From Obituary Writer to Great Old Ones

From the chapters I have read so far, the protagonist's ordinary life should suppress a strange and bizarre world. Although the pace is a bit slow and there are too many daily descriptions, some detailed descriptions, characterization and writing style are indeed excellent. I hope the author can speed up the pace to present a complex and tense world; and add more dramatic conflicts. Overall, the flaws do not hide the advantages.

Brothers, please stop raising books, I'm really dying of them. The author begs you to read it. I recommend the best one, but it's okay if you don't have it. Brothers, the author really can't take it anymore. Because I'm not popular enough, I haven't been able to be recommended. Now I'm panicking. I really don't want to mess up anymore. Please please. Jun

I am the author, because there have been too many people complaining about the procrastination of fighting recently, and I am considering whether to delete it, streamline it, and then publish it...

They say they want a peaceful life, but troubles just remain unsolved until they become bigger troubles. The author gives the protagonist powerful abilities and a broken brain. Just like Carlson, even if the protagonist is too kind and doesn't want to get rid of him, you can still arrange for him to retire. Even if you don't retire, you can at least give him a vacation. But the protagonist wants him to keep causing trouble, which will eventually make it impossible for the protagonist to survive. Maybe this is a plot that the author has set up a long time ago to let the protagonist go on the path he should take, but it also turns the protagonist into a mentally retarded person.

The scene dragged on so much that the conversation with the female forensic doctor in the morgue actually lasted for more than ten chapters. We were still eager to see how the old man would avenge his son. These ten chapters of popular science completely consumed my patience. I didn't expect that it would not be over yet, and I would have to go have a drink with the female forensic doctor again. Author, do you know what priorities are? A good novel was ruined by you like this.

This is the first time I have seen the setting of a female doctor being used from Chapter 20 to Chapter 35. Obviously, the protagonist can slowly find out the setting, which can reduce the sense of inconsistency in the plot, make the article more reasonable, and most importantly, avoid the fatigue of reading the setting continuously. I think a lot of people give up here.

Many people have complained to me about the repetition of chapters. But I checked the backend and there is no such problem. It should be that the front end is not refreshed. I have adjusted all the chapters before. Maybe some book readers will find that the chapters are not correct when they read it again. Just click on a few more chapters, exit and reopen or just refresh the page.

This kind of novel, which has no main outline and is written as soon as possible, is both difficult for myself and disgusting for readers. The characters of the supporting characters fall apart at a moment's notice, and then they are picked up again and are called round and come back. The author's description of the protagonist is very confusing, as if he is affected by extraordinary power, or the author's writing skills are not good enough, and his IQ fluctuates high and low. The author wants to arrange a better identity background and plug-ins for the protagonist. I can understand it. From the beginning of the protagonist's self-mutilation to the present, he has been arranged in various ways, and it seems that there is another soul that has been secretly peeking at the protagonist's body. Reading the description in the book, this seems to be the soul of the protagonist's original body. I just want to ask the author, with your own IQ, can you handle such a foreshadowing? You don't need to read this book to know that it's going to be a mess. Please, author, please set an outline before the New Year, and then weigh your own IQ. Don't write plots and characters that you can't control. Another thing is, don't use words that describe women for the men in the book. It's too crude.

The protagonist is like a flatterer, the supporting characters are making up stories, and the protagonist is talking below. There are more than 20 chapters in a cross talk. The logic of the main cross talk is very strange. It seems that the protagonist is answering the teacher's questions like a student. The most outrageous thing is that the teacher praises the answer well.

Audience sequence one writer? ? ? ?

The female forensic doctor was so out of the way. She was fine up front, but when she got there she looked stupid.

The subject matter is good, but the writing style needs to be improved. The protagonist needs to find clues to find the deputy director. It went so well that I thought there was a big pit for the protagonist to jump into. But you told me that you just wanted to see the protagonist lose face, which is a bit childish, and the female forensic doctor said so much. It's just for the protagonist to help her find the sealed artifact so that the fishermen can benefit. It's untenable. It depends on how you deal with it later. The latest one is to recruit a younger brother, but the younger brother almost killed you. After the situation is reversed, people just say peace and agree? It's too abstract.

After reading more than 30 chapters, I ended up explaining an extraordinary world for several chapters. I feel that this is not good. The protagonist should explore it slowly by himself. Others cannot tell you everything at once. Losing the sense of mystery at the beginning will affect the subsequent reading. The protagonist should explore the world through various events, rather than a supporting character explaining the world to the protagonist for several chapters.

Personally, I think Phoenix's desire to kill the protagonist is really unreasonable. First of all, the protagonist only asked him to be an informant and did not let him die. Secondly, Phoenix's answer to the so-called mental retardation problem was also stupid enough. I actually thought that just finding a scapegoat would be enough. The problem is that even Charlie Luciano has a rule against killing police officers unless absolutely necessary. The reason is simple. The consequence is that the police intensify their investigation of crimes. It can be said that Drizzt will definitely kill him.

The writing style of this article is the same as when I play an open world game. I pick up the main plot and open the map. Then I start to clear the branch plots and scan the map. If I don't get it all clean, I feel like I won't touch the main plot.

