I'm a Businessman in the Horror Game World

Author, let me make a small comment here... Your theme is a businessman. I think the main line of the mission should follow the player, rather than the player following the protagonist, because the protagonist is just a businessman. The story frame is very good, and the plot is also good, except for the occasional poison. And the current power system is not fully displayed. Multiple world views and multiple power systems can be displayed. As a merchant, the protagonist should have a wide variety of products, even many gadgets that are worthless but slightly useful. The role of the protagonist should be like that of an old man or a golden finger. From my current feelings, it feels like the protagonist has done all the work for the players. The protagonist can secretly search for duplicate items and clues, and then sell them to the players. There is also the current currency system. Logically speaking, it is too easy for the protagonist to get points, and if you get too many points in the early stage, it will definitely collapse in the later stage. And I noticed something, you can only get 1000 points by killing a big boss protagonist. In the first dungeon, two players spent 3,000 together to get the stone. In the second dungeon, if I remember correctly, I spent 7,500 to buy a skill book from the protagonist. This is no problem, but how many points should one person survive if four players fight the boss? I think it's impossible for everyone to have a thousand points. If the dungeon bosses are so cheap, wouldn't the later bosses cost hundreds of millions each? A cross with no idea of ​​its use in Chapter 3 costs 2,000 points. That's two bosses in Chapter 2, and a piece of equipment that can withstand a little damage costs 3,000 points. And people are actually willing and able to pay. So I suggest the author update the economic system and fill in these holes. This book is indeed a good book that can make people's eyes shine. I hope to accompany this book to the end.

What can I say, this book is okay and worth reading But the content inside and outside the copy seems to be written by two different authors😂 Then the book is named after a businessman but the content is a bit uninteresting, not like a businessman but not enough. The players who deceived and abducted them actually looked like them at first, but they didn't look the same when they met the women (sisters) in the second copy. They gave them drinks and begged for their lives, and defeated a boss in seconds... And then returned to the real world to save the female doctor... Chih. 😏 It feels a bit like starting high and going low. As for the second part, I haven't seen it yet and I don't plan to read it yet. I will go back and read the second part before deciding whether to change the comment or delete the comment and delete the book and run away for three times

I feel that the characteristic of a businessman is that he is only mercenary, but the protagonist does not feel like this

The title and introduction made me think that businessmen should be the main subject, but after reading more than ten chapters, the relevant content does not account for much. Also, there are too many descriptions of fighting scenes. Of course, this may not be a problem. It is mainly a matter of personal preference and the author's writing technique. Usually when I encounter this kind of content, I always skip it quickly. This time I just happened to be listening to a book on the road, and it felt like it was endless and too over the top.

How should I put it? The title of your book is Businessman, and your introduction also means the same. You should develop more in this area, and the fun part is the same. I personally think the fun part of businessman is more about cutting leeks and showing off in front of others. This aspect is not impossible for a solo show. I just feel that the author's ability to describe fighting scenes is weak. Specifically, you can consider the Super Mechanic, or the strongest shopkeeper in history, Trafford Buyers Club, etc., You can stay behind the scenes. A little more fluid, more behind-the-scenes calculations in the early stage, and a battle of wits and courage with the players, and a more enlightened mind. Looking at it now, it is too dry. The pig's feet can be a little deeper, a little more ambitious, and more urban. The several encounters with the players so far have been a bit intellectually depressing. You can use more descriptions of the players and let the players tell them. The awesomeness of the protagonist can be integrated into the script. Just like the official game store, intelligence stories are also sold for money. Why not do it? Let players take the protagonist as he should be, instead of being so sudden every time, which is very dramatic. Real life can actually be appropriately downplayed, which is not the point

There is no need for the author to make the protagonist miserable. Readers are really not that sentimental. There is no need for the protagonist to be terminally ill

Tell me your opinion 1. Merchants should not help other players fight monsters 2. It is best not to bring other players in when opening a map 3. The levels are not clear. The first map is new and the second map becomes a boss 4. Maintain a sense of mystery and don't be too proactive.

I feel that merchants should act like merchants, instead of following players closely, hiding their identity among players, and doing everything the players should do. They should create a mysterious atmosphere, appear elusive, and appear when players need them to sell goods.

The description and writing style are fine, but the businessman eats more brains than strength, wandering among the major forces, but you attach too much importance to strength, digress from the topic, and fall into clichés.

The businessman I imagine based on your profile basically doesn't interfere with the buyer's affairs. It's best to be mysterious and a little bohemian. When others see you, you are the kind of boss who knows a lot and has a lot of good things. He has certain principles but also has the shrewdness of a businessman. It will appear in unexpected places for some buyers (it is a professional mysterious businessman found in many games), that would be perfect.

I just read the plot and it's interesting, but I feel like the author could pay more attention to the details. The protagonist's first mission is two thousand trading points, so why are the prices of fingers and rags not one thousand each but eight hundred each? It's unreasonable. If the player doesn't buy the stone, the protagonist will die. This is unreasonable. The protagonist doesn't know the outcome. He must first ensure his own life and then pursue profits.

How to say it? I have read an apocalyptic book before The protagonist in it is also a businessman, codenamed Zero, the original one. There are a total of 3732 businessmen in the world, distributed in various parts of the world In that book, the protagonist is in a dominant position, but in this book, the protagonist obviously does not have a dominant position. The protagonist is following the player, not the player following the protagonist.

The first 10 or so chapters were okay, but the female doctor smelled like shit from the beginning. . .

You are the Duke in Resident Evil 8, right?

It's pretty good. Why is there no one there?

Merchants should be randomly active in various dungeons and novice villages

. . . Let me give you my own opinion. The author has a lot of ideas, but the subject matter this time may not be suitable for the author. In my impression, if the profession is a businessman, he should not be on the front line as often as the adventurer. It is very dramatic. The profession is not determined so early or it may be better to change the profession. . . Then there's the one who saw the castle. . In order for 5 people to complete the ritual, they must complete one ritual condition every day within 3 days. . I don't know if I understood it wrong. . . Except for the hidden condition, one person will die every day within 3 days. . I really don't understand

What skills, items, talents? Please feel free to tell me what you want, but don't make it too complicated or perverted.

Your limit is too low. Why do you want to fix the game? Wouldn't it be nice to go to a parallel world and do business? 😰Your subject matter is too limited.

The foreshadowing is too white, like a featureless flat house. I hope it will burn your brain.

I thought it was a horror novel, but it turned out not to be scary at all.

I raised about 60 chapters after two months? But it's okay. Try to match the title of the book. Just be frightened. I don't want to keep books to death…

I was attracted by the title of the book at first. It is both weird and businessman, which gives people a feeling of invincibility. The subject matter is novel. I thought that I would be either a lawful and neutral traveling merchant, or a chaotic neutral traveling merchant, free and easy. I saw the first transaction in the first few chapters. The cunning and treacherous character was quite to my taste. I thought I could keep it up for a while, but then it became an old routine of upgrading and fighting monsters. It was so clichéd that you might as well not set any goals, be less aggressive and relaxed. It was written in a strange world, in the game world, and occasionally bought and sold. I feel that many interesting stories can be collided. It's a pity that there is absolutely nothing written about this theme of weirdness and businessman.

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I don't know if the book is a good book, but I feel that the content of this book is not worthy of the title. Retreat

I'm a bit interested in this subject, I'll give it a try

I haven't read it yet. Can things be sold to players? Can they be sold to bosses? Of course it takes two days for a businessman to make money.

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