Magic Card: Card Making at the Beginning: Dumb King

Author, do you know why so few people read your book? It's because your basic skills are too poor, and your understanding of the characters is not enough. The plot is old-fashioned and the subject matter is good, but you must write something you can grasp. I have only read twenty chapters of your book, and I found that your understanding of these characters is completely insufficient.

I heard that the reason why Artoria's kingdom lost the battle was because Artoria ate too much and couldn't provide any reinforcements, so the soldiers went to the battlefield hungry and were defeated.

It's for Honkai Impact, but I hope the villain has some brains

Low EQ: The plot is old-fashioned High EQ: Praise for the classics

The whole book has 560,000 words, of which the real plot is estimated to be only 60,000 words, and the remaining 500,000 words are all dialogue.

The story of this book is old-fashioned, the plot is copied, and the writing is terrible. I really don't know how to read it.

Attributes of the author: A fast talker, too good at talking, and the dialogue is watery and nutrient-poor.

The subject matter is okay, but the whole text contains too much nonsense. If a fight with nonsense lasts for three to five chapters, I'm convinced.

After so many levels, he can't even blink instantly, and he still relies on counterattacks. I've never seen such a useless protagonist.

It's just like watching anime, I keep nagging before the fight starts.

This is a novel written ten years ago! Pretending to be cool, accepting a younger brother, slapping someone in the face,,, it's all stupid and brainless!

The protagonist and villain have no IQs, and they keep talking awkwardly inside. The number of water characters in Luoli is eight.

What about Gardevoir and Void Terror?

I didn't want to say it at first, but I was really shocked when I saw Chapter 19. The second card you wrote was a mistake. Not to mention that you wrote Wang Cai as an infinite sword system. In Chapter 19, wasn't it unnecessary to give the Holy Grail to Artoria?

I couldn't survive Chapter 5. Why did that city lord think that Rare couldn't beat Silver? Does the villain have an IQ?

This good guy just wants to get a bunch of beautiful cards, even Pikachu. Why should he connect Pikachu with the King of Heroes and just get a female? Isn't it okay? 😂😂😂😂😂Why not turn all the mythical beasts in Pokémon into beautiful girls?

I have new inspiration, I want to turn all the Pokémon gods into beautiful girls 😂😂😂😂😂

I have read a few of them so far, and they are okay. Of course, this is due to the subject matter. The subject matter is great, but the writing style is really old-fashioned. I suggest the author read more books by great masters. They are basically the same routines in the previous Long Aotian novels.

Golden Pickup

How should I put it? The subject matter is good, but the characters are completely lacking and the information is not well understood. Take the battle against King Bei as an example. During this period, my king held the sword in the stone, which is the "golden sword that guides victory" (caliburn), not the "sword of victory" (EXcaliber).

Can you write some male character cards? They are all female. Now I am sure that Pikachu will become a human in the future.

The crooked mouth of Aotianliu makes me feel like I could write a book after reading it.

With dragon-slaying magic, you might as well make Erza, the Fairy Queen! She has dragon blood herself!

This writing style... Needs to be improved

Is this a card? "Wouldn't it be better if you just said that you summoned those characters? Speechless. This card can talk, have its own consciousness, and memory. It can also be a partner, a wife, and a maid. Speechless."

The more I read, the more it looks like a studio article. The subject matter is okay. If the writing is better, it will be a good book.