My Narration Seems a Little Off

The pace is too fast. If you have an unexplained crush on a girl you just met for a day, you will still be killed. Your explanation later will be even more outrageous. What kind of big house seems deserted without her living alone? How did you get here before? Are the memories you have accepted for decades in vain? Licking the dog properly

Yes, the last time I saw a book like this was last time. Well, my system is too middle-class. If it wasn't too brain-burning, the more I write, the more confusing it becomes. I might still be following it.

The first few chapters are too full of loopholes, and the plot where the protagonist scares people away is too retarded. You can at least use some kind of coercion at his peak. This villain is so mentally retarded that he can be scared away by the protagonist. Also, the Chai family has passed one night, and they are not suspicious. They are so generous, and the protagonist can still handle the sword. A plot full of loopholes is too outrageous.

I feel like the emotional scenes are a bit awkward.

The protagonist really looks like a dog! Can you die if you lick a dog?

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Thank you very much for your support! I usually immerse myself in typing and don't look at the background very much, so there may be less interaction. However, I will read everyone's book reviews. No matter whether they are good or bad, I will correct them or encourage them. I hope this book will make everyone happy to read it. I see that some book friends are more concerned about whether there is a single female protagonist or multiple female protagonists. I am a layman and I don't trade in stocks. I try my best to write a story that everyone is happy with. If you are a book friend who likes a single female protagonist, you may feel embarrassed. Of course, the male protagonist will not be a bulldozer with no need for affection. I can only say that everything that should be there will be there, and it will fall into place. This is my first time trying system fantasy. The scale is still being explored. If I don't receive a 404, it will be considered a success. Don't worry about whether there will be a tj or whether there will be thunder or something like that. I understand the rules. Don't worry and just add a bookshelf and that's it. Finally, please ask me to pursue my reading and collection. It seems a bit late to ask after the test promotion is over...

Jiang Chanyi is so annoying. I know the author wants to create a series about little witches rejoicing in their enemies, but this woman simply refuses to listen and is very arrogant. The male protagonist also likes to have a good impression of her for no reason and will fight for her through life and death. To be honest, the VIP experience card part is so disgusting. If you want to kill her, just kill Jiang Chanyi to repay this. I am speechless.

Okay, it suits my taste. There is no need to pay too much attention to those people who complain. Most of them are just fake accounts and free prostitutes. The author can just write his own story. Full order on shelves

The author used to write otaku novels, right? Otaku spirit is very strong. It's not that there's something wrong with the otaku style, I think Riqing is fine myself. It's just that Qidian's otaku novels have several common problems. In order to force the plot, the characters are often changed. One moment he was joyful, and the next moment he was bitter and resentful. You started out as a social beast who could lead projects independently, but after a few pictures, you turned into a primary school student who blushes when he talks about double majors. Trying to write about everything turns out to be completely different.                                                   It seems that the whole world revolves around the protagonist, and the "you can tell by looking at his eyes that he is not joking" really makes both parties stupid.                      The scene you cut is so messy, it cuts to the past and then comes back again, and there is no causal relationship between the key scenes. This looks so tiring. I believe most people come to Qidian to read to relax and pass the time.