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A ten-year bookworm gives the author some suggestions 1. The vocabulary is so complicated that I can't find the key point. I read five chapters and I didn't even know the name of the protagonist 2. There is no need to open another chapter to switch the perspective. The most important thing in the novel is the sense of immersion Opening another chapter will lead to a strong sense of fragmentation 3. Don't spend your attention on insignificant supporting characters. , The most important thing in the first few chapters of the novel is to develop the plot line. The personality, behavior, and goals of the protagonist and important supporting characters should be shown as quickly as possible 4. The portrayal of emotions is too rigid and formulaic. It feels like you just imagined a frozen scene and then wrote it for him, without showing the dynamics of the characters

The setting of the soul contract is exciting, the boy and the girl do not cheat each other but team up, and the anti-routine cultivation of immortals looks comfortable, and it is not a loss to pursue.

Originally I just wanted to watch it casually, but ended up finishing it in one go. Please write more of this kind of immortality writing that does not follow routines.

What kind of fairy book is this? It's so beautiful.

A rare entry point into the story. The path to cultivating immortality is different from what I have seen before. The setting is very ingenious.

Someone on the post bar shared the research diary of golden elixir. I think it is quite interesting. If you have time, take a good look at it. Keep it up.

I saw the Jindan research diary on Tieba, so I came to give it a thumbs up. It's actually a book. I'll give you the monthly pass. The author will update it soon 😡

This novel is indeed different from the fairy tales on the market. It abandons the routine of fighting monsters, upgrading, and rushing to the top. The protagonist of this book seems to have really traveled to the cruel world of immortal cultivation. The protagonist is as weak as grass and flutters in the wind. All the frustrations along the way can only be swallowed secretly. The red margins I met along the way also left regrets one after another. I have to say, this really gave me a knife.

I came from a poetry forum. I can tell that the author's writing style is good, but I think that since you want to write poetry, it might be better if you understand more systematically and learn more about the composition and structure of poetry, otherwise it will be a bit nondescript.

Come on, come on, I came here to read poetry, come on!

I love this book and can't wait for the big update!

Actually updatedｸﾞｯ!(๑•̀ㅂ•́)و✧

Are the chapters in the middle out of order?

The author really enjoyed using the flashback method to read just ten chapters, writing each chapter. To be honest, it's embarrassing to read too much!

I finished reading it in one go. I feel it was well written. I hope the author can stabilize it with updates.

Let's read some healing articles about cultivating immortals. I'm tired of fighting all the time.

The writing is still very interesting, I look forward to the subsequent plot

Fading away from the fierce conflicts that are common in fairy tales, watch two young people relying on each other and walking side by side on the long road of cultivating immortality.

A very gentle fairy tale. There is no crazy killing, but more of two people comforting and supporting each other. The writing is plain and healing, and makes me feel at ease when I read it.

I've finished reading it. It's a great male video with a comfortable rhythm and a refreshing balance!

Tieba army🤓

I, I, I am here again. I just read the article carefully again. I feel that there are too many "," signs. I think as a representative of the Chinese class, we should also use other punctuation marks. After all, we must be rigorous, hahaha...