Farr Core

After reading a few chapters, I felt that it wasn't very good. The protagonist didn't develop his own power too much and was always running around doing things.

This is my first time trying to write an article. I will continue to study and try various things. I also ask all my book friends to give me feedback. Both good and bad will be of great help to me. As for the plot foreshadowing, I didn't plan to go too in-depth. Each small chapter and each small villain will basically have a beginning and an end in this chapter, (sometimes it will be delayed by one or two short paragraphs due to plot timeline issues.) And the only long-term foreshadowing I buried has been bugged twice by readers (crying ) is about the protagonist's time travel and the origin of Fal's core, (it has been changed once, crying, but it still needs to be changed) Currently there is another issue that has been criticized by readers, which is the protagonist's attitude towards White, (this is a very serious problem) I have also made certain changes to that paragraph. My idea at the time was that the protagonist would definitely become the core of civilization, and his growth would be inseparable from a large number of dependents. At the same time, as a power giver, he would be the focus of everyone in the empire, including the emperor. So if you want to integrate and manage this group, especially in a group where extraordinary power exists and individuals have the ability to subvert the whole, strong laws and the strong execution power that match them are the key. So the protagonist will be a supporter of the law, rather than a person who prioritizes self-interest in everything. (When I read the article, I hated raising it high when being slapped in the face and putting it down gently. Therefore, the villain will still die happily, but before death, he should be judged. [When you benefit from the whole, you should maintain and feed back the whole. When you lose When harming the whole, whether you are internal or external, you must be prepared to be attacked by the whole.] I think so. Of course, this issue is very complicated, I only dare to write a little bit, please point out any bugs) So the protagonist will give priority to obeying the law, and when the law is unreasonable, he will find ways to change the law. (The plot will give the protagonist a super decent identity in the near future.) Finally, some character tags about the protagonist and supporting characters are as follows. I will try to write them outside of the plot in the future. Will: I'm only interested in what I'm interested in (should I leave it alone?) Rodrick: I have a strong learning ability, (positioned as Pikachu, no matter how you change it every time, my big skin will always be in the C position.) Phoebe: Super jealous, (Will's die-hard fan, guess if it will turn black?) Su Ge: Careerist (I think you can't do it, but I can.) Alan: Commonly known as squinting eyes (on the surface, hello, but behind the scenes, I think there is something wrong with you.) Rita: Grumpy old lady (Something wrong? Take it down first.) Vivian: Little adult (I am the head of the family.) Morton: Warm-hearted (My friend, if something happens to you, I will go first.) Oliver: Loves to brag (I have the ability to brag, okay.)

The writing was pretty good, but the flashback caught me off guard and I didn't understand it very well. I didn't get in touch until two pages later and I thought I'd missed it.

I can't bring in the protagonist. If there really is such a person as the protagonist, don't let me know. I feel uncomfortable just seeing it.

Extraordinary power sucks, but it's okay

I feel like the protagonist can set a standard and only give you superpowers if you meet the standard. Don't be like: Oh, you are my friend, I will give you abilities. Oh, you are my soldier and I give you abilities. Oh, you said I recruited a servant, I will give you the ability, you must be loyal to me. It feels like playing house

I suggest that the middle fifty chapters be deleted directly. This book may be better.

Crazy jumping angles make people confused

How should I put it, the beginning was pretty good, but when I continued to write, it became a bit unsatisfactory. Is the author trying to create a calm, rational and well-intentioned protagonist? But from the first heart-breaking incident, I couldn't understand the protagonist's behavior, and there were many contradictions. First, the protagonist has not inherited the memory of the original owner, does not understand the city, and is not sure whether he has extraordinary power to detect it. This is where recklessness comes in. Second, the author explains that there are only four Farr cores, so the protagonist is the fifth one. Can this strategic weapon be revealed at will? He casually told the orcs, and even made the orcs the core family members, which was too eye-catching. Didn't it mean that there were no orcs, and he had not completely suppressed the orcs' force and power (I only read Chapter 20, and I am not sure if there are other situations later, but the protagonist has not reached the later stage yet) (although it is excusable, I always feel that he is a bit stupid). Third, without any training in force, he only has three non-combat characteristics. When he knew that someone would detect him, he was not prepared and did not know the specific strength and weakness of the enemy, so he fought blindly. Fourthly, the original guide NPC Annie can clearly see the difference. She can be silent and cautious, but she can also make insinuations, reveal a little uneasiness about hearing the local poignant news, and ask where to buy some self-defense equipment. Even if she doesn't know, there is no reason to explain. Fifth, the author forcibly promoted the second event of the plot to be a living corpse, and also desensitized others.

Come on, author. It can be seen that this is a writing practice book with few readers, but the author is slowly making progress. The book does have some flaws, but I can keep reading even if I am in a book shortage. How can I put it, although there are no results (dog head), after all, there are few people who read it without the recommendation of the homepage, but as long as it is not supervising, it is just a practice. The author has also responded to comments, and it can be seen that the author also hopes that this book can continue forever (Oh, good guy card!) Anyway, I hope I can stick to it, and I believe the results will get better and better in the future!

I see so many readers saying that the author's writing is good and that he is improving his writing skills, so I want to support the book and read it when the author writes the book. I pray online that the author will not be raised to death.

There is always a question, is there a lot of cores or very few? Judging from the language of the plot and mission, it seems that there are many descriptions. For example, in the 20th picture, if the attacker's words are very few, there are only a few mentioned at the beginning. Shouldn't the attitude be that it is a trap, a conspiracy or the like? I feel like the word "family" is not used very well. It's used too often and too much.

I can't stand it anymore. The classification of levels is not clear. I don't understand the strength of the characteristics. I also don't know how many extraordinary professions the Phar core can do. What's the difference between each Phar core or the effect is the same? There is also a core that allows people to become extraordinary. What are the restrictions? If there are no restrictions, why would no one mass-produce extraordinary people and directly rebel.

(◍•ᴗ•◍) Only after you click on the latest chapter can you follow up on it, and only after you have followed up on it can you get recommendations.

It feels like all the posts are saying no. I really don't see what's wrong. It's just the beginning now, and it's hard to say what will happen in the future. But for the first part, the author has definitely put in the effort. You can tell by looking at the details, not a running account. I am also an old bookworm. I clicked on this book purely randomly. At first, I thought it was written by a fourth or fifth level author. When I saw the post, there were only a few people. To be honest, this is a better start than most new writers who write online articles that look like an assembly line.

What about updates? Was there an accident? He's not dead, is he?

Titan, praise the God of all opportunities Ring the bell once! Push the lever to activate the piston and pump... Ring the bell twice! Push the button and the engine ignites, igniting the turbine and breathing life into... Ring the bell three times! Sing in unison, praising the God of all opportunities!

I really want to complain. I just discovered this book and saw a chapter asking for leave. …………