Invincible from the Moment I Saw Health Bars

Common problems with this type of book 1. Level suppression: The author initially gave the protagonist too much of a power-up, but later realized he couldn't control it, so he used various methods to suppress the protagonist's level. Among these, making the protagonist's intelligence decrease when allocating points and using various coincidences to waste the protagonist's points were the most…

This book is alright, readable. But these tiny poisonous spots are densely packed together... In the early stages, the male protagonist's sister relied purely on the protagonist's halo, and even later on, otherwise she would have been defeated long ago. The male protagonist isn't a particularly wicked person, but he's a gang member who runs a casino and a brothel, making the boss very happy.

It's alright, a few minor flaws, nothing serious. But the protagonist going to the toilet to level up has happened several times. Does he think he's being funny? No, it just makes people uncomfortable. And this "fox-skin immortal scripture" thing only reminds me of a horror resurgence, it's distracting. Honestly, comparing it to other works just makes me think of the difference in writing quality. It's completely unnecessary.

The core of system novels lies in the system itself, with the novel unfolding around the system's settings. The problem with your book is that although your system settings referenced many existing settings, they still have loopholes, and to a large extent, they suppress the protagonist's strength.

The writing is alright, but the protagonist you've created seems a bit off-topic. Attribute points for leveling up are destined to be scarce, making leveling up increasingly difficult. Since skills can be improved through practice, it's all about using attribute points to upgrade skills. I didn't expect the protagonist's wild imagination to lead to this; I wasn't even thinking about increasing proficiency.

He even laughed so hard his teeth were showing. It was a bit watery, but still pretty good.

Think about it. A single escort mission is a life-or-death job, normally only worth one or two taels of silver. That's only five taels if there's an unexpected windfall. But going up the mountain, with good aim, you can easily grab a bow and buy a few arrows for three taels a day. That's all you get for risking your life?

The biggest problem with writing attribute point systems is the chaotic data. This author really poisoned my imagination! The 5 attribute points for leveling up to level 2 disappeared when I leveled up to level 3, leaving only the 5 points from level 3. Did you eat them?

The writing is good, but the plot is terrible. The protagonist has a cheat code but still passively follows the crowd. Shouldn't the protagonist be finding the best goals and methods to gain experience, building power and training subordinates? These are essential for finding cultivation techniques and elixirs, gathering information, or protecting his sister.

The protagonist killed a fully grown tiger on his own. While tigers aren't considered particularly terrifying creatures in this world, they're still tigers, and they pose a certain degree of danger; otherwise, the government wouldn't have offered a bounty. Several petty thugs who usually cause trouble knew about the protagonist killing the tiger, so why would they provoke him?