There Can Be No Problem with the Heroine I Cultivated

First of all, buddy, your writing is really good. This is one of the few books I have seen that I am satisfied with in the past few months. The plot is novel, the characters are well drawn, and the writing is okay Dude, with this score, I feel it is difficult for you to keep writing 🤤 I personally feel that you just lack a chance now. Anyway, the current book seems to be really in line with my taste, and I am quite interested in pursuing more.

This is posted by Y Bar to recommend books. Come on bro💪

Well written, please support it. The idea of ​​playing games to influence reality has been written a lot, but yours is more creative and very good. In your setting, the protagonist can actually operate to affect the future. Unlike other games that simply manifest and work hard to achieve a good ending, yours can better highlight the subjective initiative of the protagonist, and the plot has more room to play. Come on, stop cutting it, the plot is very interesting so far.

Author, you have been poisoned, are you there?

If I remember correctly, Aelita killed Zhu Qian to replace him, right? Her teammates killed Zhu Qian's father, and the protagonist regarded Zhu Qian as a game NPC? Just die?

The most unpleasant part of the plot is that of Zhu Qian. Although she is a supporting character, she is dead or not and who killed her. She is the girl who has been chasing you in college. She is still a friend and she doesn't care at all. Doesn't Licking Gou deserve a plot?

Jiang Yunxin

What do you say? I feel that the heroine likes the hero not out of "like" at all: Alita and the hero get together entirely for personal gain. I can't understand how Jiang and the male protagonist work together. The male protagonist didn't bring anything to Jiang except his aunt's compulsion. Why does Jiang care about the male protagonist? It stands to reason that normal people shouldn't be full of disgust? Love is mutual, but why have I never seen the hero's dedication from Jiang's perspective? Now Aelita has even overshadowed Jiang's status, which is even more puzzling. Also, does this male protagonist have no psychological burden at all in having a harem? With Jiang casually hanging out with Alita, he seemed to be showing "guilt". But the question is, if you are really "guilty", why are you still having an affair with He Keren? Are you going to flirt with your aunt?

There are many female protagonists. Why does the protagonist want to investigate Zhu Qian himself? Just tell his aunt. If something is wrong with Zhu Qian recently, someone will investigate. The protagonist's strength is not clear.

The book is good, but the emotional line is only poisonous. There is also the problem of the protagonist's parents. It is a bit outrageous that no one comes to redress. Soldiers of a country can become deserters and even affect the son of a hero to become the son of a deserter. So the protagonist still has a sense of belonging to this country? It hurts to read more than 40 chapters. The aunt is the heroine, and all kinds of ambiguities are very nice.

Your emotional description is the same as my English score. Guess I am complimenting you?

Warm yourself

Why is the heroine called Zhao Erlan and not Zhao Erlan? Obsessive-compulsive disorder is very painful 😡😡😡

Author, if you can update faster, it will definitely become popular.

It's really well written, everyone should come and read it

I have only read nine chapters and will comment on them. This novel is simply unbeatable, mainly because the comment section is so funny, and one chapter takes five or six minutes to read. The most exciting thing about this book is all in the comment area. Every time I read the book, I want to see what my book friends say. It's obviously a passionate harem story, but why do I want to laugh?

The biggest problem with this book is that there is no fairy lady with big breasts and perky butt, strong personality, sense of justice, kindness and simplicity to come to the protagonist. The book is too monotonous and boring.

At the beginning, it feels like a small world with endless fun.

How does it feel?