start a family, but you only have one wife? Let's learn from Zhu Yuanzhang!

It's unreasonable for his daughter to go out and wander around. You have to know that it's unreasonable to go out and let people steal the house when she's almost golden elixir and needs someone to guard her.

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