As an author, let me tell you something about this book. As expected, this book will not be on the shelves and will continue to be written. There is no need to worry about eunuchs in the short term. Even in the worst case scenario, the holes that need to be filled will be filled. I spent a few hours yesterday redesigning the entire plot framework, and the problem of lack of focus later will be solved. Then the author is new. You may have discovered that the author has a background in writing short and medium stories. It was his first time writing a long novel. He had no idea how to control it and made many mistakes in the process. The story line is confusing, the writing is depressing, and the settings are too concentrated, to name a few. As for the story frame, to be honest, I didn't know anything about it at first. Not to mention how to write it well. I really thought about making major changes, but in the end I found that the workload was too much, so I gave up. There should be major changes in the future when there is time. I have to admit that I was ambitious when I wrote this story. A sentence was actually deleted from the original introduction because it was too dramatic, but it still fit the original intention of writing this story. "For whom the bell tolls, it tolls for you, even when there is injustice." I want to write the story of how a fake policeman turned into a real policeman. I want to write the story of how an obituary writer used his pen to bring order to the world. I want to write a story about how an ordinary person who is accustomed to avoiding being a little smart realizes that courage is more important than all calculation. That's about it.

It's really a weird world, and it's really not suitable for everyone to be happy. The atmosphere created in the front is completely wasted in the science setting and the long story dialogue in the back.

The fighting chapters in recent chapters should really be revised. Unsatisfactory reading: Article 1. There is no explanation at all as to why the protagonist asked his colleagues to arrive 40 minutes later, especially when the protagonist has realized that Phoenix is ​​going to attack him. According to the character of the protagonist, he should have asked his colleagues to come over quickly, especially when a parade has been discovered. Article 2, why was Phoenix let go at the end? The protagonist was seriously injured after the fight. The only benefit he got was Phoenix's information about the gypsies, and then he got the information about the black beads. However, when the readers have no idea how important the black beads are, it is unreasonable for the protagonist to pay for it. At least the payment and reward are not the same. Article 3: The expression is too complicated. Phoenix's story about his gypsies is too long. In fact, he only needs to answer 4 questions. The first question is why he attacked the protagonist. The second question is about the gypsies. The third question is why he can control those people. The fourth question is why he doesn't kill the protagonist. After answering these four questions, Phoenix's plot should end here. More space should be used to explain the protagonist's explosion and why colleagues are required to come to the rescue after 40 minutes. Failure to answer this point will make readers very unhappy. Suggestions on modifications. Point 1: If Phoenix is ​​really to be described as a very important supporting role, then the reasons for Phoenix to attack the protagonist must be rationalized. Before this, Phoenix's abilities need to be explained. His abilities can be told through the plot of Phoenix betraying his boss. Then during this process, Phoenix will encounter a huge dilemma, and from this dilemma, Phoenix believes that only the protagonist can help him escape. However, Phoenix was not sure whether the protagonist's ability was up to standard, so he decided to test the protagonist. This can also rationalize why Phoenix did not kill the protagonist. In addition, readers can also realize that the protagonist can gain huge benefits by helping Phoenix. This is the most important point and can increase the sense of substitution. Article 2: If Phoenix is ​​not described as an important supporting role, then the perspective of the entire picture should be mainly fixed on the protagonist. It is necessary to use a large space to describe why the protagonist asked his colleagues to arrive after 40 minutes. This can be explained by the original soul in the protagonist's body. That is the protagonist. To integrate the soul of the original body with him, it needs to go through a near-death battle or similar rituals. After careful consideration, the protagonist feels that 40 minutes should be a safe time. In the case of Phoenix's betrayal, the protagonist actually has only one choice, which is to kill Phoenix directly. Only in this way will readers have enough sense of involvement. And with the protagonist's original ability, you can also know what Phoenix was doing 15 minutes before his death, or after the protagonist merges with the body's original soul, this ability becomes more powerful and more information can be obtained. There may be readers who can imagine a better plot, but in recent chapters, it is unreasonable to focus all the perspectives on Phoenix without explaining the changes in the protagonist's body.

I'm done with it, so here's my review. The author's writing is good, and the background is right, but it feels too complicated to read. I think there are only two problems. First, I felt very jumpy as I wrote it, especially the paragraphs about setting up and supplementing the background. It's too concentrated. It would be much better to streamline or break it up and insert it into the text so that readers can piece together the information themselves. This is especially true in the long section where the rivalry in the alley leads to dialogue from reconciliation. It looks very irritating, and gives people a strong sense of separation from the previous article. Second, the background is expanded, but not fully expanded. The background does not feel very prominent. The events are long, complex, and intertwined, but not particularly fascinating, how can I put it? If it wasn't particularly engaging, the story would feel like it was dragging. The suspense of the long main story that revolves around each branch is not particularly strong, and it tastes neither salty nor bland. I hope the author's subsequent stories will be as refreshing as the opening chapter. Come on

There were so many setting chapters at the beginning that I almost fell asleep reading them. Going through them quickly didn't affect me at all.

Eighty chapters have passed, and it feels like thirty chapters of popular science, twenty chapters of digging and unfilled environmental descriptions, and thirty chapters of actual plot. These eighty chapters start with receiving the letter and tell about the protagonist's use of "real-life experience" in time travel, which resulted in negative states + nightmares (actually it was used once in the plot), and the ability to write obituaries was used twice (the result of not writing = wasted). Popular Science has written four or five chapters casually, starting with the introduction of the extraordinary and the protagonist, and looking at the books left behind by the predecessor. All the holes dug have no results. Whether it is colleagues' anomalies, greed or beads, they are all said and done (these I mentioned are just examples) 🙄🙄 It makes me so anxious