Invincible from the Moment I Saw Health Bars

Common problems with this kind of book 1. Over-leveling. The author over-levels things at the beginning and later finds out that he can no longer control them, so he uses various methods to under-level the book. Among them, making the protagonist lose his wits when adding points and using various coincidences to waste the protagonist points are the most disgusting to readers 2. The combat power collapses, the over-hang is too large, and the world view is designed to be too small. As a result, the writing power cannot be controlled, and it usually ends with a eunuch. 3. Not remembering the data. Some authors are lazy and ignore the protagonist's data, thinking that they can remember it with their brains and do not record the data in the document, resulting in some large and small errors from time to time when the protagonist updates the panel. 4. Plot design, some authors may suddenly have no inspiration and will use some outrageous events to promote the plot, but this will bore the readers Writers must be careful about these points, and I personally do not particularly recommend writing emotional dramas, and the 'sister' is really bad. Don't let the sister cause trouble (whether active or passive) and then the protagonist wipes the butt. No one likes this routine, just let her live a normal life and then slowly fade away. I read a lot of attribute flow system flow and yakuza flow novels that were originally good ideas, but because they added an emotional scene that the author thought was 'good', this novel fell off the shelves. Because when you write a love drama, you screen out more than half of the originally small readers, leaving only those who like the system and like your love drama. And after it is put on the shelves, at least 70% to 80% of people will go to prostitutes for free. After screening out more than half of the already small readers, you will then screen out 70 to 80%. Then subtract the commission from the platform, and you will hardly make much money. If you can't make money and don't have the motivation to continue writing, you will end up on the street. If you want to make money, be as pure as possible in a restricted circle, do as little as possible, and make fewer mistakes. Readers not only want masterpieces with millions of fans, but also food and fodder without poisonous points (the absence of poisonous points is a highlight)

This book is okay, I can read it But there are so many little poisonous points In the early stage, the male protagonist's sister purely relied on the halo of the protagonist, even in the later part, otherwise she would have been killed long ago. The male protagonist is not a treacherous person, but he is a member of a gang who runs casinos and brothels. He makes everyone laugh. His character is very contradictory. I hope the male protagonist is more cruel, so that it can be connected with those fighting scenes. The description of the battle is definitely not good for the male protagonist. The most outrageous thing is that the female character who has a good relationship with the male protagonist is arranged. I am really speechless. What do you think of this terrible street routine? What kind of logic can make a female character follow the male protagonist to commit suicide and then disappear? What kind of logic can make a female character happen to be born with a furnace body? You can't have sex in advance, otherwise you will explode and die. I don't want to read it on these two points.

It's okay, there are some minor flaws, but it's not a major problem. It's just the protagonist going to the toilet to upgrade. It's happened a few times. Do you think it's humorous? No, it's just annoying. And the Fox Skin Immortal Sutra will only make people think of the resurrection of terror and drama. I will compare, and to be honest, I will only feel that there is a gap between what you wrote. Totally unnecessary.

In fact, the core of system writing lies in the system, and the novel revolves around the system settings. The problem with your book is that although your system settings refer to many settings, there are still loopholes, and to a large extent, they still suppress the protagonist's strength. Let's not talk about why the protagonist, who has been criticized many times in the text, does not practice archery. Let's take the experience of killing animals as an example. Before it was put on the shelves, the protagonist himself also thought about gaining experience of killing fish, but he did not proceed. The reason given was that killing fish in the river was too troublesome. Then why not dig a small fish pond at home, buy wild fish from fishermen and put them in? Is it troublesome to kill fish in a small fish pond? Your chapter clearly states four points of experience for black fish and three points for crucian carp. How many fish can you buy with the money you have on hand? Couldn't the protagonist have imagined this? The most popular system flow in Qidian right now is proficiency. Why? Because he has solved many previous system setting problems very well, it is generally difficult for readers to complain and find loopholes. It is recommended that the author write the proficiency level directly if he writes the next book.

The writing is okay, but there is something wrong with the brain of the protagonist in your setting. The attribute points for upgrade are destined to be rare, and the upgrade will definitely become more difficult as you go to the later stage. Since skills can be upgraded with practice, the skills can be upgraded with attribute points both inside and outside the words. I didn't expect the proficiency to increase. I didn't expect the protagonist's imagination.

Yahuazi laughed out loud. Although it was a little watery, it was not bad

Think about it, a dart was sent out earlier, which was a life-saving job. Normally, it only cost one tael of silver, but this was only five taels due to an unexpected gain. When going up the mountain, if you are accurate, you can just pick up a bow and buy a few arrows for three taels of silver a day. You have to work hard for this little money? And none of the experienced hunters here can use bows and arrows, right? He has no accuracy and no hunting experience. One rabbit a day. The protagonist is holding a bow and has a see-through device to kill indiscriminately. Is the protagonist a sharp archer? 😒😒, I just want to know what the basis is, let alone the question of how much money can buy...

The biggest poisonous point in writing Jidianliu novels is the confusing data. The author really poisoned me. The 5 attribute points from level 2 are gone when you upgrade to level 3. There are only 5 points from level 3. Have you eaten it?

The writing is good, but the plot is terrible. The main character is passive and just goes with the flow. Shouldn't the protagonist find the best goals and methods to gain experience? It's also indispensable to build up power and cultivate subordinates. It's very useful whether it's finding skill pills, collecting information, or protecting your sister. There is also the fact that the whole world feels too isolated, the spread of information is slower than in ancient times without extraordinary beings, and it feels unreasonable to have families doing business everywhere. Finally, the officialdom is very weak and has no sense of existence. Why is this human race not extinct?

The protagonist killed an adult insect on his own. Although tigers are not very scary creatures in this world, they are still tigers after all. They are dangerous to a certain extent, otherwise the government would not reward him with a reward. Several gangsters who usually show off their ferocity know that the protagonist killed the tiger, so why would they provoke the protagonist? The biggest characteristic of little hooligans is that they bully the weak and fear the strong. Even if they have no brains, they should know that the protagonist is not easy to mess with. Are they seeking death by provoking the protagonist? I really don't understand this brain circuit. The same goes for the companions of the protagonist at the beginning of the dart game. Although the crazy maniac was injured by others, it was the protagonist who made the final move. The companions seem to have forgotten the same thing and are very disdainful of the protagonist. Want to get some benefits from the protagonist? What kind of brain circuits are these? Do people in this world want money rather than their lives? If that were the case, they would have rebelled long ago.