Comprehensive Manga: Becoming a Rebel from Naruto

The reading experience is okay, very smooth, but what is the main plot, what does the protagonist want to do, I can see that the protagonist has been training people, giving others ninjutsu, spending system points to give others blood, and is already preparing to open the reincarnation eye for Uchiha Hinata. I don't see any reward for the protagonist, and he keeps benefiting others and harming himself.

Although the writing is good, the setting is explained too much at the beginning. A common mistake that novices make is to cram all kinds of content into it, regardless of whether the reader likes it or not. But maybe this is also because of my understanding of the world in the novel. Obsession It is still recommended to type out the beginning as much as possible to keep readers. If you can't keep it, write it with style. Retelling the world is meaningless. It is better to unfold it through the plot and use plot to describe it.

Well, let me share my opinion. Now is the time when the second generation is in charge of Hokage. At this time, those elders, great elders, or strong men of the ninja clan should not be dead yet. There may be people with Kage's strength in the big clan.

I don't even strengthen the Ninja Village, but I help Konoha build the Eternal Kaleidoscope and Tsangshengan. I don't understand.

The setting is too complicated, and I'm confused. Did the author substitute some game into it? I feel like I'm a novice author and it's so confusing.

_(:з∠)_I really can't take the poison any longer. . . . . There are too many poisonous points The protagonist really loves money. . It's understandable that you said that you didn't have much strength at the beginning, so you wanted to buy some equipment and medicinal materials to upgrade yourself. . But brother. . If you have bought the Hercules permanent card later, you are considered a shadow-level powerhouse! ! I don't want to upgrade my career as a magician. . What else do you want to do? ! And you let Danzo go because of money? It's really just for plot service, so it's all kind of mindless, right? (I know what the author wants to say. The protagonist was not in good health at the time, or had insufficient energy or something... Take a look at it again for yourself... Is it possible that these are the reasons why I said this is a brainless halo of intelligence for the plot?) Second. . There is nothing wrong with earning points to upgrade, and it is good that the protagonist can collect points in daily tasks. The problem is. . The problem is. You neither bother to level up nor do anything to cause trouble, but the protagonist can't even do simple arithmetic problems? The one who makes more money is the long-term task of teaching disciples. . The base is 15,000, and if you have one more disciple, it will increase to 10,000. . But a disciple pays almost 20,000 yuan. . . Ten thousand points of yours are enough for a Hercules. You don't improve yourself. Are you still making a little extra money? ? ? . . Third. . Making trouble is always a point of conflict in the plot of the novel. But. But. But! ! ! You are from Sand Shadow Village! I don't want to strengthen the original character of Sand Shadow. . . You add a Hyuga Rinnegan and an Uchiha Mangekyo on your backhand. . How many times did they save the ninja world before the protagonist cared about them, really. The protagonist made me cry to death

The protagonist is really crazy. Senri licks Konoha and blames the second generation for wanting to kill you. Don't look at what you have done.

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The author does not reply in the comment section. Are you just making garbage?

I looked confused, the magic and gems were too complicated. It's so mind-numbing, it feels like you're playing a game instead of watching Naruto.

After reading it, I thought it was a bit ridiculous, especially accepting Uchiha as my apprentice!

It was fine before, but it hasn't been since it got connected with Konoha! I feel that as long as the Hokage's book is written about people outside the Hokage Village, they will be in chaos as soon as they touch Konoha. You, a person from Sand Shadow Village, are going to open cheats for people in Konoha? He also had to open both pairs of Eye Legend's eyes for him! ! ! I really can't figure it out,,, it's like if you went back to ancient times and knew the importance of gunpowder, then most people would strictly guard against the formula. You don't! You try your best to help the enemy country master the formula, and even help him design guns and ammunition! ! This is outrageous!

The writing is okay, but it feels too confusing and I can't understand it.

The author said goodbye after seeing the system introduction dialogue.

"A Leaf in the Body of Naruto"

The timeline is completely wrong. Senju Tobirama is not dead yet and Gaara has come out. Your timeline is messed up.

How did you get into the entertainment district? ? ?

After reading the first 30 chapters, I hope the author can write better next time, and if we are destined to meet each other in the sea of ​​​​Qidian books

Well, the writing style is very good and the content is OK, but the route and the main plot are a bit confusing. Plus I don't know much about magic, so I feel that the whole article is quite contradictory, and the protagonist's image is very contradictory. It feels like there is no main line. Maybe I didn't outline it when I was writing it. For example, now we need to put a label on the protagonist. There is no such kind of personality label. No matter the route or direction, in which aspect does he want to grow? To what extent has it grown? Coupled with the intrusion of magic, it feels very chaotic.

It's really not that good, especially the fight scene which was so embarrassing. I can't stand it, no wonder no one is watching

I recommend it every day if I'm not interested, and my starting point is perfect.

Fortunately it's over, otherwise I wouldn't be able to get back all my investment.

The author's writing is good. I would like to recommend the book he wrote. Friends who are book-hungry can take a look. Just click on the avatar. It is non-toxic.